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Old 07-28-2003, 06:26 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Hey everyone!

About Christmas 2002, for no reason whatsoever, I started writing poetry. Totally random. Most of it is how I feel about my boyfriend (now ex0boyfriend) and stuff, so if you're a romantic, come on down!


Here's one of my favorites, a pretty early one too, but still good:

Almost Over

It's been awhile
Since you hugged me
Or told me you loved me
So I wonder
Is it almost over?

I start to believe it
In my brain
But not in my heart
So I hold on
Though it's probably almost over.

But all it takes
Is that one
"I love you", or
A brush of your hand on mine,
Or even your frustration when
I'm upset,
And very hard to cheer up
And I know it's there
Strong as ever

And it's not going away anytime soon

~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Well, tell me what you think! I'll post some more poems after people read this one a bit

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Old 07-28-2003, 06:59 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I love it! You can really understand and feel what the poem is giving out. Do you have any more? :rose:
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Old 07-28-2003, 07:08 PM   #3 (permalink)
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nice job on this one! I seem to find this one everywhere I go. lol. I really really really really like this one. great job (yet again) put more up soon!
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Old 07-29-2003, 03:50 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Ha ha ha Alyonna (for the clueless, Alyonna is my best friend, so she's read all of my poems already)

Ready for a little drama? Here's one I wrote right after my boyfriend and I split. Full of passion and hurt. Hope you like it!

A Nighttime Prayer


Dear God,

Please help me

I’m lost

Help me to forget

It’s so hard

It hurts so much

I just want it to stop

Please make it stop

I can’t stand it

It’s so horrible

It’s making me cry hot tears of pain

Fire through every vein

Ice through my heart

Please, just make it stop

I can’t take much more

I’ve been through this before

But never this bad

They say it’ll stop soon

They say they know how I feel

But no one knows how I feel

I don’t know how I feel

Except I know I feel hurt

Lost

Used

And in desperate need of help.



Dear God,

How can I get over this?

I just………don’t feel like myself

I’ve lost some of myself

I want it back

But that’s not all

I want my life back

I need my life back

The life I used to have

I lost a part of myself God

He took it.



Dear God,

Bring him back

He was my life

My soul

My real reason that I’m alive

The proof that I have a purpose in life

I miss him

Everything

I see him everywhere

He’s haunting me

I remember everything he used to do

The way he held my hand

The way he’d surprise me by coming up from behind me

And putting his arms around my waist

The way he looked at me



Dear God,

I remember every time he looked at me

The first real time

When I saw the love in his eyes

When he asked me to be more than

His ex-girlfriend’s best friend

And the first time

He ever voiced his feelings aloud

And the first time

He voiced his feelings

From his lips on mine

And the one time

I caught him staring at my eyes

So I stared back

Right into his black pupils

You see God, I believe when you do that

You can see into someone’s soul

Literally

But I also remember

The way he looked at me

And I stared back into his soul

And he knew I knew

What he had been planning to do

That afternoon



Dear God,

It hurts to remember

So I want to forget

But it hurts to forget

I don’t know which hurts more

But I need to do something

I can’t do this alone

But even though I hide it

I’m alone

All alone

And I hate it

I really do


~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Well, how's that for depressing? Trust me, it was quite an awful break-up. But I love that part: "It hurts to remember / So I want to forget / But it hurts to forget". That's the best thing I've ever written! Well, please review!!!!!!!!!

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Old 07-29-2003, 04:02 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Wow,that a good poem!!!!!!!!!!!! :sorcerer: :sorcerer: :sorcerer:
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*jaw hangs open*
wow....I'm speachless
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Old 07-29-2003, 08:40 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Hehe, I like A Nighttime Prayer a lot, but this one's my absolute favorite:

Dedicated to Alyonna

Soul Sista

The white in the black
The light in the dark
Without trying or knowing
You leave a mark

Pulling me back when I'm too fast
Pushing me forward when I'm too slow
The world's mysteries and their solutions
Without you I would never know

Sharing my jokes until we'll write a book
Sharing my laughter until we'll both cry
Sharing my joy until we'll get questioning looks
Sharing my tears until we'll both feel we could die

Sharing my struggles as we'll get through life
Sharing my dissapointment until it's your own
Sharing my confusion until we'll both wonder "Why?"
Sharing the troubles we should have never known

You give so much
So it's a mystery why
You get so little back
But I'll try and make it all up

