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06-03-2004, 02:28 AM
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#26 (permalink)
| | Ramora
Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Starbucks man.
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Here's a little poem that just came up inside my head, lol. Its really not the best I have written but oh well.
How can you describe a feeling,
when its so deep inside?
Do you just close your eyes and
call it a lie?
Or shout from your heat and say,
how much you cried?
How much sorrow can one carry,
when one's life has fallen apart?
And how can you describe this feeling,
when its so lost inside? | 
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06-03-2004, 04:45 AM
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#27 (permalink)
| | Ramora
Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Starbucks man.
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This poem is not really finished, but I posted it anyway, lol.
Lightening
A sweep of anger across the dark sky,
blinding hope who stares by.
Its heart torn from the sky above,
its dreams scattered across the night.
It stretches its dying hope,
gasping for the fading sun,
which has now been covered by the haunting moon above.
This is called moon is its only souce of light,
besides it's own flashing rage.
Can this grief ever reach heaven?
Or has it lost it's sanity?
A sweep of anger across the dark sky,
blinding faith who stares by. | |
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06-04-2004, 03:06 AM
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#28 (permalink)
| | Puffskein
Join Date: Jan 2004
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Hi! I'm a new reader ^^
I will be honest, and say that a few of your poems are just alright...nothing more but not bad either. But some of them are really touching and show more mature writing, such as "Lightning" (Lol your sp was off by just a lil) as well as "Eyes of the Storm". I think that is because that they carry deeper meanings that aren't just a spur of the moment thing, but something all readers can connect with. It's something that I try to work into my poetry as well =) keep writing poems!! I'll be back to read more :flowersmile:
and if you'd like and have some time, my poems are located under the topic "Muses." | |
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06-28-2004, 07:42 AM
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#29 (permalink)
| | Ramora
Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Starbucks man.
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Hehehe, oops..missed the spelling there..lol. Thanks for that! And hank you so much for your reply, it means alot. And yes, I did get to read sum of your poems, I loved the one about the Angels!
Just so you know, I haven't been posting any new poems lately, because I actually have been in Canada most of the time. I have come up with about 5 poems that I have come up with in Canada (and others the past week), and I will be posting them soon! Thanks for reading!! 
~Carolina~ | |
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07-10-2004, 01:15 AM
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#30 (permalink)
| | Ramora
Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Starbucks man.
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Thoughts trapped in small raindrops,
silently dripping emotions of Him.
As silent as my heart,
which covers my soul and mind within.
Forcing me to speak again,
of that say I went to Him.
Drops of truth,
uncovering my blindness,
seeing the true reality of my heart now within.
Thoughts now drowned by the image of Him,
revealing my deepest sin,
of leaving him in the dim.
Her World: (Now I don't really like this poem really..I made this one like a month ago, and I am still not happy with it..*sighs* It needs alot of work)
Reality,
seeming unreal to her.
As she looks out into life,
lost,
and rejected by her thoughts.
This reality now scattered in her eyes.
She turns to her dreams,
finding a truth of her own.
Hiding from others in her world.
Hours its seems,
she lives in her dreams,
afraid to awaken,
to a world which never forsakens.
Tears of sorrow streams down her face,
but disappears in a life's long sleep.
Replaced by a small smile on her lips,
she continues to dream,
for a long while,
where her dreams are what they seem,
Her own reality,
her own world,
her own dream.
A Fallen star:
To wish upon a shooting star,
is its only last hope.
To grant a wish once more,
from another unknown.
But as it falls down to fate,
it grasps on what it can take,
knowing once it hits the ground,
there's nothing to sake.
Oh Fallen star,
lost by its own,
so pure and yet so alone.
Broken among the cold grass,
scattered and hrown across the floor,
among with its dreams and hope.
Fate grasping tight,
onto this little,
lost,
soul.
This fallen star,
its shimmer and glow now had become dull.
Its hope and faith has become nothing more..
Glancing up at the dark skym
one last time,
as it stumbles up,
trying to grasp with all its might,
its home..
and family..
which is now lefted behind.
Alone,
and rejected.
By a flash of light,
and a min. by,
this little torn star,
collaspes to the green-stained ground,
dimming into night.
Unknown and forgotten. | |
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07-10-2004, 01:22 AM
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#31 (permalink)
| | Ramora
Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Starbucks man.
Posts: 5,158
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Here is a song/ poem that I am working on with a group of friends. It has all our emotions mixed together abot how we feel when guys judge us for our appearance. Like being weak and needed of shelter from them. And that we are indepedent (sp?) and not needed of them. I believe alot of the girls out there can relate to this..I don't have a title of it just yet, and nor is it finished.
You peer into me like a faded dream,
blinded from Reality.
I am not what I seem to be,
and yet you keep this image of what Society will have me be,
but a false way to look at me.
But you don't understand how I feel inside,
deprived and lost from my own pride,
Frustrated,
Degraded,
from your view of normal life,
but how do you really know me,
when it's all lies?
Tell me,
Tell me,
that I am wrong,
that I am weak,
when you are strong.
Get a grasp of what is real,
don't you understand how I feel?
If there's only one way you insist to see,
and thats the person I can't be.
I have more to this song/poem and will post it later. Hope you like it. | |
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07-17-2004, 06:23 PM
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#32 (permalink)
| | Ramora
Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Starbucks man.
Posts: 5,158
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*Sobs* Are my poems that bad? I have no longer any replies..lol. | |
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08-20-2004, 09:37 PM
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#33 (permalink)
| | Jarvey
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Why do you want to know anyway?! lol
Posts: 507
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I like them! | |
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09-02-2004, 02:46 AM
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#34 (permalink)
| | Ramora
Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Starbucks man.
Posts: 5,158
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Aww! Thanks Ryan! lol!
Well, here is a poem that I am working on right now, plz tell me wut u think.
Dripping Pain,
scarred sky,
washing the soul from inside.
Soaked hope,
outweighed sorrows,
brings the heart dismayed for hours.
A living death,
so out of breath,
torn emotions now in wrath.
Portrayed hurt,
betrayed heart.
entombed crys displayed in drops. | |
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