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| Dusty Cellar (Incomplete Fanfiction) The cellar holds unfinished confections of storytelling, giving readers a glimpse into creative ideas that may one day be revived. |
12-12-2010, 07:07 AM
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#326 (permalink)
|  SS Featured AuthorTürk Bilgini Bugbear
Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: {in a leap of faith}
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Sarani Glass Graduated x12
| ♥ Mrs. Itachi Uchiha™ & MAJNOO! : Bleach & Kyo & Natsume ♥ [ Maxh!Jesh ] ANAVANNA!
Your story is going SO well. *is loooving it* Quote:
“Aw, how come? You mean it doesn’t just brighten your day to see me, Kylie?” I smirked.
“No, not really. Because on the contrary to what your egotistical head thinks, not every single girl is obsessed with you.”
“Maybe not. But most of them are, including you.”
Greaaaat job! x3 |
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12-12-2010, 07:16 AM
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#327 (permalink)
| Puffskein
Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Florida
Posts: 1,415
Hogwarts RPG Name: Janet Lynn Gordon Fifth Year | Werecats are people too! Reader of Fan Fictions
Hello Ana. Thankfully I checked here as I was preparing to shut off the computer and go to bed. I can't get over how well you write Sirius! You write him just as I think of him being from the books.
On a different note ... I'm starting to get somewhat concerned about this girl spending so much time with James. And he's being so nice to her! He needs to be thinking of Lily instead of spending time talking about Quidditch with HER.
I loved the whole bit with Sirius and Andromeda. Quote:
She was like my sister, and she told me everything. I knew that she wasn’t usually like this with guys, but Ted was different. I also knew that this seemed like strange behavior for him.
Hmmm, I wonder what is going on with Ted? I hope we find out soon.
And I wonder why Kyla is so hateful to him. Quote:
“Well that’s just ruined my day.” Kyla said coldly. Quote:
“I could be doing so many more important things, than wasting my time talking to you, so I hope I don’t see you around, Black.” Kyla said, walking away with looking back. Why did she look back?  Does she expect him to follow her or something?
Great post Ana. I'll be watching for your next.
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12-12-2010, 09:02 PM
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#328 (permalink)
| Formerly: Lily Lupin   Mooncalf
Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: New Zealand <3
Posts: 7,987
Hogwarts RPG Name: Ava James First Year | Facinelli<3 RP Sweetheart Quote:
Originally Posted by harita okay...now this is getting interesting what's up next?waiting eagerly... You'll have to wait and see. Quote:
Originally Posted by princess of*hp* Or do they?  Who knows? Lots of authors like to psych out the readers to think one thing, then pull a switcharoo.
I've got my eyes on you. Although Mel secretly wouldn't mind watching Slytherin win either. O_o Well... Quote:
LUCIUS AND REGULUS REFERENCES! -flails-
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Sasha, Rianne, and Clarisa...  Me thinks that something shifteh this way comes.
 It's possible. <3 Quote:
Originally Posted by Connie Hello Ana. Wonderful post. Now I can't wait to see what's going on! I don't know that I trust her still.  And when did her friends from Spain arrive? 
Is there going to be somekind of international Quidditch match or something?
She's seen their moves and everything! 
Please post as soon as you can! Great writing Ana. B-But... MINDREADER. Quote:
Originally Posted by Cassiopia Malfoy Reggie and Lucie!!!!!!!  I adooooore those two, lol..  Haha, I know you do. Quote:
Lovely update, I love Regulus, Sirius, James and Lucius!!! They are sooo amazing.
Thank you. <3 Quote:
And Clarisa, I iz suspicious of you and your friends! Clarisa: Whyyyy? -innocent- Quote:
Originally Posted by hermione19 love it!!
PAMS!!! Thanks for reading! Quote:
Originally Posted by Maxilocks ANAVANNA!
Your story is going SO well. *is loooving it* Greaaaat job! x3 Thankyouuuuu. I'm loving you reading it. <3 Quote:
Originally Posted by Connie Hello Ana. Thankfully I checked here as I was preparing to shut off the computer and go to bed. I can't get over how well you write Sirius! You write him just as I think of him being from the books. I don't know that I'll ever stop loving to hear that. =D Quote:
On a different note ... I'm starting to get somewhat concerned about this girl spending so much time with James. And he's being so nice to her! He needs to be thinking of Lily instead of spending time talking about Quidditch with HER.
You never know. Quote:
And I wonder why Kyla is so hateful to him. Why did she look back?  Does she expect him to follow her or something?
