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Girls this is amazing. PAMS. I love it:loved: |
This is wonderful! I really like it! Well done Evvie and Lily! Can't wait for the next chapter! |
Love it so far! Great characterization, the various POVS on the situation and the war are really well done. One thing that could make this even better was if you made the posts a bit longer - sometimes I feel like before you have the time to really delve into one character you've already moved onto the next. But apart from that, it's absolutely brilliant *goes off to subscribe* :D |
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*dances* I glad you like it :P More soon i hope. I really want to know more too! I wonder what will happen. Quote:
Thank You so much for reading also. Im sure there should be a update soon. I hope :D |
Eviee and Lily! :loved: Love H/G. Favourite couple!! I love how both of you write. :D ♥Stef♥ |
Oh wow! I love, love, love it! you guys are great writers! *subscribes! |
Aww. Thats so cute. Ginny and Harry are so lovely together. I hope things work out for them! Harry needs to talk to someone. I worry about him! Great post Eviee! PAMS Girls. Soph x |
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Thats for reading! I really like that you are! I agree, my best couple :loved: I hope it works out for them. Hmm, and about Harry talking to someone....i guesss your'll have to wait and see..I know i'd like the read that! :P Thanks again! |
This is the best FF I've read so far (Out of three other) It's really exciting and I'm interested in knowing how would the characters act after the battle. I totally love the relationships G\H and Hr\R :xd: Your way of writing is awesome and I don't get bored after two mins as I usually do :P Keep up the good job and keep me posted ^_^ Love! |
Chapter 5 A Rueful Kiss I stared at her. Just stared. Luna blinked up at me, obviously shocked. I couldn't understand why. We were on and off... kinda. I went scarlett all the same, and looked at our audience, and my ears went crimson. Dean looked furious. ...But why would he be furious? He had no reason at all. I felt his eyes glare holes into my back but I just looked at Luna. It didn't feel right. How could not? I'd pictured this a million times, but the boys in my dorm promised that I would feel like melting when I kissed the girl I loved. I frowned. "N-Neville?" Luna whispered, her eyes wide with confusion. She looked like a little girl. She looked a little panicked at Dean and I knew that Dean wasn't a one man audience. I turned. Hannah Abbott. Her eyes were wider than poor Luna. Her face was bloody. Her lips were swollen and her nose was ever so slightly crooked. I winced when I remembered how after I executed Nagini, she ran over to me and ripped her cloak so that she could mop up quickly the blood. I could even remember how her hair had brushed my cheek. Her eyes went hazy and she ran off, crying. Luna looked horrified. I felt horrorfied. When minutes went by (they seemed like days) and Luna finally said, "Oh Neville." I looked at her and she smiled. I suddenly realized that Dean had left. I would talk to him later. Luna smiled again. "Neville...our we-?" She frowned. "I guess." Luna grinned and hugged me but when she pulled away I thought I caught the look of reluctancy. I smiled awkwardly. She brought her lips to mine and I thought I felt something. Then...nothing. Nothing. I grimaced for I split second when we pulled apart. Luna smiled, showing teeth. I mentally hit myself. She was so happy. I love her. Why am I not? "Do you want to go Wrackspurk hunting?" Luna asked, pulling out two specta-specks. "Sure." And we walked off, arm-in-arm. Her going on about putting Wrackspurt Away Spray on and wishing she hadn't. sorry it's so short and crappy. *pout-yFace* |
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Awwwwwwwww! *huggles Neville* I'm happy for him... I always wanted him with Luna :evil: THEY MATCH! :woot: I liked it! And short chapters are my fav :xd: |
Awww. I'm so happy:D I love Neville and Luna...They are the cutest XD. PAMS! Great Chapter! Soph x |
Heya All. Sorry for th wait for my chapter But first week of College and all - first ever week - and i havn't got round to starting it yet! *hides* But i promise to have it posted up soon. Eviee <333 |
Chapter 6: A Wrong Thought I turned the shower off, frustration bubbling over. Stupid thing, no hot water left. Glaring at the shower, I pulled my underwear up, forgetting to dry off first, so I was soaking them in the process. I swore under my breath. I hadn't bothered bringing clothes, just my underwear, a bathrobe and a towel. What girl wouldn't want to see my bare chest? I wrapped the towel around my middle just for effect. Chuckling darkly to myself, I abandoned my bathrobe and started down the corridor in my bare feet. A cluster of girls past me, Romilda Vane included, giggled uncontrollably. A smirk formed on my lips, and my walk turned into a strut. One of the girl's took a sharp intake of breath and stuttered, “H-Hello Dr-Aco?” I raised my eyebrows, and ran a hand through my pale sopping wet hair, droplets flying over to them. Romilda moved away from the group and tried to walk like a model. She tried to look dark, but with her smudged eye-liner and mascara, she resembled some sad raccoon who the other raccoons refused to mate with. “Hell-ooo Draco.” I arched an eyebrow. “Romilda,” I gave her a jerk of my handsome head to acknowledge her. She stopped in her tracks at the lack of tone in my voice. I continued down the corridor and felt fury fill me as my mother ran up to me, “Draccciess!” I rolled my eyes. She stopped in her tracks and looked down at the towel wrapped around my waist. “Draco Malfoy, you know better than to go around in the nude.” I glared holes at her (not exactly at her face, I would be murdered if I did that, no, at her stupidly big hair). “I'm not really naked,” I hissed through my teeth, shooting a glare at Dean Thomas who was snorting back laughter. “I'm wearing underwear underneath,” My mother through back her head and let out a very girly-ish giggle and pinched my cheeks. “N'aww...You silly ickle hormone crazed teen!” The copper headed blood traitor and the Mudblood passed by. “...And then I kissed him!”