ur good very very good

Thanks, erm...more soon!

np

wow those were amazing... they have a spirit of their own - like they're dark, but they're not - if you know what i mean - i sometimes write poetry like that too. Nice job, and keep working (and thanks for reviewing my poetry - I've put some more up)

Yea, i will! Nice job alls...

Ringing
Ring. Ring. Ring.
You won't stop calling.
I won't stop balling.
Ring. Ring. Ring.

Ring. Ring. Ring.
The sounds chimes.
Like falling dimes.
Ring. Ring. Ring.

Ring. Ring. Ring.
Please don't call me anymore.
Don't call me anymore...
Ring. Ring. Ring.

Ring. Ring. Ring.
You still keep calling.
I still keep balling.
Ring. Ring. Ring.

Ring. Ring. Ring.
I hate the sound, that ringing sound.
I hate the sound, that ringing sound.
Ring. Ring. Ring.

Ring. Ring. Ring.
I am trying to sleep.
I am trying to keep.
Ring. Ring. Ring.

Ring. Ring. Ring.
You still keep calling.
I still keep balling.
Ring. Ring. Ring.
about people keeping on calling when i am TRYING TO SLEEP!

Radeo for a Head
My head is like a radeo
Ever changing
Ever changing...
My head is like a radeo...

My head is like a radeo...
Playing songs in my brain...
Playing songs in my brain...
My head it like a radeo

My head is like a radeo
But, it can mix to songs together...
But, it can mix to songs together...
My head is like a radeo

My head is like a radeo...
Playing songs in my brain...
Playing songs in my brain...
My head it like a radeo

My head is like a radeo...
Ever changing
Ever changing...
My head is like a radeo

Fake
I hate you so much!
I hate your fakeness!
I hate you so much!

I hate the fact!
That you are fake!
I hate the fact!

I hate you so much!
I hate your fakeness!
I hate you so much!

These are excellent. I think I can understand. You've had a tough life if this is what you really feel! I like them though. They have a certain jagged egde to them. A sharpness that captures you. I think you should continue, whatever you do. You are definately talented.

Thank you! Ya, i havent had a too tough of a life or anything, but...i have a had a tough life in a sence, but not as tough as tough can be!....my dad is a diabetic who had a transplant and is always nagging at me...(i feel like throwing him off a cliff thats why i wrote daddy!) and my sister was the inspiration to fake, you know how people can act like they love you so much and really they are being rude to you? that is her all the way! and my mom, she is the person who is most saine in my family...she came from a very kind family and i am glad of it!


ok here is my newest one:

note: I wrote it on a peice of a paper in my note book durring geography
p.s. blood is meaning tears, also we are learning how to write "proper" SLAM poerty in english class grade 9.
Heart

You know your heart is broken
When you can see the crimson blood pour out
and dripp down to the snow dying to red
You just know your heart is broken

You know your heart is broken
When you can see the shattered peices of broken red china liening all about on the crimson dyed snow
You just know your heart is broken

You know your heart is broken
When the feeling is all gone
You just know your heart is broken

You know your heart is broken
When you can see the shattered peices of broken red china liening all about on the crimson dyed snow
You just know your heart is broken

What Am i?
What am I?
Thats a hard question to ask,
I am an angle I am a devil,
but that only that I am myself!
What am I?

What am I?
I just need to ask...what I will be...
I just want to wonder who I will become!
I just need to ask...
What am I?

What am I?
I am an Angle with no wings...
I am a Devil with no spikey tail or horns...
What am I?

What am I?
I am an angle that is not white but tainted red,
I am a devil with a Halos
What am I?

What am I?
I am a mutt I something of differant colors
I am a mixed variety of things,
angles devils human and animals all in one body!
I am all together creepish
What am I?

That is what I am!
creepish: creepy

Dragging me Under neath
You are draging me under neath
Making me go insane
You are draging me under neath
Making life misroble!

You are giving me something to smile for
The takening it away,
You are giving me something to smile for
If you keep playing these games...
You are giving me something to smile for
I will go insane!

You are making my soul
Go darker then darkness it has already felt
You are making my soul
Feel pain its felt no time before this!
You are making my soul
Plummit into a pit of darkness and despair

You are
The keeper of the key
You are
The one who is killing me
You are
Making me feel all the pains you feel
You are
Making me feel worse than you've felt before!
You are
My destroier!

