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| | Honeydukes Register (Finished Fanfiction) Here you will find all the completed works of fanfiction and poetry belonging to our talented SnitchSeeker authors. | 
04-13-2004, 05:27 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Back from hibernation :P
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Hey! It's nice of you to consider reading my poems. Well, without further ado, here they are. Forgive me if they suck.
The Truth Behind the Smile
You asked me why I always smiled
I gave you no reply
Instead I gave my usual grin
It revealed no reason why
I know it makes you angry
To see me smiling here
Not showing any sadness
Not even little fear
But please be patient with me
I don't mean to be this way
It's just a habit I developed
Back in the old days
It was someone I loved so much
Who taught me how to smile
But the times we spent together
Lasted only for a while
She was taken from me
While I was still away
I reached home to find her gone
I lost my love that day
So now I smile, my pain I hide
A vow I'm bound to keep
To smile no matter the circumstances
When I really want to weep.
Hehe...So what do you think? Bad? Not too bad? Maybe even...good? Tell me okay? 
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04-14-2004, 07:07 AM
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| | Murtlap
Join Date: Apr 2004
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It's not too bad, bro.  | |
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04-17-2004, 07:20 PM
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| | Streeler
Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Wilmington Delaware
Posts: 215
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hey love this is leah i want say THAT IS GREAT
who did you lose well i will keep checkin up in here to see if you post more ok and come have a look see in my poems ok ! leah mae | |
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04-18-2004, 12:00 PM
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| | Ramora
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Canada
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That was honestly great Eric. lol
PAMS
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04-19-2004, 07:25 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Back from hibernation :P
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Thanks for replying! Here's more.
Pride
I don't want to say I'm sorry
I don't want to cry out loud
Instead, I'll repent in silence
And weep without a sound
I don't want to ask for anyone's help
Because I know I can toil this on my own
I do not want to seek companionship
Although I am all alone
I do not want to bow down
All because of my foolish pride
I cannot tell you I love you
Although I am dying inside
It's a bit cheesy, I know but it was one of my first poems so I decided to post it here.
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04-19-2004, 12:39 PM
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| | Ramora
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Canada
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'Twas lovely.
Bye, more soon pls.  | |
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04-25-2004, 02:33 AM
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| | Dementor
Join Date: Apr 2004
Posts: 98
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YuR pOEtRy Is vErY GoOd. kEeP GOiNg
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05-03-2004, 07:34 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Back from hibernation :P
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Made this in Math class. The lines are messed up but I didn't bother correcting it.
Drive For Superiority
The burden is on your shoulders;
they depend on you I know
The louder they cheer, the harder to
keep up the bravado
I see beneath your perfection, through
the cracks of the facade
Down to the weary emotions, because
you're slipping at the game
At first, I regarded you with contempt,
now I pity your failing act
Hidden feelings cry out loud loneliness
and someone to hold your hand
Your drive for superiority puzzles me,
no answers come to mind
Why continue the perfect litany, when
you're going to fall sometime?
Tell me what you think!
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05-03-2004, 07:49 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Back from hibernation :P
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Here's another one! I wrote this ages ago, though.
Coal-black
Ravens fly on black wings.
While angels soar on white.
Does it mean they are demons
These who soar obsidian flight?
Or lesser than the outcasts
Who brave the chill-spun night?
Or are they not but beings
Who've donned this cursed hue?
Are they not but weary mortlas
Much like me and you,
Who dream of endless freedom
Into the void-spawned blue?
Then why is it we fear them?
And shun their glass-eyed stare?
Fear that they should grasp your soul
As if it's even there
Or fear that they might bring you death
As if they give a care?
When all they want is liberty
To touch the endless sky.
As does the wind-borne eagle--
Naught else could satisfy
This really isn't one of my best poems but I like it nonetheless. Dedicated to all the 'claws out there!
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05-04-2004, 05:37 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Jan 2004
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Goddess, I Loved your poem, Drive For Superiority! That was so intense and emotional, whether you meant it to be or not. If I could come up with something like that in math class...I'd consider it a class not wasted. Brilliant!
*well, I did write a tiny lil one during a test once ^^ but that doesn't exactly count | |
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05-04-2004, 05:43 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Back from hibernation :P
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Thanks...Never got that much praise before. I'll post some more tomorrow or the day after.
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05-11-2004, 04:30 AM
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| | Streeler
Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Wilmington Delaware
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ello love tis me leah again i think your writing is really good so keep writing love ill check back soon *yawns sleepy* but ive posted a few new poems myself well i gtg leah ame | |
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05-17-2004, 07:54 AM
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| | Snidget
Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: California
Posts: 2,766
Hogwarts RPG Name:
William Ashlan McCollam
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Bravo Eric!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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05-17-2004, 08:09 PM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: The Highest cloud on Loon-Land
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Wow, I have never clicked on this section before and I really should have sooner - your poems are wonderful, I really Love Coal-Black.
Keep up the great work. :flowersmile:
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05-20-2004, 07:44 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Back from hibernation :P
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Here's another one! And thanks for your positive feedback!
