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| Dusty Cellar (Incomplete Fanfiction) The cellar holds unfinished confections of storytelling, giving readers a glimpse into creative ideas that may one day be revived. |
09-28-2010, 08:25 PM
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| Jobberknoll
Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: New Joiiiseeyyy Kidd
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Jayson Melanie Shadow Sixth Year |
Chapter 24:this is a world of dreams and reverie...
Jess's POV:
I was frozen.Immobile.Stuck. So many words could explain my feeling right now. I couldn't open my eyes or shout out to Draco,tell anyone what occured.But I was painfully aware of everything around me.
I knew I was connected too a breather.Which clearly would scare the crap out of any normal person. I tried too shake but again I was immobile. I felt something placed in my hands. It had that feeling that I hated.That weirdo fuzz on small nick nacks people had.
Things flashed before me, Jeremy,Draco,Jeremy,Draco,Pansy,then one I thought wouldn't flash Jayson. I hadn't seen her in years. Jayson Shadow Kinns. My twin sister. She ran away when I was around 14. I sighed,probably seeing Jeremy reminded me of her.
I stopped thinking and focused on getting out of being well...stuck?
Jayson's POV:
I sat at her bedside,her oh so lifeless. Mother and Father had died I heard,and she Jeremy was after her too.I wouldn't let it happen.I saw a box in her hand.Clearly a proposal box.I couldn't help but grin,the boy did care.
I tapped my foot until someone came in. I ran up too them. "You tell her I was here and you'll get my alter-ego."I said,I slammed the door,and apparated. I had kept Shadow out for a few months,but she seemed too want out,too want too make me evil.To make me run away again.
Jess's POV:
I shot up,i was mobile,the box in my hand fell to the floor and udner the bed,but I didn't see. "Jayson?"I asked. But,she wasn't there.
REVIEWS!
don't worry she'll find the box...and I'll explain Jayson soon
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09-28-2010, 10:33 PM
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| Puffskein
Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Scotland
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | Three whole words, Eight letters late(8)
Great chapter
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09-28-2010, 10:43 PM
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| I Nailed Wormtail Love Hunter Extraordinaire Mooncalf
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| ♥ 2G FC| Narnian!| Fremione|Full Sail Girl ♥| Dramione| Shadowhunter!| Jesse ♥ Quote:
Originally Posted by Pottergrl101 I shot up,i was mobile,the box in my hand fell to the floor and udner the bed,but I didn't see. "Jayson?"I asked. But,she wasn't there. Wait, did she ask it out loud? Like she could talk now? Or did she just ask it in her head or something? Quote:
don't worry she'll find the box...and I'll explain Jayson soon Oh, good! I was about to ask about them! 
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09-29-2010, 04:14 PM
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| Graphorn
Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: University.
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Enya Mayberry Fourth Year | Workaholic || HOGwart | iloveyou. || SnowQueenEviee.
Brillient chapter!
Oooh i wonder what's going to happen between the girl's and the box! :O
PAMS!
Eviee <33
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09-30-2010, 03:28 AM
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| Puffskein
Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Florida
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Janet Lynn Gordon Fifth Year | Werecats are people too! Reader of Fan Fictions
Hello Chelsea. Quote:
I felt something placed in my hands. It had that feeling that I hated.That weirdo fuzz on small nick nacks people had.
And they get dusty so easy! But, she will love this one I'm sure! Quote:
Jayson Shadow Kinns. My twin sister.
 Look forward to learning more about her. Quote:
"You tell her I was here and you'll get my alter-ego."I said,I slammed the door,and apparated. I had kept Shadow out for a few months,but she seemed too want out,too want too make me evil.To make me run away again.
She reminds me of a tv character, on Heroes, we used to watch. Why wouldn't she want her sister to know she was there I wonder. Boy! Talk about a disfunctional family! Quote:
I shot up,i was mobile,the box in my hand fell to the floor and udner the bed,but I didn't see. "Jayson?"I asked. But,she wasn't there.
Yea!!!!!!!!!! She can move now! And talk? Or is she dreaming? I mean your title might suggest that. Quote:
Chapter 24:this is a world of dreams and reverie...
Great post Chelsea. Anxious for the next.
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10-02-2010, 04:22 PM
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| Jobberknoll
Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: New Joiiiseeyyy Kidd
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Jayson Melanie Shadow Sixth Year |
Chapter 25: Oh But sensible sells,so could you kindly shut up?
