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| Honeydukes Cellar (Incomplete Fanfiction) Here is the home to those stories who didn't quite get told in full. |
04-16-2011, 01:39 AM
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| Horklump
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Victoria Elise Vacker First Year | I Swear This Time I Mean It - Sa13+ Hello! I'm Dannifaith, but you can call me Danni. This is my first fan-fiction ever, so I would love some feedback. This includes my own character Caitlin Morrow and some others, and the wonderful Marauders. I, under no circumstances, own this world or the characters associated with JK Rowling's books. From Day One
The conductors at the London train station were starting to catch on that something very strange was going on that day. One of them swore they were seeing ghost, the other plead witchcraft. It always happened on the same day every year... This particular year they noticed a group of rowdy "ghost" pushing trolleys between platform nine and ten. The handsome one, who seemed to be leading the group, was talking loudly about how he and Potter would win the cup this year.
After they disappeared behind the barrier, the conductors saw a small, defiant looking girl with long strawberry blond hair and bright green eyes, running ahead of her parents. "Cat, wait up!" They called after her, pushing a cart filled with strange things and a cat carrier after the girl. Both what they assumed to be parents and the girl, Cat, were gone. They would swear for years to come that if you pressed your ear up to the barrier, you could here people rattle on about a place called 'Hogwarts'.
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Caitlin strode confidently down the train looking for an empty compartment, her kitten Raid poking his head up out of his basket every time she asked, "is this compartment full?" Sadly, it seemed no one wanted to spend their train ride with a new first year, or the first years had already made enough friends. Letting out a big sigh, she knocked on the glass of the last compartment before poking her head in. Two really attractive boys looked over first; one with shaggy black hair, grey eyes and a perfectly chiseled face, the other looked tired and over worked, with almost as shaggy brown hair with blue eyes. Caitlin's heart jumped in her throat. She hardly noticed the other two boys, one with black hair and glasses, the other short and chubby.
"Hello," she said, trying out the whole flirting concept, "is this compartment full yet?" She looked at them with her large emerald eyes, her thick, lush lashes creating the perfect frame. The chubby boy looked like he was about to say, "yes!" but was cut off as the darker haired boy said, "certainly not!" before scooting over for her to sit.
She was being closely watched now, like something that was rare, like she was intruding. "My name is Caitlin, but please, call me Cat." Her eyes dared them to ask what year she was. Eleven now, but soon she'd be older. ... Well, not soon, but they couldn't be much older than her. Her new favorite, the dark hair boy, started to introduce his friends.
"I'm Sirius Black," his goofy smile widened. "Over there is Mr. James Potter, the one next to him is Peter and -" but Sirius was cut off by the other pretty boy.
"I'm Remus Lupin, pleasure to meet you." His blue eyes staring right back at her before going to his book again. James looks extremely amused at the interruption.
"Yeah, that's Remus," Sirius continued anyway, probably feeling like his light was lost... But not for long. "We're in our second year at Hogwarts," he said proudly.
I knew they couldn't be much older than me, Caitlin thought to herself. "I'm a first year," for some reason she felt so... young.
"Don't worry Darling, I'm sure Sirius would like to show you around," Potter said slyly before pushing his glasses up. This caused Remus to look up again and scowl before taking a really good look at the girl. She was young, you could tell, but she had long strawberry blond hair and naturally thick black eye lashes. Her lips looked soft and light pink, like pretty pillows, and her skin had a pretty milky look to it. Not to mention her large emerald eyes that seemed to hypnotize.
No wonder they're acting strange, Remus thought, she's already pretty and obviously going to grow up to be attractive. Sirius was having the exact same thought. "Look!" All the heads turned to look out of the train window, the Hogsmeade Village station coming closer.
The four boys and the girl all hurried into their school robes, finishing up right before the Hogwarts Express came to a complete stop.
"Have fun on the boats, Kitten." Sirius winked, while James and Peter walked away towards carts with no horses.
"You can tell them to behave themselves," Remus whispered in her ear out of no where. "And here's to hoping you're in Gryffindor."
The next thing Caitlin knew she was standing in the Great Hall with all the other first years. It seemed like this would be the most important day of her life. This was the day that determined who you'd be best friends with, who you ate with, everything. Eventually her name was called
"Caitlin Morrow." She walked confidently to the Sorting Hat, not knowing what to expect.
"GRYFFINDOR!" The Hat called and the hall erupted with applause, especially from Sirius Black... Although you could see a look of pure happiness on Remus' face.
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04-19-2011, 03:23 AM
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| Plimpy
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I'm really interested in this so far, the writing is great and the marauders are acting like how I imagine they would have acted at that age. ![:D](https://www.snitchseeker.com/images/smilies/big_grin.gif) I love it so far! Can't wait to read some more!