You are draging me under neath
Making me go insane
You are draging me under neath
Making life misroble!

What is sanity?
What is sanity?
Is it not something unseeable?
Or is it something there that we
all see and feel and smell and taste?
Or is it there but not there at the same time?

What is sanity?
It is one thing my life has not
It is one thing, my life can't handle

What is sanity?
Just what is it really?
Is it rain?...
Is it snow?...
Is it hail?...
Is it fire?...
Is it water?...
Is it there?...
What is sanity?
Is it not something unseeable?
Or is it something there that we
all see and feel and smell and taste?
Or is it there but not there at the same time?

The Darkness
Sitting at a table,
Infront of a black-board,
Sitting at a table,

Talking of the agenda,
Sitting in the darkness,
Talking of the agenda,

The darkness creeping over,
The dark halls are emp-ty
The darkness creeping over,

Talking of the agenda,
Sitting in the darkness,
Talking of the agenda,

Sitting at a table,
Infront of a black-board,
Sitting at a table,

^About school, the darkness of it, ^

Sitting,
Sitting in the darkness my heart on the floor,
You ripped it out,
and smashed it up,
Now you think I like you more?
My heart has been shattered by my own desires,
My heart has been shattered by my own love...

I sit up in my room,
Not looking at the walls,
Cause the blue will remind me of you,
And how much i have loved you soo,

I sit upon my bed,
My head in my pillow,
Tear stained now,
For my soul has been crying,
For the love I once had,

I did a bit of magic,
To see if you liked me,
Not a spell or a charm,
Just a flip of a magical coin,
It landed on yes,
It said you liked me,

I know it wasn't lieing,
It never has,
It never did,

It said i would date you,
Next year,
In tenth grade,
Know i doubt I'd last that long,

It also said you'd be,
Too shy to ask me out,
Too shy to be near me,
It also said you'd,
date other girls,
before you got to me,

I know it's true,
I know it's true,
That you might like me,
but know i fear i'll love you...
no more...
next year

deditated to my crush, the one and only...Phil,

Shadow
The Shadow crawls

The shadow stalls

The shadow calls

The Shadow crawls



The shadow of my life,

Deep and dark

Light and bright

The shadow of my life,



The Shadow of my life

Is deep

Is growing

Is deep

The shadow of my life



The Shadow crawls

The shadow stalls

The shadow calls

The Shadow crawls

Poems from my "flood poem" (school homework(taking words from magizines and using them))

Bloom,
Your it.
The Most important
Part of
Peace
Yet
Tell it like it is
Believe

America
In the afternoon
The most important
Defining
Tradition
Slipping away?
Not the true confessions!
Getting Real
Our Bloom
Your Slipping away
Americans
Your Not
Fighting
For The
Good Fight
For Peace And
You Best Believe It

Here another English class assignment,

A Persona poem, (personafiction, personafing something, makeing it humon)

Covers,
Many People,
Look upon me,
They see what's...
Behind my covers

They feel what I feel,
Some feel something
diff-er-ant (say slowly, 3 beats like thingy)
Some the
same,

My pages are covered,
So you never can see
What's truley
Behind my covers,

So don't judge
a book,
by it's cover

This Abyss

I am lying here,
Waiting for my first Kiss,
I am waiting for some new cheer,
Will this ever die? This quiet abyss?

You see me smile,
You see me as a happy girl,
You see me smile all the while,
You see me twirl 'round and round I twirl,

Every time I see you,
My heart it jumps a mile,
My heart is turns to goo,
Everytime I see you, All the while

You make my heart as free as when I was a child,
You make my soul feel like a new-born-child's smiles

Images fly by, Fly by,
Like shots and snidbits of movies
rolling behind your eyes
And all the while you are dreaming,
In your own, quiet peiceful world were you are never harmed.

Then the light changes and you see,
The shadows crawling over that dream,
It changes all the way,
And you have a dark nightmare,

You wake-up in a cold sweat,
And remember it was just a dream,
Yet can't sleep anymore because you are too scared,
To close your eyes and see what will linger behind your eyes.

Images fly by, Fly by,
Like shots and snidbits of movies
rolling behind your eyes
And all the while you are dreaming,
In your own, quiet peiceful world were you are never harmed.

Then the light changes and you see,
The shadows crawling over that dream,
It changes all the way,
And you have a dark nightmare,

You wake-up in a cold sweat,
And remember it was just a dream,
Yet can't sleep anymore because you are too scared,
To close your eyes and see what will linger behind your eyes.

