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09-11-2007, 12:06 AM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Antigone Michaels Second | The Last Minute Love Letter - Sa13+
Hello, my beloved readers! This is my second fanfic here, my first being Death Can Not Part Us, but it's my first ever one-shot. I wrote it in math class today; it's rather short, but terribly sad, and I would make a bet that it is the only fic on this site that is for this ship. So enjoy, and please review! The Last Minute Love Letter To my love,
I am writing this letter in haste, for this is the last chance I have to tell you I love you. In a few minutes I will be married to another, and I won’t be free to make this sort of confession. My bride is a good woman, but I don’t love her, I could never love her. She isn’t you. She doesn’t return any smiles I give her. She doesn’t laugh when I swear. She doesn’t cry on my shoulder when life isn’t fair, like you once did.
I keep wishing it was you who was wearing a white wedding gown in the next room. I remember when, years ago, I looked at you and I saw my future. I didn’t care that it was forbidden, that I would be disowned and ignored. But I always knew, deep down, that it would never happen. Because then you would be hated as well. I had to protect you. That’s why I betrayed you. I was dying when I did it, and I sit here today, a cold and callous shell; because the good in me is dead. You were the good in me.
I remember the exact moment I fell in love with you, so vividly. That scummy excuse for a man, Potter, had forgotten he was coming to see you, and you walked into our Head-Boy/Head-Girl common room, slamming the door, tears streaming down your beautiful face. I can hear your footsteps still, running to the couch and throwing yourself upon it. I shouldn’t have cared, but I did, I did. I stepped down those stairs, and you looked up at me. There was pure, unchained emotion and loveliness in those eyes. It was in that instant I knew my purpose in life. To love you, and protect you, and change the world so it wouldn’t hurt you any more.
We were the most beautiful secret the world ever knew. I remember the strength that coursed through my veins when you looked at me, with little glances so those around us wouldn’t see. I still feel the anticipation that filled me when I knew we were meeting that day, in some secluded spot where we would sit, with you leaning on me, and talk about what people would say if they knew that a Muggle-born Gryffindor and a pureblooded Slytherin were in the throes of passion. Even now, if I close my eyes, I can still make myself believe I’m with you.
You’ve probably moved on, and forgotten our secret love. I bet you married that Potter fool, I wonder if you told him about us? Maybe you have children now, with your bright green eyes that I drowned in over and over again. And now you’re reading this letter, thinking I’m an idiot for not letting go, and for daring to write you this. Maybe you never forgave me, why would you, and you think of me now with hate and anger, and not sadness, nor nostalgia. I am just the cold, hateful boy the rest of the school had accepted me as.
But the truth is that you changed me. You made me the man I wanted to be. You made me realize that love, not blood, or status, is what makes us good. When I was with you, I discovered how shallow my existence was, believing I was superior because of a family name. Some may have said that you were below me, but in my own eyes, I was scum compared to you. You were sweet, and pure, and great, and I was low, and rude, and foul. But somehow you found it in your heart to care about an underling like me, and I hurt you, betrayed your trust. I sunk even lower as I tore your heart in pieces. I will be forever, and hopelessly sorry, and I will always regret it, even though I know it would have been selfish to keep you for my own.
I must finish now, and send this letter before someone comes, or I lose my nerve. I know that you will hear about my marriage to Narcissa Black before you receive this last declaration of love. Because I love you, Lily, and I will never stop. Forever yours,
Lucius
Lily trembled as she read his name, the blessed name of the only man she truly loved. She kissed the letter, and tossed it into the fire place, knowing it was wrong to keep it. A tear slipped down her cheek, and she wiped it away. She glanced at her reflection in the mirror, her reddish-brown hair contrasting against her white wedding dress. Taking a deep breath, she stepped into the alcove of the chapel. She stared into the adoring faces turning to look at her, and faked a smile at the groom, James Potter, wishing with all her soul he was a tall blonde named Malfoy.
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09-11-2007, 01:31 AM
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| Keeper of Dan’s Grace Puffskein
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1st!
WHOA! its GOOOD!
Your right, that ship has probably never been done!
Hmm...... it would make an interesting FF.
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09-11-2007, 10:30 AM
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| Moke
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Katelyn Quillio Fifth Year | Aquila Pacis ha, i like it a lot. no, i LOVE it. its different, no one has ever done that before. i love how it ends sadly, (dont ask)...it just..i cant explain it. if it didnt end sadly it wouldnt be so good. anyways...i like a lot. it would make an interesting fanfic, but one shots are cool because you leave the reader hanging, and we have to make up the end, use our imagination. good job, i cant do one shots all that well yet. peace out
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09-11-2007, 09:20 PM
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| Imp
Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: In a strange and unfair world.