Great post Ana. I'll be watching for your next.
Ohhhh. That was meant to be *without looking back. I'll fix that. |
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12-13-2010, 04:38 AM
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#329 (permalink)
| Hinkypunk
Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: At the close.
Posts: 12,424
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| Lady Lem|DJ Melfoy|Braedeus ♥ Stumble|Bebé Melón|B2|Andee & Melsse|Melephone Quote:
Andromeda laughed. “Thanks Sirius. What would I do without you?”
“Your life would be rather miserable.” I said.
“You’re not very modest, are you?”
 Sirius, I wouldn't have you any other way.
But d'aww, how sweet of him to talk to Ted for Andromeda.  What a good cousin.
Narcissa and Bellatrix are at Hogwarts now, too! |
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12-13-2010, 04:53 AM
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#330 (permalink)
| Formerly: Lily Lupin   Mooncalf
Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: New Zealand <3
Posts: 7,987
Hogwarts RPG Name: Ava James First Year | Facinelli<3 RP Sweetheart Quote:
Originally Posted by princess of*hp*  Sirius, I wouldn't have you any other way. Sirius: 'Course you wouldn't Quote:
But d'aww, how sweet of him to talk to Ted for Andromeda.  What a good cousin.
Narcissa and Bellatrix are at Hogwarts now, too! All sorts of things could happen. |
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12-13-2010, 05:09 AM
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#331 (permalink)
| Dugbog
Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: michigan
Posts: 113
Hogwarts RPG Name: hermione First Year |
Loving it!!!!!!!!!!
Pams!!!!!!
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12-14-2010, 04:39 AM
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#332 (permalink)
| Mooncalf
Join Date: Mar 2009
Posts: 6,309
Hogwarts RPG Name: isabella Macmillan Sixth Year |
nice chapter...loved this one Quote:
“You’re not very modest, are you?”
good one Andromeda...  ...
and what's the problem with Kyala?i mean...seriously as Sirius said...she is obsessed with him!
waiting for more and moreover the ball and James/Lily and how can i forget Remus/Mel...waitinggggg |
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01-31-2011, 09:14 AM
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#333 (permalink)
| Formerly: Lily Lupin   Mooncalf
Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: New Zealand <3
Posts: 7,987
Hogwarts RPG Name: Ava James First Year | Facinelli<3 RP Sweetheart Quote:
Originally Posted by hermione19 Loving it!!!!!!!!!!
Pams!!!!!! Thank you. Quote:
Originally Posted by harita nice chapter...loved this one
good one Andromeda...  ...
and what's the problem with Kyala?i mean...seriously as Sirius said...she is obsessed with him!
waiting for more and moreover the ball and James/Lily and how can i forget Remus/Mel...waitinggggg  Thank you, you're too nice. 
Guess you'll have to wait and see.
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaand new chapter, coming up!
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01-31-2011, 09:22 AM
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#334 (permalink)
| Formerly: Lily Lupin   Mooncalf
Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: New Zealand <3
Posts: 7,987
Hogwarts RPG Name: Ava James First Year | Facinelli<3 RP Sweetheart “TONKS!”
Ted turned around when he heard me calling his name, and looked at me approaching with a surprised and somewhat worried expression.
I chuckled. “I’m not gonna do anything to you.” I said, coming beside Ted. “We’re friends, right?” We didn’t know each other really well, but we were on friendly terms.
“Uh, sure.” Ted said.
“Great. So why aren’t you taken Andromeda to the ball tonight, Ted?” I asked.
“I, uh, her sisters. She says she doesn’t care what they think, but she does. They’re her sisters, and they already don’t forgive her for being a Gryffindor, but going to the dance with a muggle-born. I really just didn’t want her to be in any trouble.”
He was a pretty decent guy, I decided. “Here’s a piece of advice, not going to the ball with you, is just making Dro miserable. She cares more about you then approval from our idiotic family. Just a thought.” I said, with a small shrug.
Upon walking into the common room James was waiting there for me, just like I thought he would be. “Sirius! Where you been?”
I gave a small shrug. “There was something that I needed to do.” I replied simply. That was enough for James.
“We should probably get ready, Prefect Remus might tell us off.” James said.
“Sure. It’s only a ball, it’ll just take like five minutes to get ready.” I said, following James up to the boy’s dorm.
It took me a bit longer than five minutes to get ready, but close enough. I got quickly dressed and, like James, made an attempt to have my hair look a little less ruffled. I didn’t really care that much, but my hair was rather tame and looked perfect. But James, he was a different story – his hair sticked up everywhere, there was just no helping it.
