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07-27-2003, 03:11 AM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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Is this what love is,
these bruises on my face?
Is this where home is,
please get me out of this place.
Are you my hero,
a loving knight upon his steed.
Or one big zero,
will I ever fill this need.
You say you love me,
you throw me to the floor.
You push and shove me,
if I could just get to the door.
You scream and hit me,
where did I go wrong?
If you'd just quit, please,
I thought you loved me for so long.
You stop and shiver,
like you always tend to do.
Your lip, it quivers,
your eyes, they fill with dew.
You walk towards me,
arms stretched open wide.
Your words, recorded
forever in my mind.
"Don't leave, I'd miss you,
I don't know what I've done."
I sigh and kiss you,
and once again, you've won.
© Jen Sellers/ronweasleylover
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07-27-2003, 03:50 AM
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| Fire Slug
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thats on of the best poems i read. that beats mine by a mile. plz right more *CMG*
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07-27-2003, 05:21 AM
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| drinks vanilla coke on the moon! Mooncalf
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<span style='color:gray'>"You stop and shiver,
like you always tend to do.
Your lip, it quivers,
your eyes, they fill with dew."
-Faboulous Jen! I really like it , mostly that line though. You must put more!</span>
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07-27-2003, 05:40 AM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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Wow, thanks guys! It means so much that you like it. I don't really have anymore that I'm that proud of, but when I find some, I'll post them.
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07-27-2003, 08:42 AM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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Found another one. There's a swear word in here, but I can't think of a word to replace it so I'm using astrisk's. Deal with it.
Oh, and mostly all of my poems are Untitled. Simply because of my immense lack of creativity.
The roses that you gave me
sit wilted on my shelf.
And everytime I see them
it makes me hate myself.
But then, why do I keep them,
distant memories of you.
Though there were mostly bad times,
of good, there were a few.
The times you held me closely,
the times you kissed my cheek,
the way you'd say you loved me,
it made my knees go weak.
But then, as if by magic, something transformed you,
from a loving, carefree person into something cold and cruel.
Oh, the way you'd hit me
it made me cry in pain.
How could you do this to me?
What did you have to gain?
And now the times I see you
I want to take the blade,
the one from which all of the scars upon me once were made,
I'd hold it tightly in my hand,
walk up to you, and say,
"Vengence is a little *****"
and then I'd make you pay.
© Jen Sellers/ronweasleylover
And yes, these poems are both about the same thing.
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07-27-2003, 10:47 AM
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| Augurey
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| Here or not I like your work too.
I especially liked the first.
It sent chillers down my spine,
Somthing not many are able to do.
And please write more.
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07-27-2003, 08:43 PM
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Goodness, Jen. They have so much emotion! So much style! And I like how they're all untitled, it gives them more "oomph"...IMO, anyway.
Keep 'em coming!
:up: :up: (Two thumbs up...I would put more, but I only have two thumbs. )
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07-27-2003, 08:44 PM
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| Porlock
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Really awesome, Jen! *claps* Very nice :up:
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07-27-2003, 08:52 PM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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Haha, thanks Laurie, I'm glad my poems have "oomph"
Thanks Anigy!
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07-27-2003, 08:53 PM
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| Jobberknoll
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omg...Jen these are WONDERFUL! *claps throws money and roses* Bravo!
i like the first one the best. it was awesome. YAY! *claps more*
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07-27-2003, 08:54 PM
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| Ramora
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Those are awesome Jenster, good job! |
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07-27-2003, 08:58 PM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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Thanks guys! *Takes money and roses*
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07-27-2003, 09:01 PM
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| Lobalug
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Oh my gosh wow. :o
I dont know if you are truly going through the stuff that's described in these poems...but you certainly have me convinced that you could be. if you arent...dang you're imaginative. wait that came out wrong :ermsmile: ...you're imaginative anyway, but i just mean, to be able to make that up, you know? I AM TRYING TO GIVE A COMPLIMENT...but i just cant talk, type, whatever. cant put it into words. :unsure: you made me cry. wow...amazing stuff. Brilliant. :flowersmile:
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07-27-2003, 09:03 PM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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No, I'm not going through that stuff anymore. I wrote this when I was, though. Hah, thanks for the compliment! Much appreciated.
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07-27-2003, 09:05 PM
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| Jobberknoll
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ooooooo that person who did that to you jen.....oooooo when i find that person, they are getting a beating. i dont CARE who or what it is.
omg, now im crying. thats horrible im REALLY REALLY sorry jen *big hugs* i love YOU!!
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07-27-2003, 09:07 PM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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Aww *hugs Chels* thanks Chels, but I'm fine now. *Hugs Chels super tight* I love you too!!!!!
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07-27-2003, 09:11 PM
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| Knarl
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You're brilliant Jen. Marry me! |
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07-27-2003, 09:20 PM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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Hmm, ok! *Gets down on one knee*
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07-27-2003, 09:22 PM
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| Jobberknoll
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Can i be the maid of honor?!!? ROFL im kidding
ok one more time then ill leave you alone...BRILLIANT AND I LOVE YOU AND IM SORRY YOU HAD TO GO THROUGH THAT! ok im done <33
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07-27-2003, 09:25 PM
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| Fire Slug
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Oooh! I love those! They are sOooooOOo BEAUTIFUL! *sniff* their making me crryy! I sent them to my friends to tell them what a wonderful poet you are! I give you 4 thumbs up! :up: :up: :up: :up: !
btw... THAT'S SOOO SOOO BEAUTIFUL!
I'm sorry you had to go through that...
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07-27-2003, 09:32 PM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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Yes! You, Steph, Anig and Care can all be the maids of honour! I will make you all wear poofy pink dresses with huge sleeves and sequins.
Wow, thank Cho Chang 611!
Hmm...I make people cry a lot. I wonder if that's a good or bad thing? lol
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07-27-2003, 09:34 PM
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| Jobberknoll
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oh man i look so good in pink sequins Its a good thing, honestly. Trust Me.
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07-27-2003, 09:38 PM
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| Fire Slug
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Don't worry, its a good thing!
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07-27-2003, 09:45 PM
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| Back from the dead donnie darko fan Chizpurfle
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I'll add some..ruffles and...blinking lights to the dresses too, then!
Haha, ok well that's good then!
I'm trying to find more poems, they're all over the place. In books, journals, on the computer. :arg:
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07-27-2003, 09:50 PM
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| Fire Slug
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I can't wait to read more! You got me obssesed with your poems! ahah... that's a good thing too.. heeheh
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