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11-22-2003, 08:31 AM
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| | Snidget
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Just want to share one of my poems. Plese tell me what do u think.
Fire and Ice
(This poem was inspired by my favorite ship D/G.)
I am Fire
And you are the Ice
Completely different
And very unlike
But I loved you
And you loved me
No one will ever
Set us apart
But everytime I touch you
I am in pain
And whenever you touch me
You feel the same
But still we loved each other
Through and through
No one will stop us
No one will do. | 
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11-22-2003, 08:33 AM
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| | Doxy
Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: disneyland
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That's lovely! Very simple and just ... there! I like it. | |
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11-22-2003, 08:36 AM
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| | Snidget
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wow! Thanks! | |
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11-22-2003, 08:38 AM
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| | Doxy
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no problem! It's not often I come across such a poem that really gets to the point, but still is very poetic | |
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11-22-2003, 08:39 AM
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|  Master of RelativityAshwinder
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*Claps*
I admire the uniqueness and poetic flow of the poem.
*Thumbs up*
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11-22-2003, 08:41 AM
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| | Snidget
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Thanks again!
Here's another one:
Wind
(Well I didn't know why I made this...)
Feeling the rush of it
Through my hair
I tried to seek it
But no one's there
It kissed my lips
And carressed my face
Like a smooth velvet
And a very soft lace
But now it left
And it move on
To find some place
To settle upon. | |
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11-22-2003, 08:43 AM
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| | Snidget
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Quote: Originally posted by hermione-granger@Nov 22 2003, 09:19 AM
*Claps*
I admire the uniqueness and poetic flow of the poem.
*Thumbs up* Thanks for your review! | |
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11-22-2003, 08:45 AM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Hiding from Hawken who's driving me mad
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very nice  you guys are just a creative bunch nice to be around poeple with creativity.
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11-22-2003, 08:46 AM
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| | Doxy
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I like the 2nd one as well! so lovely!
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11-22-2003, 08:53 AM
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| | Snidget
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Thanks again for the reviews crayZ4daN, and Faith!
Here's another one:
Addiction
(This poem was full of emotions and angst)
I took the razorblade and
started cutting it through my
skin
my skin is vulnerable...
vulnerable...
I can feel the blood dripping
down my arm
it's so beautiful
like red ribbons
The sting of it reminds me I'm
still alive
cut follows another cut
till I can't stop
It's so addicting
i can see my blood
staining the white floor
And I let go of the razorblade
and lay thre motionless...
motionless...
I closed my eyes
and I fell into a dreamless sleep
This is my addiction...
my addiction... | |
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11-22-2003, 08:57 AM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Hiding from Hawken who's driving me mad
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: grins : hm... i might have you write some pomes for my ficcy... well if you want to any way
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11-22-2003, 09:03 AM
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| | Snidget
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Really? What's your fan fic about? | |
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11-22-2003, 09:13 AM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Hiding from Hawken who's driving me mad
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Quote: Originally posted by retz14@Nov 22 2003, 02:43 AM
Really? What's your fan fic about? Three of them, for my friends. The frist one is about when Harry stays at Hogwarts for the summer and meets some people who help fight evil (not us of course we're not evil at all  ) the second is based in 6th year during my character Ditey and her group of D.M hunters come to the school to train, ah I don't want to get into the details I can talk hours about this story, the third one well i can't talk about on SS cause it's not for younger audiences not vulger just very anguisy 
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11-22-2003, 09:21 AM
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| | Snidget
Join Date: Oct 2002
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mmm. Well, pm me for the "other" details. But I'm not promising you that I can make the poem beautigul. B'cause I'm not really good. But don't worry I'll try my best. | |
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11-24-2003, 07:02 AM
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| | Snidget
Join Date: Oct 2002
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Painted Myself On the Corner
(well, this seems a a bit tragic)
I'm trapped
I acn't escape
There's no way out
It's all my fault
And I blame it all to myself
i'm cornered
I can fee; tears dripping down
My cheeks
Washing my face
Is there anyone who can help me?
I'm drowning
Drowning...
Please, anyone?
i'm desperate
I'm losing hope...
Because I had painted myself on the corner... | |
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