Jayson's POV:
I've never been a sensible girl.Not that I wasn't intentionally,not that i did it purposly I was just like this.Always a mix of emotions. Never the perfect daughter my parent's asked for like Jessica,but I loved Jessica anyway. Me and her were always close,that is until I ran away.
Shadow had come out that day. She had many ideas of getting rid of my parents. I knew why,Jeremy could be persuasive.I had been sleeping and I knew Jeremy was whispering,"You know you want out,you know you want them gone,come out come out wherever you are."I curse the boy.
"come out come out wherever you are."those words will haunt me for the rest of my life. I had woken up,but I wasn't me. Shadow was in control. My eyesight had gone a red tinge,and my teeth grew sharper,and half my face was shadowed. I remember starring into a mirror,and seeing Shadow,she had given me a wicked grin. "Won't thsi be fun?"she had said.
But I gained control. I thought very hard about Jessica,about James(my older brother) about Johna(my little baby boy brother).The thought of them brought me back,and when I was back I realized I was not safe,I needed too get out. I left just days before Jeremy was sent too Askaban. A 12 year old on the run,having sanctuary under trees,caves,allyways. Anywhere I wouldn't be found.
But i was back now,but so was Shadow,she tried too persuade me too let her out,but she was never as persuasive as Jeremy. No one was ever as persuasive as Jeremy. I leaned my head back onto the hard cave stone,and banged my head.Now that,that wasn't sensible,i said as i felt hot blood on the back of my head. I pulled my wand out and fixed the cut easily. I sat back down.
I heard footsteps,and stared out into the sunset.More footsteps coming towards me,like the person was invisible. I felt a hand cover my mouth,and I bit it. But the grip did not loosen. "Come out come out wherever you are."Then came the red tinge.
reviews! I'm really enjoyign the way the story is going! Please give me advice and i want too thank my dedicated readers:
Connie
Mrs.evi3e<3
EmilyBlack
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10-02-2010, 05:16 PM
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#132 (permalink)
| I Nailed Wormtail Love Hunter Extraordinaire Mooncalf
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Ohmylanta! You can't leave it there! This is NOT good! But the post was  Please PAMS!
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10-03-2010, 11:36 PM
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|  X-treme Horcrux Slayer! Doxy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Ruby Cynthia Ciao Fifth Year | Gleek in Disguise ll Doctor Who! Daughter of Hades ll Leslie-loo-whoo ♥ OMGEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Chelsea I hate you You can't just leave us like that!
This post is amazing!!!!!
I hate Jeremy....I hate him!!!!
Please post more soon!!!!!!
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10-04-2010, 05:39 PM
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#134 (permalink)
| Graphorn
Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: University.
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Enya Mayberry Fourth Year | Workaholic || HOGwart | iloveyou. || SnowQueenEviee.
OMG! Brillient chapter <33
PAMS!!!
LOL! Two things...call me Eviee  And you got my username wrong in your post xD 
No worries.
Eviee <33
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10-04-2010, 08:39 PM
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#135 (permalink)
| Snidget
Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Glasgow, Scotland :)
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You're very welcome, its a great story!!
Please PAMS !!!
K xx
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10-07-2010, 08:17 PM
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|  X-treme Horcrux Slayer! Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Sophie Potter First Year | Ruadh gu brath! | | Friendships are better than normal Ships
Great Few Posts! Sorry I've missed them. I've subscribed to your story too so I should get updates, but I don't know why I don't :/
OMG! That's an Evil Cliffy! PAMS! Soon...I really have it in for Jeremy!
Soph x
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10-09-2010, 02:33 AM
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#137 (permalink)
| Jobberknoll
Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: New Joiiiseeyyy Kidd
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Jayson Melanie Shadow Sixth Year |
Chapter 26:Wide eyes will always brighten the blue
Jess's POV:
I sighed as my head rested on the pillow on the hospitail bed. I missed Jayson,and knew for a fact she was here. But by now that she's gone I also knew Jeremy would have gotten too her. The little Jerk,I thought childishly.
I let my feet hang off the bed,and began swinging them back and forth,when I hit something fuzzy. It made my skin crawl but I looked down,there was a blue box. I picked it up,and looked at it,spinning it in my fingers as I went. I flipped it open with a lot of effort,and my eyes widened as i stared at the ring.
It had two blue saphire gems on the side of one big diamond.It was plain gorgeous. I could see it was a past,present,and future ring,and that made my heart melt.