I'll try

~~~~~~~~~~~~~

No different than before people! Tell me what you think!!!!!!

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That....is....AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :up: I love it! I can totally relate to that with by best friend!
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That....is....AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :up: I love it! I can totally relate to that with by best friend!
DITTO!!!!!!!!!
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Old 08-01-2003, 08:33 PM   #10 (permalink)
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*Clap clap clap*

Bravo! Encore, encore!

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Old 08-02-2003, 05:19 PM   #11 (permalink)
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Old 08-14-2003, 12:23 AM   #12 (permalink)
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Hmmmmmm......... i wonder where I;ve heard those before? totally love them as usual!!! LUFF YOU!!!



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Old 08-14-2003, 12:30 AM   #13 (permalink)
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Hey .Jenn!!!!!!! AWESOME poems (I'ts Soul Sista's sista on Alyonna's comp) Anyway AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!

Please write more!!!!!!!!!!
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wow, i was crying after A Night Prayer, i didnt know how much you cared for him Jenn
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Old 08-14-2003, 08:41 PM   #15 (permalink)
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*A Nighttime Prayer :crysmile:
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Old 08-14-2003, 08:48 PM   #16 (permalink)
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THESE :crysmile:...ARE :crysmile: ...AWESOME! :crysmile: :crysmile: :crysmile: I LOVE SOUL SISTA!
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Old 08-17-2003, 07:34 PM   #17 (permalink)
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*Eyes fill with tears* I never knew I had so many fans! This........is...........great!!!!!!!!!!!

Here's another poem that I thought up.......gee, I'll have to write some more!!!!!!


Waiting

Waiting, waiting, waiting
Will it come today?
Hoping, wishing
Please come today

Day's over
Not today
I know it couldn't have been today
Prehaps tomorrow

New day
I hope it comes today
I bet it comes, yes, I know
It's coming today

Day's ended
It didn't come today
But if it wasn't today, and it wasn't yesterday
It's got to be tomorrow

Now it has to come today
It's the perfect day for it to come
Now all I have to do is wait
wait
wait

Day's over
It wasn't today
I'm getting pretty sick of this
It's been a long, long time
It probably won't be tomorrow
But that's ok
It'll be here someday
Soon
Till then, I'll wait
Wait
And when it comes
I'll write
When it comes
Tomorrow

~~~~~~~~~~~~~

OK, that's not one of my best ones, but it's still pretty good. Can you guess what I was waiting for. No one knows, except mayyyyyyybe Alyonna, I don't know if she figured it out. Anyway, a few things to say:

Alyonna's sister- Thanks a bunch! Guess appraising my poems runs in your family...lol

Fenboy62- AHHHHHHHHHH! I should have know......stupid........stupid..........stupid.... ........


Keep reading/reviewing! I'll be back soon with more poems!!!!!!!!
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Old 08-18-2003, 02:04 AM   #18 (permalink)
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uh...Waiting was....slow. No offense, it was nice repatition and rythm, specially with that last "write".
It seemed dry, without much emotion. Try building up reasoning in the first couple stanzas, and then conclude cuz the last part was nice, but it didn't have a lot of affect cuz I didn't have much understanding of why it was that way.
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Old 08-19-2003, 04:50 PM   #19 (permalink)
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that was amazing and yes i do know what it is and yes i have read this one before (as all the others) and hey guess what? I'm gonna start my own poetry portfolio thingy!!! YAY!!! sorry, this is supposed to be your glory moment so back to you, that was simply amazing!!!


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Old 08-19-2003, 10:59 PM   #20 (permalink)
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Ok, here it goes again

So Close

You were so close,
I could have snatched you up in my grasp.
The tension was so thick it could have been cut with a kinfe
I was so sure........

But then you left.

I thought it was right
This seemed a better time
A few more minutes, and you'd be mine
I knew it, I knew it.......

But then you went with someone else

I thought you were over her
I thought you liked me now
I thought that this was the moment
The moment I'd been waiting for........

But then someone else came.

I've been waiting too long
Should I give up?
You've given me reason to
I've almost stopped believing until.........

You come up to me ask ask me to be yours again


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A bit weird, I know, but I wrote that on the spot. It's my life right now, except for the last line. That's what I want to happen.

Plese review!

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Old 08-20-2003, 07:03 PM   #21 (permalink)
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that was beautiful, simply beautiful, and so sad... and yet so poetic. so filled with emotion, so.......... you!!! nice job keep it up!
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Old 08-20-2003, 07:36 PM   #22 (permalink)
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This is great. Really good writing. If I HAD to pick, I especially loved the emotion and writing in "Waiting." That was a really good one. Keep writing, you're a great poet!
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CAN'T...GO...ON...MUST...HAVE...MORE!!!!!!!!1
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Old 08-25-2003, 03:51 PM   #24 (permalink)
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Here's another "on the spot" poem

My Special Memory

The beating of the music
Pounds through my heart
The floor rumbles
The music is so loud
And yet, between us
There's silence
So soft and quiet
I can hear my friends next to me
Breathing
We could talk
But we couldn't hear each other over the music
So loud, so close
Pounding into my head
But we don't want to talk
It would distrupt the silence between us.


The floor rocks with the music, swaying, swaying
You fall if you're still
And yet, we're standing
Practically standing
Except swaying to the beat
Of the music

There's a bubble around us
So quiet, so calm, so still
So peaceful
So right
So perfect
I don't think it could get better
Till....

We're connected
The most powerful connection in the world
Tidal waves of emotion are burstinginside me
We're one

As quickly as it starts, it stops
The beat changes, it's new music
I'm left with the memory of that moment
Tatooed into my head forever
Uneraseable for all eternity
And it's mine
My own
My special memory

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Hey, that didn't come out too bad! I kinda like it!!!!! Tell me what you think!!!!

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wow that was ............ words are not enough to describe how amazing that was. and i still cant believe you didnt show it to me first. that was .......... wow. i have never read anything like it. its like i'm a completely different person now. i .......... i dont know what to say.
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