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Antigone Michaels Second |
wow, thank you guys! nice comments always make my day. ya know, i sort of thought of the lucius/lily ship myself, but then i looked it up, and i have found people who support them, and some fanfics about them. but i'm sure this is the first on this site. and kate, i know what you mean about the sad ending. titanic wouldn't have been anywhere as good if jack didn't die. just a little fun fact, when i wrote this i would stop a lot and think about what to say next, so i didn't really get the full effect. so, later that day i read it all the way through, and i almost cried, right there in the middle of science class, lol.
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09-11-2007, 10:48 PM
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| Moke
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Katelyn Quillio Fifth Year | Aquila Pacis haha thats pretty funny. i cant write in class...it doesnt work. im a good student and if i dont pay attention, or if i miss sumthin i freak! but anyways, im glad u know what the heck im talking bout. the sad ending thing. u should write more fanfics, u should!
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09-12-2007, 12:35 AM
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| It's Sirius..why else? James' Glasses Remus Artiste Jarvey
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omg! I love it!
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09-12-2007, 01:20 AM
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| Kappa
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Andrew James Preston Seventh Year x7
| Melly Bean | aussiegirl | a Supernatural freak
Omg Jenna that was extremely cool. That was way off from whom I was thinking. I can't believe you got that written during your math class excellent writing.
Mel
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09-12-2007, 01:26 AM
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| Fwooper
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| omg I LOVED THAT!
It's one of the best One-Shots I've read in the longest time! Odd pairing, but amazing, none the less! |
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09-12-2007, 09:15 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Antigone Michaels Second | Quote:
Originally Posted by hpfan4eva u should write more fanfics, u should! hmm... well, i have a small notebook of ideas, but i want to get mostly done with Death Can Not Part Us, which i've been neglecting, before i start a new one. i'll tell you if i do, tho.
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09-12-2007, 09:29 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Antigone Michaels Second |
i can't figure out how to do the multiple-quote thing, so i'm doing my own version, except for kate's comments, cause i did that seperately.
"1st!
WHOA! its GOOOD!
Your right, that ship has probably never been done!
Hmm...... it would make an interesting FF."
thanks! actually, they have some pretty neat lucius/lily fics at fanfiction.com, i didn't write the first ever, tho that would be cool. i may write a full length fic about lucius/lily in the future, but not with this plot, cause i like this one as a one-shot.
"omg! I love it!"
thank you! if you like this, check out my other fic called "Death Can Not Part Us" in the Restricted Section.
"Omg Jenna that was extremely cool. That was way off from whom I was thinking. I can't believe you got that written during your math class excellent writing.
Mel"
thanks a ton! yeah, that was one of the reasons i like it, the ship you expect it to be, which could have been draco/hermione, snape/lily, etc, would have been fairly normal, and then WHAM! i whip out the lucius/lily! and yeah, i hate my math class... geometry SUCKS!!!
"omg I LOVED THAT!
It's one of the best One-Shots I've read in the longest time! Odd pairing, but amazing, none the less!"
Wow! i really can't thank you enough, that's a big compliment! yeah, i got a little hooked on the malfoy-mudblood pairings, i'm a huge dramione shipper, and i jumped on the lucius/lily bandwagon, too. hey, it'd be cool if you could read my other fic, if you didn't mind...
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09-13-2007, 03:49 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Ellen Calaway First Year | R/Hr Bridesmaid
Wow, that is a really awsome one shot FF. At first I thought that you where writing about Draco and Hermione. I never would have suspected a Mr. Malfoy/lily ship. You should write more ff's about this ship, I think they would be really interesting to read. You're a really good writer!
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09-13-2007, 08:38 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Antigone Michaels Second | Quote:
Originally Posted by EmmaRules Wow, that is a really awsome one shot FF. At first I thought that you where writing about Draco and Hermione. I never would have suspected a Mr. Malfoy/lily ship. You should write more ff's about this ship, I think they would be really interesting to read. You're a really good writer! thanks! wow, i never thought this fic would get such a good reaction...
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09-15-2007, 06:45 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Jake Chatich First Year | FanFic Enthusiast WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!!!!!
Jenna I really really liked it!! It brought me so many tears!
I really never thought of that ship nor did I ever hear about it but it was a really good idea!!!
You wrote that in math and science class?!? I can't believe it, I always write my ff in math and science class, always!!!!!! lol! I get so bored and they really aren't my best classes... I mean My dream is to be an actress and science... math....??? NO WAY!!
But, hey, did you ever think of writing a ff about L/L?? It would be really good!!
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09-15-2007, 07:36 PM
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| Moke
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Kaitlynn Hopsisk Second Year | Hope is the only thing stronger than fear. I was sitting here thinking draco and 'minoe at first i dont know why then I read her green eyes and i thought her eyes arent green then i read Lily and im like oh.I did read the part where you staed it was probably never done before but i still the draco and 'mione.It was really good.
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09-15-2007, 07:38 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Antigone Michaels Second |
"WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!!!!!
Jenna I really really liked it!! It brought me so many tears!
I really never thought of that ship nor did I ever hear about it but it was a really good idea!!!