... “Gin, That's great!” But then they stopped short when they heard my mum. Hermione shoved her knuckles into her mouth to stop from laughing. Ginny just let out a laugh that sounded like music. I blushed furiously. I wished she hadn't seen that. I wished that the ground would open up right there and then and swallow me. I wished- Wait! Why did I care if the blood traitor saw me? Frowning I jerked away from my mother's grasp and stalked off to the Slytherin common room. When I entered the first thing I heard was; “Dracykins!!” I sniffed the air in discust and found that Pansy Parkinson was trying to kiss me. She pulled my neck down and pushed her lips to mine. She slipped her tongue in and tried to get me to kiss her back. I was tempted to spit in her mouth but decided that it was safest just to push her away. She frowned for a split second but smiled and leaned on my shoulder. She giggled and looked down at the towel. I snorted. She was so stupid. Astoria Greengrass, a fifth year Slytherin, one of the only to come back after the war decended down the stairs to the dorms. She smiled flirtaously at me and plonked down in one of the green sofas with a book. I grinned at her and looked at the cow now playing with a hair on my chest and thought of how she said she came back because she wanted to see her one true love, Dracykins. I scowled at the air and pulled away from her. She let out a shocked moan and went off to sulk on the hardest couch. I got dressed, the When I got back down, I sat down beside Astoria. She smiled shyly up at me from her book. I frowned briefly and then flashed a smile at her. She was the most un-Slytherin Slytherin I've ever met. “So...How's it, Tori?” I asked, not looking at the cow sulking in the corner. Tori looked up at me, pink colouring her cheeks. “My sister was killed...” She gulped. A wrapped an arm around her in comfort. “Sorry.” “'S okay.” I smiled awkwardly. She went back to her book and I stared at the green flames in the mantle piece. The redheaded girl smiled at me in my mind. I cursed myself silently for thinking that and stared straight at the cackling flames. |
Awww. Cute! I love the way you made Narcissa. Hilarious! :D |
EDIT! First things first. Im really really really really really sorry for the late post of my chapter. But because i love you guys so much im posting two chapters :) The reason i've not been posting is because i've just started college...kinda getting used to it all and such. Good News; Great Friends and Lushh funny moments ;) Bad News; Early morning's, boring bus joruney's etc etc :lol: Anyway I'd like to dedicate this chapter to all our reader's, And without further ado here we go :) Mistakes. The corridors were deserted and I didn't see anyone anywhere. Not that I was surprised; the Professors had called everyone to the Great Hall for something. I had slipped out to try and find him. I had noticed Harry hadn't been in the hall and that meant he must be with her! Before I could go any farther in my thoughts, I saw him. He was strolling towards me - and he was alone! Smiling, I ran the few steps between us and threw myself into his arms. I felt him stumble as he tried to balance me. "C-Cho!" He managed to gasp as I hugged him. Finally, I let go to look at him, smiling, but without letting go of his hands. Before I could do or say anything else, I saw her walk around the corner with a smile on her face. Ginny Weasley. Girlfriend to Harry Potter. Well I would put a stop to that. after all, he loved me, didn't he, and not her! Without a second thought I grabbed hold of Harry's face and kissed him. On the mouth. Right in front of Ginny. I could feel Harry struggling under the kiss, trying to break free. I held on but when I finally let go he jumped a mile from me. I didn't care. He'd soon realize he loved me and not her. Peeking over at Ginny I saw she had her wand raised, at me! I stepped back a little, her face bore pure anger - directed at me Uh oh... I looked at Harry, who had surprise and horror playing on his face, looking at Ginny also. I knew i was going to be hexed. People had warned me not to mess with Ginny Weasley. I had ignored them, and now i was going to pay the price. I closed my eyes and waited. But the impact never came. Opening my eyes i saw Harry take hold of Ginny and turned her so her back was to me. I watched him stare into her eyes. There was such love there in his eyes, and it stung. What had I done? They were sure to fight about me. There was no way to deny Harry Potter and Ginny Weasley were in love. I wish i could take back the kiss, the thoughts. I wish i had never fallen for Harry but he had seemed such the gentleman after Cedric had died. Always willing to help others before himself, and I had slowly fallen for him. I didn't want to turn into some girl - like Lavender Brown, who constantly tried to steal other people's boyfriends. I stepped back wishing the ground would swallow me up. "The-the Professor's want everyone in the Great Hall" I stammered, continuously backing away. They didn't respond to me or each other. I didn't care. I turned and fled, I didn't want to be there when their voices raised. I blame myself. The