“Ready?” I asked looking at James.
“Yeah, I suppose so.”
It just occurred to me then, that somehow I’d been distracted, and had never made sure that James was taking a date, or if he was still blindly hoping for Lily. I couldn’t quite believe that I’d just forgotten. “So, who’s your date?”
“Uh, I asked Rianne.” James shrugged, walking with me down from our dormitory to our common room.
“The Italian girl?” I asked, sitting down on the arm of a chair to wait for Adriana to come down. Who knew how long that could take?
“Yeah. She’s pretty cool.” James said, giving me a grin. But I didn’t have to ask to know that he wasn’t interested in her, he just thought that she was cool.
“How long to you suppose the girls have been up there getting ready?” I asked, rolling my eyes.
“All day?” James suggested, with a smirk.
“You know, I really wouldn’t be very surprised.” I laughed, but at that moment we heard footsteps, and then Lily came down the stairs. I turned to look at James, who was staring at Lily, unable to take his eyes away from her.
She was wearing a long pale blue dress that had two silver bands around the middle, and the dress framed her small figure. Her always fiery red hair fell in curls down her back, and her soft brown eyes looked back at James in worried surprise. “James, Sirius.” She said. “Hello, but I need to go.” She said, averting her eyes away from James as she walked past him, and disappearing out the door.
“Why does that always happen?” James asked.
Thankfully, before I had to try and answer him, we were interrupted once again by the sound of more footsteps, this time it was Adriana. I noticed the huge difference between the way Lily and Adriana came down the stairs. Because Adriana walked down with all of her usual confidence and pride in her black dress, looking amazing like she usually did.
The biggest difference, however, was my own. Because I reacted nothing like James just did, and I never actually have looked at someone that way.
I scowled mentally at this annoying voice in my head, because I had no idea where these trails of thoughts were coming from. It almost sounding like I envied James, somehow, but I didn’t. It was confusing, irritating, and I shoved it to the back of my mind, not really wanting to think on it much longer.
“Adriana,” I flashed Adriana a charming smile, holding out my arm. “You look lovely, as always.”
“You’re looking rather charming, yourself.” She said, flicking her hair over her shoulder. |
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01-31-2011, 02:36 PM
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#335 (permalink)
| Snidget
Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: New England
Posts: 2,704
Hogwarts RPG Name: Kaylee Strap First Year | Dragon..Dragon..Draco.. | | Sirius Lee Black
Sirius always looks charming
And, and, and. GO SIRIUS! Make Ted take Andromeda to the ball! Yippee, your da bestest-estest
The comment about James' hair made me chuckle to myself.
psst, Sirius, you do have someone to look at 'that way' as you call it
Loooooved it!
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01-31-2011, 04:26 PM
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#336 (permalink)
| Graphorn
Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: University.
Posts: 17,325
Hogwarts RPG Name: Enya Mayberry Fourth Year | Workaholic || HOGwart | iloveyou. || SnowQueenEviee.
New Reader! *jumps*
I read all this in one sitting *nods*
and BRILLIENT! I LOVE IT! *dances*
It's so well written and i just loved reading it. I want to read more now!
Hahah Sirius and James make me laugh.
God Sirius you soo like Kyla  and Lily so likes James 
Remus is just so awwww.
PAMS!
Eviee <33
__________________ ♥♥♥♥♥__________Chapter 17 of "A Broken Wing" Is up now!___________♥  ___________________Look Who's Back.
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01-31-2011, 09:22 PM
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#337 (permalink)
| Formerly: Lily Lupin   Mooncalf
Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: New Zealand <3
Posts: 7,987
Hogwarts RPG Name: Ava James First Year | Facinelli<3 RP Sweetheart Quote:
Originally Posted by Cassiopia Malfoy Sirius always looks charming
And, and, and. GO SIRIUS! Make Ted take Andromeda to the ball! Yippee, your da bestest-estest
The comment about James' hair made me chuckle to myself.
psst, Sirius, you do have someone to look at 'that way' as you call it
Loooooved it! Thank you. <3
As for Sirius having somebody, I don't know what you're talking about. Quote:
Originally Posted by Miss Evi3e <3 New Reader! *jumps*
I read all this in one sitting *nods*
and BRILLIENT! I LOVE IT! *dances*
It's so well written and i just loved reading it. I want to read more now!
Hahah Sirius and James make me laugh.