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04-19-2011, 03:26 AM
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| Horklump
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Victoria Elise Vacker First Year | Homework, Disappointment and Flirting
The first couple months of Cat's first year were turbulent. There were whispers of a rising Dark Lord, although no one really believed the rumors. The students wouldn't really pay attention even if it was true. Caitlin was thrown into the idea of controlling magic; learning to speak spells correctly, concocting potions, just learning everything possible.
Caitlin had a bad habit of flirting around while trying to do her homework; she admitted she was getting much better at controlling her words. The more stressed Cat got, the more the girl flirted. Her new best friend Elaina was already a flirt, some how perfecting before she even got to school. Her short caramel hair bounced as she'd flip it, large crystal blues starrng straight into her victim's eyes.
These two girls were top of the class and rulers of it too. It helped that they happened to be friends with Sirius, James, Remus and the bigger boy... Peter? They could be seen laughing, studying, or just generally wrecking havoc.
"Remus!?" Cat rushed up to the second year with her potions homework in her hand. He looked up and smiled slowly, realizing it was his favorite first year.
"Hey Cat," he said quietly, before noticing the role of parchment. Damn it, she always just comes here for help. He hoped the disappointment didn't show on his face. "Homework?"
Caitlin threw her slender body into the armchair next to him, the fire casting pretty shadows that danced on her face. "I just don't get it!" she huffed. Slug was one of her favorite professors, but he seemed to treat her differently. He'd give her harder assignments then the others and it drove her crazy. It was a lot of help from Remus that got her through it all. "I'm doing second year work, it's crazy!" She whined quietly, leaning closer to him.
"Give it to me, Cat," Remus laughed quietly. She handed it over, and scooted even closer. "This is where you went wrong." He pointed towards the middle of the parchment and gave it back to her, letting her figure it out herself. A look of utter surprise crossed Cat's emerald eyes before she began scribbling furiously. When she looked up again she had a look of wonder on her face.
"Thank you, Remus! I-" but before she could finish her thanks Sirius jumped down the staircase.
"KITTEN!" A grin slid across Cat's face, whatever she was going to say to Remus gone. This caused the tired boy to scowl.
"Hey there Sirius!" she called before rolling up her parchment, and running back up the stairs to the girls dormitory. Cat emerged with Elaina before charging back into her armchair, El sitting on the floor below her.
"Hey babe," Elaina giggled to the boys, "miss me?"
"Only all the time, Silly." Sirius replied. This made Remus smile again, maybe he could have Cat to himself again. He beckoned to her to sit next to him on the floor by the fire. Cat complied.
"Anything else I could help you with?" His tired eyes held genuine affection. "Homework, silliness?" He laughed and smiled.
"I'm not sure," she scooted closer, "maybe a walk on the grounds?" It was a done deal.
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04-19-2011, 03:28 AM
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| Horklump
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Victoria Elise Vacker First Year | Quote:
Originally Posted by Mordanyes I'm really interested in this so far, the writing is great and the marauders are acting like how I imagine they would have acted at that age. ![:D](https://www.snitchseeker.com/images/smilies/big_grin.gif) I love it so far! Can't wait to read some more! ![^_^](https://www.snitchseeker.com/images/smilies/relaxed.gif)
Thank you! I'm about a chapter ahead on my Mibba account, and I'm working on Chapter four (which will be the longest so far) right now. :]
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04-19-2011, 03:30 AM
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| Plimpy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Cassidy Euston x1
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Loved the chapter!
I'm guessing it's going to turn into Remus/Cat. Am I right? *already imagining the adorableness of the pairing*
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04-19-2011, 03:33 AM
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| Horklump
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Victoria Elise Vacker First Year | Quote:
Originally Posted by Mordanyes Loved the chapter!
I'm guessing it's going to turn into Remus/Cat. Am I right? *already imagining the adorableness of the pairing* ![:D](https://www.snitchseeker.com/images/smilies/big_grin.gif) Haha, <3 For a while. But I have bigger plans for the both of them in the long run separately. But that's all I'm giving away. :]
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04-19-2011, 06:56 AM
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| Snidget
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This is great, I really enjoyed it ![:P](https://www.snitchseeker.com/images/smilies/tongue2.gif)
Hope Remus and Cat get together!
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04-19-2011, 08:16 AM
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| Dugbog
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New reader! That was awesome. Keep up the good work!
PAMS!
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04-25-2011, 07:06 PM
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| Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Megara Kostas First Year | New reader! ![:D](https://www.snitchseeker.com/images/smilies/big_grin.gif)
This is really awesome, I love how they are all acting. Remus is so cute!
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05-17-2011, 11:43 PM
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I know I'm kind of late, but this is awesome!!! I hope you post more soon; I see you haven't posted in a while. PAMS PAMS please!!!
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07-06-2011, 07:55 AM
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