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06-09-2005, 10:59 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth | From Deep Inside
hey guyz. i love writing poetry and i want to share some of my poems with you. Behind thes eyes
Look into my eyes
and you'll see the mask
that hides all the pain i've gone through
Look deeper and you'll see
the flame burning
it grows bigger and bigger
and soon it'll take over
You'll see the ice
behind the flames
it has cracks
and it will soon break
But you'll only reach the stone wall
that hides me behind it
but i bet you won't stop to see
because you don't care that much about me
i'm sorry if that was depressing. i'm just good at writing depressing stories and poems.
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06-14-2005, 03:36 AM
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| *sniff* I love you, man *sniff* Puffskein
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| OMFG...charlie....dat was so beautiful...i'm not kidding either sad too! I love them keep writing.....or else....i'll come after you...I know what you did last summer...... Lmao!!
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06-14-2005, 03:19 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth |
thanx ish. my next poem was one i wrote for our school newspaper. it was a poem for the graduating 8th graders. A Fond Farewell
Green grass
Tall trees
Fresh flowers
And buzzing bees
Warm weather
With the sun up high
School's almost over
And it's time to say goodbye
To Chippewa Junior High
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06-15-2005, 01:58 PM
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| Kappa
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Omg.. Charlie these are awesome! Who wouldve known so many SS Chatterz can write such good poems? Omg, Angels, Si's and URS ARE all awesome! I can;t wait for more. This actually gets me inspired I might post mine up too. They're no where gd as yours but it's okay.
I can;t wait for more!
LOVE ALWAYS,
Tina
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06-15-2005, 04:54 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth | Thanx Tina. I bet your peoms are great. here's a poem, but i don't think it's the best i've written. To Be a Friend
To be a friend
You have be there
To be a friend
You have to listen
To be a friend
You have cheer your friends up
To be a friend
You have to stand up for your friends
A good friend offers to help
A great friend does help |
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06-18-2005, 10:07 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth |
hmmm. no one posted. i guess they don't luv me enough to come bak and read them....
ok. so here's one that i wrote about Bangladesh, which is the country i come from. Bangladesh
It's the lush green forests,
The calls on nature,
And the unique fruit.
It's the soft cool breeze,
The early morning walks,
And the soft glow of the sunset.
It's the great food,
And the kind people,
that makes Bangladesh unique.
i know the ending is lame but oh well.....
here's a short one that i wrote. Hate
Hate brings pain, conflicts, and violence.
Hate brings ignorence, and it blinds you from the truth.
Hate won't bring peace or any answers.
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06-20-2005, 03:38 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth |
ppl still don't luv me...*sniffles* Shadows in my eyes
You see the emotions
You see the pain
You see the memories
You see the waiting
You see the shadows in my eyes
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06-22-2005, 04:24 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth |
i see that no one's posted. i feel unluved. oh well, for those who read this but don't post, i'll have some more poems soon
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06-25-2005, 08:17 PM
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| Antipodean Opaleye
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ohhh charlie I didn't know you wrote poetry!! omg I love Hate it's soo true. Post more soon cuz you know we do luff ya, you just have to advertise your thread more dear. *pets and huggles*
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06-25-2005, 08:21 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth |
hehe thanx angel. i'm just having a writers block and 4 any1 who reads my poems, i'll have more soon.
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06-28-2005, 12:42 AM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth | another poem
if life were a game,
we'd all lose cuz we'll die in the end
if life were a play
we'd get to decide about what happens to us
if life were a written story
then we'd be able to erase our mistakes
if life were a trial
we'd all be found guilty because of our secrets
if life was war
there wouldn't be love
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06-28-2005, 02:04 PM
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| Antipodean Opaleye
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Wow Charlie that was great. I like the concept and I agree with it.