Finished
You may think I'm weird, you may thing I'm queer
So cold, unmoving with little to fear
You may think I'm unusual, you may think I'm strange
You may think I'm stubborn, that I would never change
But that's a mask you see, 'cause I keep it all locked inside
Something that you'll never see, something I will always hide
Here's but a short tale of what you did to me
Maybe somehow you'll realize, you'll finally see
I've always wanted something, the love you never gave
When I'm near you physically, you treat me like a slave
When I tried to speak, when I tried to make my case
You would always, always shove it in my face
When I told you something, something you didn't know
You always answered with a swift, uncaring 'so?'
I always wanted to love, but you never showed me how
You never showed me affection, not even until now
I wanted us to feel close, not divided
But you kept us apart, that's what you decided
I wanted us to be friends or to be together
But you created a rift, one that would last forever
I know that these were my mistakes, I've wasted my time
My feelings for you are over, just like this rhyme.
So...uh...what do you think?
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05-21-2004, 01:55 AM
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| | Snidget
Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: California
Posts: 2,766
Hogwarts RPG Name:
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ooooo Eric I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!Very good!
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05-21-2004, 03:56 AM
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| | Streeler
Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Wilmington Delaware
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ello love tis me leah that last poem was really good i liked it thanks for reading my poems too i appreciate it oh and love ive posted three more so go have a look btw is your name eric well i would like to chat with you some time so pm me or something im firelily ok love well keep writng and ill keep reading leah mae | |
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05-21-2004, 06:05 AM
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| | Ramora
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Canada
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OMG Eric, you would not believe how incredibly jealous I am of you, your poems are AMAZING, how do you do it? 
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05-21-2004, 08:55 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Back from hibernation :P
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That's a secret....  . Anywho, you're pretty good, too, Dawn. The Grim Truth Take heed to words unsaid
Bear witness to deeds undone
For only when we lay in sleepless rest
Do we ponder of what has become
When the trees talk, when the stones cry
When the wind mocks your joy
When your shadow mimicks not your deeds
Thus, fall deeper into the abyss of troy
Then blind yourself to the splendors of life
And be deaf to the lies of the world
For in your pain enemies thrive
And in your joy traitors hide...
Judge not what you read
But yourself for ever judging
'Tis your choice whether or not to believe
For the grim truths of life exist to deceive
This was my first semi-dark poem.
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05-21-2004, 09:18 AM
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| | Chizpurfle
Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: On top of the Joshua tree in Deception Pass, stalking Tristan -_-
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WOW, your poems are really good. There's depth and meaning in them. I can relate to some of the ones you wrote. All in all, great work. Props for you. | |
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05-21-2004, 09:31 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Back from hibernation :P
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Yay! Thanks, Nikki! Here's another one since I'm in a good mood today. It's not one of my best though but I think most can relate to this.
The Person In the Mirror
I am a great pretender
Who plays many parts
I fool other people
I'm a liar at heart
You say I'm intelligent
Unafraid to do wrong
Faced with many obstacles
Yet still remain strong
You say you envy me
That I'm a lucky one
You thought I was happy
Cause I had lots of fun
But look at the mirror
Tell me what do you see
I know you see yourself
But do you see the real me?
I'm not that intelligent
I just try to get by
I am afraid of failure
But your expectations are too high
I'm just a little child
Also weak inside
Whenever there's danger
I always want to hide
So don't look at me
As if I'm a dream
I'm not a great treasure
Not a diamond that gleams
So don't trust that mirror
It shows not who I am
You see it shows nothing
If only you knew me then
The mirror is a shadow
You see who you appear to be
But you could never see what's inside
The way I couldn't, the real me.
:unsure: Well?
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05-21-2004, 09:44 AM
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| | Chizpurfle
Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: On top of the Joshua tree in Deception Pass, stalking Tristan -_-
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No problem
Excellent! This is one I relate to most. It's so true. wow, I look forword to more work from you. | |
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05-21-2004, 10:08 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: The Highest cloud on Loon-Land
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Quote: Originally posted by angelwings@May 20 2004, 06:18 AM
Here's another one! And thanks for your positive feedback!
Finished
You may think I'm weird, you may thing I'm queer
So cold, unmoving with little to fear
You may think I'm unusual, you may think I'm strange
You may think I'm stubborn, that I would never change
But that's a mask you see, 'cause I keep it all locked inside
Something that you'll never see, something I will always hide
Here's but a short tale of what you did to me
Maybe somehow you'll realize, you'll finally see
I've always wanted something, the love you never gave
When I'm near you physically, you treat me like a slave
When I tried to speak, when I tried to make my case
You would always, always shove it in my face
When I told you something, something you didn't know
You always answered with a swift, uncaring 'so?'
I always wanted to love, but you never showed me how
You never showed me affection, not even until now
I wanted us to feel close, not divided
But you kept us apart, that's what you decided
I wanted us to be friends or to be together
But you created a rift, one that would last forever
I know that these were my mistakes, I've wasted my time
My feelings for you are over, just like this rhyme.
So...uh...what do you think? Wow, that was beautiful, that hit a spot with me actually, I'm quite choked up now!
Amazing! Well done. :flowersmile:
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05-21-2004, 10:11 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Back from hibernation :P
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Gee, thanks! Want another one before I go?
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05-21-2004, 10:13 AM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: The Highest cloud on Loon-Land
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The person in the mirror is great too - I always had a thing about mirrors when I was a kid. I used to think What if they lied? We would never know what we really looked like - Stupid I know but I still remember the feeling, needless to say I was a strange kid! But I kinda know what your saying in this poem, because your right, You only see the shell.
Great work! :flowersmile:
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