Rants that I have and have made into slam poetry!



Harry and Hermione?
Whats up with that? (loud)
You say they are a perfect cupple?
Whats is a cupple than?

Harry dosn't like hermione!
Or haven't you noticed?
He's not in love with anyone at the moment!
He still likes cho!
Buts just to hurt from what happened to noctice!

Ron likes hermione!
Or have you been missing the hints?
The perfume, the fight, the fighting, and the jealusy?
Don't you remember?
When ron's doll lost it's arms?
Harry found it on the floor!
Or did you miss that fact?

People think,
That hermione likes harry and harry her,
Because of the handshake!
Did you not notice?
Columbus said it was for ron and hermione!
Hermione and ron have an empening crush!
Acording to J.K. Columbus and more!

People are just to stuck,
In what they think is right!
To notice the facts right under there noses!

Individual,

You call your self Individual,
You say you go with the flow!
Than you label others by what brand they wear!
When they are wearing what makes them feel,
Individual too,

So don't be a hyppicryt and say what others want you to say!
Don't say they look great when you think they are a poser!
Cause you are being the poser yourself

Dad

You always sugar coat what you are saying,
Dad,
You make me want to scream,

You ignored me when I was younger,
Know you want to be my friend?

Whats is up with that?
You tried almost made me want to end my life at SEVEN!

And Did you know that?
No, because I couldn't!
You had an old antique rusted dager in your den,
I found It when I was seven,
I was on the net,
I tried to slit my wrists!

Did you know that?
NO!
Because thats the first time I told anyone one that!

My best friend has a hard life,
Or so she thinks!
She dosn't know anything of my childhood!
She thinks 'cause my family has money that I am happy and can get whatever I want!

Can I?
No,
The thing I need is gone!
The thing I need I never had!
The thing I need she has!

She thinks my life is perfect!
It's not!
Its just an Act I put out,
To hide my real emmotion!

You made fear crying!
I don't remember a time when I was happy,
I don't remember a time when you were there!
I don't remember smiling and laughing with you!

I just remember the yelling,
The friction!
The fighting!
The Anger!
And the loss of love I had when I was younger!

Its a pain that you are an antique dealer,
Its a pain that you go on the fishing derby every year!

Why is that a pain?
Because,
Because you were never here,
I never had the love that normal kids had,
I never had a dad that was home on fathers day!
Or my sister birthday!

I just remember a vacant seat at the table,
A place that you always sat at!

Know you wonder why,
I look at you, talk to you, and think of you the way I do!?
Well, know you know why!
Because I never had a dad!

Dad

You always sugar coat what you are saying,
Dad,
You make me want to scream,

You ignored me when I was younger,
Know you want to be my friend?

Whats is up with that?
You tried almost made me want to end my life at SEVEN!

And Did you know that?
No, because I couldn't!
You had an old antique rusted dager in your den,
I found It when I was seven,
I was on the net,
I tried to slit my wrists!

Did you know that?
NO!
Because thats the first time I told anyone one that!

My best friend has a hard life,
Or so she thinks!
She dosn't know anything of my childhood!
She thinks 'cause my family has money that I am happy and can get whatever I want!

Can I?
No,
The thing I need is gone!
The thing I need I never had!
The thing I need she has!

She thinks my life is perfect!
It's not!
Its just an Act I put out,
To hide my real emmotion!

You made fear crying!
I don't remember a time when I was happy,
I don't remember a time when you were there!
I don't remember smiling and laughing with you!

I just remember the yelling,
The friction!
The fighting!
The Anger!
And the loss of love I had when I was younger!

Its a pain that you are an antique dealer,
Its a pain that you go on the fishing derby every year!

Why is that a pain?
Because,
Because you were never here,
I never had the love that normal kids had,
I never had a dad that was home on fathers day!
Or my sister birthday!

I just remember a vacant seat at the table,
A place that you always sat at!

Know you wonder why,
I look at you, talk to you, and think of you the way I do!?
Well, know you know why!
Because I never had a dad!

Fear

My worst fear,
Is just tears,
My worst frear,
Is just tears

I never let you see me cry,
My best friend, only saw me cry once,
We've been friends since I was in fifth grade,
Now I'm in ninth,
Four years,
I've seen her cry atleast once or twise a year!

Why is that my fear?
I do not know!