I looked at mroe closely examining it,when Draco came in. He had a giant smile on his face. I looked at him,his eyes watery,"Your back."he muttered.
I nodded and looked at the ring,"I think someone lost this?"I said,pretty confused. He gave me a quizzical look,I hated those looks. "Give it too the nurse she probably knows whose it is."I said. I sighed as my hand began too cramp writing in the sky all the time,wasn't fun.
He looked at me,"Now why would I do that silly,that ring is yours."he said.My eyes widened at the ring,I noticed how the blue always brightened.I looked at him."This isn't a..?"I asked him writing the words out in the air..
He nodded,"It's not exactley how I would have done it,but I'm not one for the sappy getting down on one knee and saying the classic line."he said,he paused,"So what do you say Jessica Eve Kinns?Marry me?"he said,I could see his nerves running.
I hesitated,he would have to deal with me,my flaws and everything.and the fact that my sick sadistic brother was after me. I looked at him my eyes now pools of water.I nodded,and kissed him. "The question is....would you accept me and my flaws?My cranky-ness,my sadistic messed up family,my sister with an alter ego,my everything?"I wrote. He leaned his forehead on mine,"always."he muttered.
Reviews! i notice it's a bit jumpy!! Don't kill me *ducks and hides* yeah and you all got what you wanted!
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10-09-2010, 02:37 AM
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|  X-treme Horcrux Slayer! Doxy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Ruby Cynthia Ciao Fifth Year | Gleek in Disguise ll Doctor Who! Daughter of Hades ll Leslie-loo-whoo ♥ AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!
Chelsea I love you
That is the sweetest, cutest, post ever!
They are engaged!!!!
I love how he accepts her even though she has a lot of flaws!!
It is true love....I promised I wouldn't cry....oh forget it 
Post more soon please!
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10-09-2010, 03:37 AM
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| I Nailed Wormtail Love Hunter Extraordinaire Mooncalf
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| ♥ 2G FC| Narnian!| Fremione|Full Sail Girl ♥| Dramione| Shadowhunter!| Jesse ♥ Awe, that was super precious! I'm glad they're engaged! So cute! 
Fantastic post! Please PAMS! |
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10-09-2010, 11:20 AM
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#140 (permalink)
| Snidget
Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Glasgow, Scotland :)
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Awwww too sweet
Love it!
PAMS PAMS
K xx
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10-09-2010, 03:36 PM
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| Graphorn
Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: University.
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Enya Mayberry Fourth Year | Workaholic || HOGwart | iloveyou. || SnowQueenEviee.
That was so cute! 
Yay there getting married!
I hope her brother leaves her alone now though.
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Eviee <33
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10-09-2010, 10:09 PM
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|  X-treme Horcrux Slayer! Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Sophie Potter First Year | Ruadh gu brath! | | Friendships are better than normal Ships
Aww. Thats so cute! I can't wait for the weding post! I'm so happy! Thank you! Thank you Thank you!
But she should remember that Draco has flaws too, everyone does!
PAMS!
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10-11-2010, 06:38 PM
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| Puffskein
Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Florida
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Janet Lynn Gordon Fifth Year | Werecats are people too! Reader of Fan Fictions
Hello Chelsea. I'm sorry I've fallen behind these last two posts. Chapter 25 was very powerful. I feel so badly for Jayson. I hope she will be ok. And I hope she is able to keep Shadow from coming out. How old is the baby brother now? Is there anything different about him? Is he going to be a part of the story? Quote:
reviews! I'm really enjoyign the way the story is going! Please give me advice and i want too thank my dedicated readers:
I enjoy it also. What kind of advice are you looking for? I think you're writing a very captivating ff. You keep it moving along, and you always make it interesting! Chapter 26 was just as beautiful as 25 was intense. I hope they can set a date and get married before Jeremy spoils everything. And Sophie is correct in saying: Quote:
But she should remember that Draco has flaws too, everyone does!
Great posts, and I'll be watching for your next.
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10-29-2010, 12:51 AM
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| Jobberknoll
Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: New Joiiiseeyyy Kidd
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Jayson Melanie Shadow Sixth Year |
Chapter 27:I was enchanted to meet you...