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07-05-2005, 04:17 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth |
when the sun rises
so does the world
they go about normally
doing what they should
the sun rises higher in the sky
just around noon
it may get hotter
or cooler very soon
but as the sun starts setting
the danger creeps out
and once darkness has fallen
there's no turning back
hehe. i weird poem if u ask me. but i wrote it and i don't mind if it's weird |
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07-05-2005, 05:28 PM
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| Antipodean Opaleye
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Katie Minnson |
It was a little odd charlie. But I still luffed it.
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07-07-2005, 04:52 AM
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| BeekaBeeka Firecrab
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These are great, I really like the first one, keep writing.
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07-07-2005, 06:32 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth | Quote:
Originally Posted by FireboltFreak These are great, I really like the first one, keep writing. thanx. hope u come bak 2 read more.
all my time i've been trying to hold on to u
i let your lies blind me
just because i was i love with u
and i thought u loved me too
now that i look back at all the mistakes i've made
i look at all the obvious sign
and i see that u've been trying 2 tell me
and i blame myself 4 not seeing them
i guess it's not your fault
4 all the pain i've gone through
and i'm not gonna finish that poem because i don't have a good enough ending. now that i look bak at the poem, i think it's kinda odd.....
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07-08-2005, 09:03 PM
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| BeekaBeeka Firecrab
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aurora Mandich |
wow! Great! I love your poems! I like how you said "If life was a story, then we'd be able to erase our mistakes" I've never really thought about it like that.
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07-09-2005, 10:07 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth | Quote:
Originally Posted by FireboltFreak wow! Great! I love your poems! I like how you said "If life was a story, then we'd be able to erase our mistakes" I've never really thought about it like that. thanx. i kinda look at things from a different angle and that's why most ppl think i'm weird.
i followed you around
trying to get your attention
and if i made a sound
you'd tell me to be quiet
you mostly paid attention to her
congratulating her for her acheivements
while i stood there
and the anger flowed through me
it raged behind my eyes
it took over me
and then i took my life
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07-14-2005, 12:49 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth |
hehe, in school they made us write poems likes this, so i decided 2 post one...
I am a friend and a sister
I see what you cannot see
I hear the whispers of the wind
I feel my hair fly around in the wind
I taste sweet fruits
I smell the stench of guilt
I am a friend and a sister
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07-14-2005, 01:48 PM
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| Dugbog
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wow ur poems are amazing i just love them! hehe.
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07-14-2005, 01:54 PM
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| Guest |
I could have lost some brain cells
Reading that was like putting broken shells
Into my brain
Please...please stop the pain
Don't take this seriously or personally it was meant to be humorous I'm sorry if I hurt your feelings. Your poetry is good but its the typical "teenage angst" or depresion or hatred and feeling that everyone is against you and your the only one suffering... I also don't take poems seriously when they are full of "u" or "r" or spelling mistakes.
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07-16-2005, 11:39 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth | Quote:
Originally Posted by hl2 addict I could have lost some brain cells
Reading that was like putting broken shells
Into my brain
Please...please stop the pain
Don't take this seriously or personally it was meant to be humorous I'm sorry if I hurt your feelings. Your poetry is good but its the typical "teenage angst" or depresion or hatred and feeling that everyone is against you and your the only one suffering... I also don't take poems seriously when they are full of "u" or "r" or spelling mistakes.
erm.....ok.... |
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07-17-2005, 05:57 PM
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| You say Weird... I say Original Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Afia Fourth | Complicated
Why am i torn between these two lives
always being put in the middle
forced to choose from the two
when i want them both
why are things so complicated?
why do i feel this way?
the fire burns on inside of me
destroying everything in it's way
everything i've worked for
is falling apart
i'm breaking down
it's tearing me apart
dude i'll finish the rest of this when i get time cuz i have 2 go do something |
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07-19-2005, 09:31 PM
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| *sniff* I love you, man *sniff* Puffskein
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oh afia they rock....keep working >.> or else lol
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07-19-2005, 09:33 PM
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| *sniff* I love you, man *sniff* Puffskein
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wow afia they rock! keep it up >.> or else.
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