You wrote that in math and science class?!? I can't believe it, I always write my ff in math and science class, always!!!!!! lol! I get so bored and they really aren't my best classes... I mean My dream is to be an actress and science... math....??? NO WAY!!
But, hey, did you ever think of writing a ff about L/L?? It would be really good!!
-*~ Shirel ~*-"
thanks so much! i'm glad it made someone else cry, so i don't feel like such a crybaby. yeah, i don't like math or science much, either. and i dream of being a writer, so like, math and sceince is just blech... and yeah, maybe after i finish my other ff, i'll write a lucius/lily... but then again, i also want to do a ron/luna, so, idk...
"I was sitting here thinking draco and 'minoe at first i dont know why then I read her green eyes and i thought her eyes arent green then i read Lily and im like oh.I did read the part where you staed it was probably never done before but i still the draco and 'mione.It was really good.
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Heather
yeah, i was hinting at draco and hermione for a reason, so l/l had more shock value. thanks for the compliment! i really like people who say nice things.
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09-15-2007, 07:43 PM
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| Moke
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Katelyn Quillio Fifth Year | Aquila Pacis ron/luna? whoa never heard of that one! lol...im not good at ships. i would much rather create new characters, because since i am no JKR, i cannot ever fully write any of her characters the way she does, i wouldnt be able to capture their persona's as well. anyways...yeah this fic ALMOST made me cry, had it not been that it was Lily and Lucius, then i would have cried. but i feel too much hatred for Lucius to feel bad for him.
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09-15-2007, 08:22 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Antigone Michaels Second |
that's ok, i love you anyway. see, i'm sorta the opposite, i like to mess around with her characters, like, if a character is portrayed as strictly bad, i want to explore their good side. so, i tend to support and write about really unconventional ships. i'm really not so great at creating my own characters and weaving them into a previously written world. i really can't hate lucius, cause my nature wants to see the good in him. but hey, i really love the characters you create, you have a talent for it.
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09-15-2007, 08:26 PM
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| Moke
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Katelyn Quillio Fifth Year | Aquila Pacis *bows* thank you, thank you. i guess i create good characters cuz im pretty good at acting. *shrugs* no idea. but i do loveeee it so much, creating new charries. i am currestly....writting a few stories, but i cant post them on this site. because...firstly, nothing to do with Hp and secondly, cuz they are pretty..inapriate. anyways...yeah, thats coool. i wish i could write like that. I could never write Lucius Malfoy being a good guy.i would fail miseraly. lol
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09-15-2007, 08:40 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Antigone Michaels Second |
that's ok, you're good at writing differently. i like getting inside the character's head, and writing them as a full spectrum, not just 1-D. as i get farther in to my other ff, i'm probably going to get into hermione, ron, and harry's bad sides, though not as much as i'm going to show the good sides of people like draco and voldy. though, i did write lucius like a real bad guy in DCNPU. (lol, death can not part us)
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09-18-2007, 12:54 AM
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| Moke
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Kaitlynn Hopsisk Second Year | Hope is the only thing stronger than fear. Quote:
yeah, i was hinting at draco and hermione for a reason, so l/l had more shock value. thanks for the compliment! i really like people who say nice things.
oh im just one of thoes i need her to read my fan fic type of people because ive read almost every story on ss scince i joined.It was lovley reading your story hope you post another one soon.
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Heather
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09-22-2007, 01:16 AM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Shawn Pularid Fifth Year | Quote:
Originally Posted by springbaby I was sitting here thinking draco and 'minoe at first i dont know why then I read her green eyes and i thought her eyes arent green then i read Lily and im like oh.I did read the part where you staed it was probably never done before but i still the draco and 'mione.It was really good.
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Heather Yeah I agree. I thought it was actully ginny and malfoy though.
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09-22-2007, 09:18 AM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Antigone Michaels Second | Quote:
Originally Posted by springbaby oh im just one of thoes i need her to read my fan fic type of people because ive read almost every story on ss scince i joined.It was lovley reading your story hope you post another one soon.
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Heather oh, that's ok. hey, i did put up another one shot, it's called hero, in the restricted section.
and yeah, when one of my friends read it, she thought it was draco/ginny, but then she's like, "wait, you hate draco/ginny." cause i do.
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09-22-2007, 09:29 PM
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| SS 100 Triumphant Kappa
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Danny Logan Edwards Sixth Year x1
| Shipper Queen Hippie Quad Wow!!!!!!!
I have never once heard of that pairing before!!
It was Awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!! Really great!!!
Oh and to multiquote you just hit the middle link between the "Quote button" and the one with a paper and a pencil. If you put your arrow on it it should say "Multi-quote this Message"
When you click on it, it should turn red. Then you go to the next person you want to quote and you push the "Quote" button. It then will take you to Somewhere else and you can write your message under their quote.
You can do this for how many people you want.
I hope that helped
Great One shot!!!!!
*Steph*
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