Beginning. "B4" I watched as my chess piece moved forward to knock Seamus's off the board. I laughed triumphantly. I was winning. People, mostly spectators, cheered all around us. The atmosphere around the school had lifted the past few weeks, now supporting happiness like in the old days. Everyone were lingering all around the Great Hall. Some cheering our game, some talking, some kissing etc. We were all waiting for something, the reason we were all called into the Great Hall instead of enjoying the beautiful weather and the freedom of not having to fear the darkest wizard in the world. Well, the darkest wizard in England, anyway. Looking over across the hall I saw the clustered Professor's huddled together, talking in low voices. They seemed to be arguing about something. Maybe what they were going to tell us. I shrugged and directed my eyes around the hall again. My eyes fell on a girl as she ran through the hall door's. I recognized her as Cho Chang. She looked like she had been running, and looked a bit upset. Before I could act upon my thoughts of seeing what was wrong, I was interrupted by cheering all around me. I whipped my head round to see one of my knights being dragged off the board in piece's. Damn! "Not as good at this as you thought, are you?" Seamus taunted me as I scanned the board for my next move. I finally moved my king after a few minutes. Now it was war between us. I looked back over to where i had seen Cho, she had disappeared and in her place stood the newly reunited couple, Ginny and Harry. They were wrapped up in each other's arms, I noticed. I looked away in...sadness? anger? I really didn't know what to think about my ex girlfriend now dating the famous Harry Potter. Happy? I sighed. Peeking down at the nearly finished chess game for like the tenth time in a minute I noticed a mistake Seamus had made in a move of his. Didn't he notice? Smiling i barked my command and watched my piece take out his. My smile widened at his groan. "Ladies and Gentleman--!" A voice suddenly boomed stopping mine and Seamus's chess game, and everything else anyone had been doing a second before. I faced the now speaking Professor McGonagall. I saw the Professors line up behind her. "Firstly, I'd like to announce we will be opening the school again next year, for all those who would have finished their seventh year this year and would like to come back again to retake it please see me later." She paused as she scanned the room. She didn't have the same affect on the students that Professor Dumbledore had possessed, but she still held people's attention. "But what I have called you all here today to talk about is.." She continued still scanning the hall for any wrong doers. "...That after much of a discussion from all of your Professor's here, we have decided to hold a Wizard Game's here this summer. All those who reach the age limit may enter. If you would like to enter your name for any other the games then please see me after." She stopped again, waiting for the raised chatter to die down a little, "The list of the games which will be held will shortly be posted in the common rooms," She added last before stepping down. Instantly the noise in the hall raised to a high climax. My chess game was abandoned as i excitedly started to talk to Seamus about which game i would possibly enter. It was going to be so exciting. I peeked around the hall again, noticing Draco talking and laughing with some girl, whom I knew as Astoria. I stared for a few second's before moving on. Not to far away from them stood Harry Potter and his two best friends, Ron Weasley and Hermione Granger. Ginny Weasley also stood holding Harry's hand. Jumping up from my seat I pushed my way through the mass of student's until I was standing next to them. "Can you believe this?" I asked excitedly. "This is going to be so fun!" I declared smiling at them all. I heard Ginny giggle at me as i ranted on, and I smiled at her. "You guys should enter. I bet you'd win hands down!" I carried on much to their amusement. Pausing for breath I looked around at them all, still smiling. I watched as they turned to look at each other, silently talking. Finally Ron shrugged and answered for them. "Sure why not?" he said, much to my delight. So what did you think? Eviee <33 |
OMG!! I'm so sorry Eviee and Lily, that I haven't read 3 chappies in a while. :gasp: I've just been busy with getting ready for holidays and everything. I love all of it! Keep up the brilliant work! :woot: ♥Stef♥ |
Ahhh They were great chappies girls What was that Cho?! OMG I thought Ginny would have hexed her into the next century! PAMS! Soph x :glomp: :glomp: |
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I can't believe I haven't read much of this fic! But I've read it all now, and I loved it, so bloody much! It's beautiful the way it's written, and I was almost scared for Cho when she kissed Harry Hope you update it soon, it's a fantastic fic! -Laura:loved: |
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Really quick review cause I have to leave! AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME! I feel.. Bad for a few people, and the Draco chapter made me giggle like a lunatic.. Poor Dean! I wanted him and Luna together.. Hehe. Amazing job! And Cho.. Leave now and never come back! :P |
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Yeah... I was bursting with laughter writing that. Felt a tweensy eensy bit bad for Pansy but she's a cow so... *scoffs&snorts* Dean: Yeah me too- Wait I did NOT just say that did I? Uhm crap... *you didn't hear anything...* Thank you. Cho: EXCUSE ME? Don't you DARE say that aggaaiinnn! *grinds teeth* LilEH |
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