*warning smal small update to make up for my no updating as of late*
Pansy's POV:
I sighed as he ran his fingers through my hair. "Its been a good Christmas,thank you for letting me stay."I said. I gave him a small smile as I sipped my hot chocolate. I finally knew what my mother meant,by I wasn't destined too be with Draco Malfoy. I was destined for Blaise Zabini. I was enchanted too meet him.
But still,we were together,but i am overstaying my stay,so I am sure I'll leave soon. I sat up on the couch sniffiling,the cold weather was no help for my weak nose. I looked at him as he laughed,"You look like rudolph."he said,I quirked my head too the side. "Your strange,I'm npot sure what Rudolph is but I'll say thank you anyway."I said.
I sighed,"I'll be leavoing by tomorrow,don't stop me,it doesn't mean i won't be back,but I need too get back on my feet by myself."I said. "My mother and father,i have arranged for them too come here too get me."i said quickly.
He tried to cut me off,but i wouldn't allow it.
Reviews sorry for crappy chappie
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10-29-2010, 01:43 AM
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| I Nailed Wormtail Love Hunter Extraordinaire Mooncalf
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Originally Posted by Pottergrl101 I finally knew what my mother meant,by I wasn't destined too be with Draco Malfoy. I was destined for Blaise Zabini. I was enchanted too meet him. I'm glad she's finally realizing it. Quote:
Reviews sorry for crappy chappie
It was NOT a crappy chappie! I liked it! It gave us a view into Pansy. Great post! Please PAMS! |
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10-29-2010, 06:11 AM
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#146 (permalink)
| Puffskein
Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Florida
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Janet Lynn Gordon Fifth Year | Werecats are people too! Reader of Fan Fictions
Hello Chelsea. Short chapters are fine when they are entertaining, and yours is. Please don't put yourself down. (Down isn't a preposition when used in this form I don't think.  But who knows really?) Quote:
I sat up on the couch sniffiling,the cold weather was no help for my weak nose.
Ah, the sad truth about many of us. Quote:
I sighed,"I'll be leavoing by tomorrow,don't stop me,it doesn't mean i won't be back,but I need too get back on my feet by myself."I said. "My mother and father,i have arranged for them too come here too get me."i said quickly.
Oh good. And I'm sure they'll be seeing each other quite often now. 
Nice work Chelsea. Remember to lift yourself up from now on.  I'll be watching for your next post.
Last edited by Connie; 11-19-2010 at 05:58 AM.
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10-29-2010, 03:28 PM
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#147 (permalink)
| Snidget
Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Glasgow, Scotland :)
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Great post!! I don't care about shortness - I can't talk, some of my posts on my FFs are pathetically short
Nice
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10-29-2010, 08:27 PM
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#148 (permalink)
| Graphorn
Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: University.
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Enya Mayberry Fourth Year | Workaholic || HOGwart | iloveyou. || SnowQueenEviee.
Good Chapter
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10-31-2010, 11:51 AM
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|  X-treme Horcrux Slayer! Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Sophie Potter First Year | Ruadh gu brath! | | Friendships are better than normal Ships
Aww Thats cute. I'm glad she is now realising she is destined to be with Blaise.
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11-20-2010, 03:35 PM
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#150 (permalink)
| Jobberknoll
Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: New Joiiiseeyyy Kidd
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Jayson Melanie Shadow Sixth Year |
Chapter 28:wedding day attack
Jeremy's POV:
she is getting married. The second she says I do,it will trigger the enchanted crowd to send spells at her. The husband?Oh he'll be a goner. He will die,not much he can do about it. His put himself into my family,so it's tiem he faces the consequences.
I'll sit in the back of the wedding,she not noticing,and use enchanted arrows. I'll aim for the most obvious easy part.her heart. She'll be having the happiest day of her life,but for all she better hope,she better say I don't because if she says I do. She will have officially lost.
I watched as shadow hid in a corner,still confused as too why she was here,Jayson was still fighting her. "Come out come out where ever you are?"I said,and then Jayson could no longer fight. Shadow rose. She waltzed over,her transformation changing her into her other form,in her other form she was not a witch. She was a demigod. But a strange one at that. she was a blessing of Artemis. Strange i know,but now you see why I chose arrows.
She's one of Artemis' Hunters gone well a little wild. But i liked her that way.She turned too me,and I said,"Go send them a sign Jay-Shadow. Tell them Jeremy said,that he hopes they have a "great" wedding."he said.And off she went.
I AM SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SO SORRRRYYYY! I've been so bust with school,but i got first honors woohooo! I'll try and update mroe often now.
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