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01-20-2008, 03:06 AM
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The Day I Died…
It hurts. It hurts physically as bad as emotionally. It hurts. I can’t stand it. I want you so bad. But you belong to somebody else. Always and forever. You were meant for each other. Always and forever.
Being friends when I had no one was the greatest thing you could ever do for me. It brought me hope for the future. Maybe I could be like you someday. Maybe it could actually happen between us, even though we come from two totally different worlds. Maybe I can change for the better.
I want you. I need you. I can’t live with out you.
Everyday I would wake up just because I knew I would see your radiant face in potions. Everyday I would get out of bed just so I could see your gleaming smile. Everyday your laugh would get me through the day.
The day you came to me, happier than a blooming flower, was the day you broke my heart. You told me that you two were finally a couple. I don’t think the grin on your face could’ve gotten any bigger. Little did you know the patience inside me was growing slimmer.
I wish things could be different. I wish you could look at me with those bright green, enticing eyes like you do to him. I wish I could hold you in my arms, every morning, every day, every night. I wish I could look at your smile and know without words that you love me. I wish things could be different.
The day I tried to kiss you was the day you broke my heart. You told me you were with him and that you loved him. Little did you know, I loved you.
But you choose him. After everything we have been through; the confusion and hurt he put you through and the crap he used to pull on me through my years. But you chose him.
The day you came to me saying you were engaged was the day you broke my heart. You told me you were the luckiest girl in the world. Little did you know you were killing me in the inside.
If only it was me and you getting married. I would’ve made you happier than you would ever be. If only we were together, you would be making me the happiest man in the world.
The day you got married was the day you broke my heart. You were the most beautiful person in the would. It was like an angel had breathed on you. Little did you know I was growing uglier inside.
I swear I saw an actual glow radiating from your smile. I swear I saw a halo forming around your lovely head. I swear I saw the angels kissing your face.
The day you told me you were with child was the day you broke my heart. You told me you were scared, but you couldn’t hide the smile from you eyes. Little did you know I was more scared than ever.
You were finally going to be a mother. A girl’s wildest dream, come true. To be able to answer to mommy. To be able to hold the bundle of joy in your arms at night. To be able to see a life grow before your eyes. To be able to say it was you, who made this miracle.
The day the baby was born was the day you broke my heart. You were a mother. Finally! He was here. Finally! You could hold him. Finally! Little did you know a grudge was born with him.
He looked like him. He had his father’s hair. He had his father’s jaw. He had his father’s hands. But he had your eyes.
The day of your murder was the day I died…
Ok this was a One Shot. I hope you all liked it! Please tell me what you think 
Banner=Emily (Pigwidgeon Took)
*Steph*
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01-20-2008, 05:57 PM
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| | Billywig
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OH MY GOSH STEPHYKINS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  
That was absolutely amazing! That was soooooo great! I can't wait until you write another one! *glompsclingshuggles*
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01-20-2008, 09:35 PM
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| | Mooncalf
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Oh my Gosh, Stephyness. That was Gorgeous! 
And I would have never guessed it was seVans. Thanks for ruining it, Grace! Pwahaha 
Anyway, You did A great job and I cant wait for you to write more! 
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01-20-2008, 09:44 PM
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| | Firecrab
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Omg! That was a SeVan?!? It took me a while to decipher it.. Wonderful! I loved it! | |
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01-21-2008, 12:28 AM
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| | Gnome
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That was really good
i had to read the replies to tell who was talking
not my fault
im blond
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01-21-2008, 02:44 AM
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| | Blast-Ended Skrewt
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that was great
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01-21-2008, 03:52 AM
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DD's Bravery
Tonks' HappinessMooncalf
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ZOOOOMG  . Stephers, that was beyond amazing. seVans honestly isn't my favorite ship, but I think I like it just a bit more than I did before  .
I didn't understand it was seVans until the bit about him having Lily's eyes, and then everything made sense.
Anways, that was truely great though, Steph. | |
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01-21-2008, 03:56 AM
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| | Manticore
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Ohmigosh. Steph, that was awesome! You're a wonderful writer! | |
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01-21-2008, 04:11 AM
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| | Kappa
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HOLYSNAPSICKLES.
ZOMGGG.
FUDGESICKLES.
GAHHHHHH.
If I could continue, I would include more flaming due to my new-sworn love for your writing!
You're uh-ma-zing! Seriouslyyy. A complete mushface, but we're all girls and we---> ADORE SEVANS!
That was amazing. Have I mentioned that already? Get your tush to writing moreee!
Please? Pweeety Pweety Pweez? With a Cherry on Top?
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01-21-2008, 04:08 PM
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Thank you Shan~Shan! You thought it was amazing Your too kind to me  I do have another one coming up (It wont be SeVans  ) But like I said before, I dont like as much. I think this one came out better Thanx again Heeheeee!! I thought you would of guessed on MSN when I wouldnt tell you 
Thank you so much Mah Lil Elephant shaped like an owl 
And Im not really a Snape lover either. But stories for him just float in my head and I just have to write them down.
Well Im glad you liked it still even thought it wasnt the J/L one I promised Thanx Monish!!
