This is my first poem so please give me you honest opinions hope you like

Fear
i'm standing in front of him
frightened HELPLESS hopeless
my wand is thrown across the grass
he smiles his terrifying smile
the graveyard fog brushes against my leg
i look into voldemort's vivid eyes
i want to SCREAM but there's a lummp in my throat
his pale,snakelike faces turns to face me
i want to RUN but my legs are paralyzed
he SMILES his crooked smile
the lump in my throat grows larger
He raises his wand and opens his mouth
A FLASH of bright green light blinds me
the lump in my throat is gone
the FEAR is gone
i realize then
death is peaceful

have my second poem please tell me what you think
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Choked Back Tears

I watch Harry walk away with her,with Cho
I watch him hold hands with her,
kiss her
love her.
While i sit here
in a dark corner alone
choking back my tears.
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i know its a lot shorter than the last one but still its a poem that dscribes what i feel right now and is'nt that what writing is about? anyway give me your honest thoughts about it

I loved it!!!!!
And I love you<3
Your such a Natural Hun!!!!!!!
POST MORE SOON!!!!
(Or I will Get you)
And Darling...
Please Try Not to double Post.....
You will Get in trouble.....
So Just wait For A Mod To merge
Your double post Into one......
So Make sure you dont do it again..
Please....
~Xavier~

Awesome job! I'll definately come back for more amazing poetry!

~Sarah

Your really good!
I'll be reading this!

thank yous
i already started school so i cant be posting poems as much as i like but i will definitly try XD
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well. I know nothing about poetry, so i suppose my opnion won't mean much. But i enjoyed it.

no i love everyones opinion here's my new poem hope you like
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If only He knew
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his talking to me, just talking*
i look at his messy black hair and *
gorgous vivid green eyes*
his beautiful face.*
if only he knew....*
then cho came*
with her her wonderful delicate face*
and silky black hair*
she grabbed harry's hand*
and pulled him away*
he smiled and gave a small wave*
once he turned away my smile faded*
if only he knew *
i wish he knew*
how much i realy loved him.*
then maybe i'd be the one to*
hold hands with him *
and pull him away.*
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i'm writing this from ginny's point of you with a,little bit of what i'm going through hope you guys enjoyed it tell me what you think i also take suggestions so i can do better next time

YAY! Three cheers for your poems! They're really great!!! *PRESENTS YOU WITH A CUPCAKE*

Oh.
My.
Gosh.

They're incredible!!!
Please add more ASAP!!!

*Steals Ginny_Weasley_Potter's cupcake and gives it to you*

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lol thank you to both of you for the cupcake i'm working on my new poem but not quit finished with it yet
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You're doing great! Loved the poems!

thank you guys!ok here's my new poem hope you like
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Finally
Finally
My heart is'nt aching
Finally
It has stopped breaking
I can hold hands with him
I can kiss him
I can be with him
being with him makes the world just stop
Makes everything ok
Makes all the bad things go away
Makes everything just be perfect
Finally
I'll fall asleep with a smile
on my face
Finally
i can let myself fall in love with Harry Potter.
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Hope you guys liked it i had done like a little cotinueation of harry and ginny and this obviously the end but i'm working on something new please tell me what you think

those are AMAZING...WOW....I'm speechless....forget the cupcake *presents you with a whole cake* amazing...post more soon

*xxx_Jenna_xxx*

I loved that one!!!

hey heres my new poem here goes p.s glad u liked the other poems
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My hand is trembling
I'm terrified
Do it
I try to grip my wand tighter
Do it now
Dumbledore says he'll help me
He doesn't understand the Dark Lord
Do it now or he will kill you
I stand there staring into bright blue eyes
Dumbledore's eyes
You know the words
I can't bring myself to say them
I need to do this now or die
Do it DO IT NOW
At that same moment the Death Eaters came in.
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this is from dracos point of view when he was suppose to kill Dumbledore tell me what you think

I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THAT WAS SOOOOOOO GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!
PAMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-Xavier-

Aww Daceee!
You poooooorr shhhhing!
Geat chapte! I can no' stup talk' in' like shhish!

i am reaally glad you liked it

I WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!
(not trying to rush you or anything)
PAMS!!!!!!!!!!!
-Xavier-

hola!!!!!!!heres another poem bout ginny and harry
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He keeps telling the same thing
over and over
Don't you why we can't be together?
Don't you see the danger?
The risk?
And i keep telling him over and over
Don't YOU see none of it matters to me?
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hope you liked it i'm still working on another draco one but i have like three school projects so i haven't be able to finish it but i will post soon

Woah, cooul!
P.S. First to post!

srry i havnt posted ina while i hav had alot to do thnxs for the comments and il post another poem soon

It's ok, post soon.

ok here a new poem about the death of sirius black
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Its like the entire Earth stop revolving
It as like i was stuck in a bad dream that i couldn't wake up from
Like time froze at the moment that i wished never happened
like i was screaming and no one could hear
like you can't hear my begging
I watched the life leave your eyes
I saw you gently fall back toward the vail
And i saw you leave my life and never return
then i realized you truely were gone

I likey!