God Sirius you soo like Kyla  and Lily so likes James 
Remus is just so awwww.
PAMS!
Eviee <33 One sitting?  That makes me feel rather honored, seriously. *Has actually done that before with other FF's*
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll try to get more soon. |
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01-31-2011, 10:24 PM
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#338 (permalink)
| Hinkypunk
Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: At the close.
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Adriana and Lily and such... literary foils to each other.  And poor James and Lily, for having to be so awkward around each other. Poor Rianne as well, I suppose, since everyone knows that James prefers Lily to her. |
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01-31-2011, 10:30 PM
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#339 (permalink)
| Formerly: Lily Lupin   Mooncalf
Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: New Zealand <3
Posts: 7,987
Hogwarts RPG Name: Ava James First Year | Facinelli<3 RP Sweetheart Quote:
Originally Posted by princess of*hp* Adriana and Lily and such... literary foils to each other.  And poor James and Lily, for having to be so awkward around each other. Poor Rianne as well, I suppose, since everyone knows that James prefers Lily to her.  Meeeeeeell. <3
'Tis all very true. Aaaaaand next chapter will be the ball. xD
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02-01-2011, 02:16 PM
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#340 (permalink)
| Graphorn
Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: University.
Posts: 17,325
Hogwarts RPG Name: Enya Mayberry Fourth Year | Workaholic || HOGwart | iloveyou. || SnowQueenEviee.
Haha yeah, i sat reading it while i was working. It was really entertaining and got me motivated think i've done it with others im not sure
Enjoyed it? Nah i would got that far. I LOVEDD it! And want to read more
__________________ ♥♥♥♥♥__________Chapter 17 of "A Broken Wing" Is up now!___________♥  ___________________Look Who's Back.
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02-02-2011, 07:18 PM
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#341 (permalink)
| Dugbog
Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: michigan
Posts: 113
Hogwarts RPG Name: hermione First Year |
Loved it Loved it Loved it!!!!! just one thing, you said that Lily's eyes were brown, but her eyes were green. just wanted to point that out |
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02-07-2011, 06:57 AM
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#342 (permalink)
| Puffskein
Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Florida
Posts: 1,415
Hogwarts RPG Name: Janet Lynn Gordon Fifth Year | Werecats are people too! Reader of Fan Fictions
Hello Ana. I really enjoy Sirius being so confused at the condition of his otherwise uncluttered mind. Such things as girls and relationships aren't what he's all about. (He thinks) But yet, he pushes Ted to ask Andromeda to the ball. He cares if James has a date, although he let it slip his mind in his distracted state of mind. And his reaction to James is a bit unlike a man that doesn't let things of girls and such, clutter his mind. Quote:
and her soft brown eyes looked back at James in worried surprise. “James, Sirius.” She said. “Hello, but I need to go.” She said, averting her eyes away from James as she walked past him, and disappearing out the door. So, I wonder if she was worried that James was going to try to get her to go with him. Or was she worried that she'd see Rianne come down and go to James's arms. Quote:
I scowled mentally at this annoying voice in my head, because I had no idea where these trails of thoughts were coming from. It almost sounding like I envied James, somehow, but I didn’t. It was confusing, irritating, and I shoved it to the back of my mind, not really wanting to think on it much longer.  I love the way you write his emotional struggle with himself!
Great post Ana. I'll be watching for your next. |
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03-05-2011, 03:50 PM
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#343 (permalink)
| Bicorn
Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Wales
Posts: 16,729
Hogwarts RPG Name: Jade Archer de Leon Slytherin Fourth Year Hogwarts RPG Name: Ivy Charlton Hufflepuff Fifth Year | Little Fox | ½ of Lauralie | Ravenclaw with a Hufflepuff heart and a Gryffindor soul | #HouseNATARIANA
Wow, wow, wow !!!!! Uppdateee pleaasee *bats eyelashes and sweet grins at you* Hehe!!! Sirus does like Kylie =PP I know it!! *crossed arms*
Nat xxxx
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05-07-2011, 09:10 AM
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#344 (permalink)
| Mooncalf
Join Date: Mar 2009
Posts: 6,309
Hogwarts RPG Name: isabella Macmillan Sixth Year |
its been long since i read your fiction and its just...lovely writing! want to read morrrreeee.... |
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06-06-2011, 04:05 AM
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#345 (permalink)
| Veela
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Posts: 37,227
Hogwarts RPG Name: Maximus O. Vindictus III First Year | No Touchy! ♥ demented_teacher
Last update 31 JAN 2011
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