And yes Gracie Grace has to ruin it doesnt she 
(Just kidding Mah Long Lost Cousin!! )
When I wrote it, I didnt really have any intention to make it clear that it was SeVans. (It is SeVans, but yeah  )
So if you didnt get that it was, its ok. I didnt really mean for you to figure it out
But if you figure it out great Quote:
Originally Posted by D/hr4evr  Omg! That was a SeVan?!? It took me a while to decipher it.. Wonderful! I loved it! Yes, it was SeVans. But like I told Moni above, I didnt really have any intention to write SeVans, but it came out SeVans. So when I dont mean to start out writing it, I tend to not make it clear who it is, but drop small hints to what it is 
Its ok, if you didnt understand it was SeVans right away
Read it a couple more times and maybe you will get it
Thank you for readin!! Quote:
Originally Posted by TriwizardChamp12 That was really good
i had to read the replies to tell who was talking
not my fault
im blond Thank you. Im glad you liked it
Yesh the Oneshot was a little deep, so I didnt make it real clear on who it was. I did drop hints though. And I know its not because your blond that you didnt get it I know your really smart Quote:
Originally Posted by eric_2007al_2006 that was great Why thank you *Beams*
Im glad you enjoyed it Thanx Mah Lil Nikki!
Yeah I guess a couple of people were having trouble figuring out it was SeVans
But you are the only one (besides Gracie Grace that is, or Shan~Shan probably ) who got the eyes thing.
That was one of the main hints I threw in there to show it was SeVans
Im glad you got it
So glad you liked it
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Originally Posted by Granger1814 Ohmigosh. Steph, that was awesome! You're a wonderful writer! Thank you Sabs
Im glad you liked it!
And I dont know about a "wonderful" writer...
Ahhh you made me blush
Thanx again!! *Ish smiling so big her face hurts* Quote:
Originally Posted by XoxXtinaxox09 HOLYSNAPSICKLES.
ZOMGGG.
FUDGESICKLES.
GAHHHHHH.
If I could continue, I would include more flaming due to my new-sworn love for your writing!
You're uh-ma-zing! Seriouslyyy. A complete mushface, but we're all girls and we---> ADORE SEVANS!
That was amazing. Have I mentioned that already? Get your tush to writing moreee!
Please? Pweeety Pweety Pweez? With a Cherry on Top?
<3
Thanx!! Im glad you liked it.
Heeeheee!! And the funny thing was, when this story came to mind, it wasnt SeVans. But as I kept writing it, I changed a couple of things and made it SeVans.
Ive wrote another SeVans before (the link in my siggie "Why?" )
I will so write again, just because you put a cherry on top!
I love cherrys!!
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01-21-2008, 04:13 PM
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that was great! I knew it was a seVans when it said he had her eyes. it was amazing! | |
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01-21-2008, 07:15 PM
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| | Moke
Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: New Orleaaanss!
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HEY! i thought you said you werent a SEVANS SHIPPER!
hhaaahaa! for not being a fan that was AMAZING, STEPHYY!
I LOVEDD IT! AND IM A HUGEE SEVANS FAN I LOVED IT!
*dies*
LOVED IT. WHOOT!
*Kate*
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01-21-2008, 07:26 PM
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| | Snidget
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HeLlO mah sTePh!!
It's your crazy friend who dropped in to read your amzing one shot!!!!! You really know the secret to make me cry, don't you? lol
It took me a while, to figure it was a sevans. I was reading others people's comments and they were all talking about a Sevans and I was like, 'what? wait a minute'. Now it makes sense to me once I think about it.
Well, I have to say I am soo much more serious here than I am in your ff! What happended to me? I guess you made it so deep that I was so in to it. I like felt what Snape was feeling. You really know how to describe his feelings really well.
Great job!!!!!!!!!!
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01-21-2008, 09:20 PM
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|  Back from the PastPuffskein
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Wow Steph, you've outdone yourself once again. That was really phenomenal writing. Loving the SeVans lol.
oh yah and don't think I didn't miss you, cuz I did!!!!
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01-22-2008, 03:52 PM
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| | Graphorn
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OMG!!!! This story was just wonderful and i loved it. would you write some more storys please. your a wonderful writer and i couldent moved my eyes from the screen until i finished teh story.
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01-22-2008, 03:57 PM
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Excellent. Amazing. Touching. Can't find any more words to descaribe it.  | |
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01-23-2008, 02:04 AM
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01-25-2008, 07:33 AM
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| | Fire Slug
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Wow, very cool!
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01-27-2008, 05:54 AM
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| | Puffskein
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OMG Steph! that was awesome I never like Sevans that much but the way you wrote this was awsome! Kepp up the good work Steph and I can't wait intil you to write more love Ya!
~Alexia~
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01-28-2008, 11:42 AM
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I really liked it.
You're a great writer.
Well done. =D
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01-28-2008, 03:32 PM
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| | Veela
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wow. this is amazing, Steph! It's so poetic and heart-felt. poor Snapey. that last line. it almost made me cry...but I held back coz mom was watching me. if she weren't I probably did cry! | |
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01-29-2008, 02:04 AM
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02-05-2008, 03:09 AM
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| | Horklump
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That was really good! It was so much like Snape well except the way that you'll never imagine Snape saying those exact sweet words. But nontheless I love it! Good work!
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02-05-2008, 03:20 AM
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Originally Posted by Frodo Baggins That was really good! It was so much like Snape well except the way that you'll never imagine Snape saying those exact sweet words. But nontheless I love it! Good work! Thank you!
Yes well he was feeling sweet that day
Im glad you read it and liked it
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