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08-08-2005, 07:38 AM
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| Horklump
Join Date: Jun 2004
Posts: 43
| The Love That Is No Longer There - Sa13+ hello everyone, this is my first fanfic and i'm really anticipacious.this is a short story and no names for the characters. if u hav any problem i would be happy to help. hope u like it!!! Rain splattered on the windows and ran off, like the tears which often ran down her once rosy cheeks. She stood by the window, looking out at the verdant garden with bunches of fragrant and vividly coloured flowers. Her vision misted as she remembered that unforgettable day again. It had been on a day like this that she met him, with murky clouds, which were threatening to rain any moment. She was out for her daily walk in the park at dawn. While walking, she had turned her head to watch a dove fly through the forget-me-not blue sky and had surreptiously collided with him. His hazel eyes met her grey ones. A tickling sensation went through her. They stood there transfixed for a moment. Then jolted abruptly to reality, she hastily went her way. She saw him everyday after that incidental one, though being vulnerable never did anything. Sometimes she could feel his entrancing eyes on her, or a flicker of a smile on his enthralling face. to be continued...
__________________ daniel rocks!!! i am obsessed with HARRY POTTER!!!!
"why would i go looking for someone who wans to kill me???" harry.
* I WANTED TO KILL THE MOST BEAUTIFUL, MOST BRILLIANT, SWEETEST AND COOLEST PERSON ON EARTH , BUT THEN I THOUGHT THAT SUICIDE IS A CRIME!!!*
Last edited by heartonfire; 10-16-2005 at 07:26 PM.
Reason: new rating system
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08-09-2005, 07:27 AM
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| Horklump
Join Date: Jun 2004
Posts: 43
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will some one plzz read my ff.... now it seems really pathetic. geez, i sound like a total loser. well, i m still waiting for some angel to review it!!!
__________________ daniel rocks!!! i am obsessed with HARRY POTTER!!!!
"why would i go looking for someone who wans to kill me???" harry.
* I WANTED TO KILL THE MOST BEAUTIFUL, MOST BRILLIANT, SWEETEST AND COOLEST PERSON ON EARTH , BUT THEN I THOUGHT THAT SUICIDE IS A CRIME!!!* |
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08-09-2005, 11:44 AM
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| Horklump
Join Date: Jun 2004
Posts: 43
| here's the next part... One day she heard some guests in the living room and was alarmed to find him sitting there with a senile man and woman. She still marveled at the fact at how quickly their marriage was arranged. Most girls are really grieved to leave their home but however much she missed her parents, it was compensated by the passionate love he showered on her. He brought color in her life. He filled her life with joy and exuberance. They lived for each other. He made her feel imperative. They had a mutual understanding betwixt them. They lived in compatibility. She felt that he was her greatest treasure. They had an impeccably dinky home nuzzled between luxurious valleys and captivating lush green meadows. She adorned it with modish decorations and they filled it with love and ebullience. Their life became ideal. He simply beguiled her; he was an enticingly illustrious person. Everyday when he used to come home he used to bring red roses for her, with a “For u, my love. I am incomplete without you!” This alluringact of affection made her day. Each day at dusk they walked through the enchantingly striking meadows and watched the sunset. It was these diminutive things that made her feel as if she was living in a fantasy…When their daughter was put in his arms, his face told her that she had given him the greatest gift of all. She saw love twinkling in his eyes for both of them, then. to be continued.... the last part is left only p.s. someone plzz reply!!!
__________________ daniel rocks!!! i am obsessed with HARRY POTTER!!!!
"why would i go looking for someone who wans to kill me???" harry.
* I WANTED TO KILL THE MOST BEAUTIFUL, MOST BRILLIANT, SWEETEST AND COOLEST PERSON ON EARTH , BUT THEN I THOUGHT THAT SUICIDE IS A CRIME!!!* |
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08-10-2005, 07:56 AM
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| Horklump
Join Date: Jun 2004
Posts: 43
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i guess i'll just finish it up then
__________________ daniel rocks!!! i am obsessed with HARRY POTTER!!!!
"why would i go looking for someone who wans to kill me???" harry.
* I WANTED TO KILL THE MOST BEAUTIFUL, MOST BRILLIANT, SWEETEST AND COOLEST PERSON ON EARTH , BUT THEN I THOUGHT THAT SUICIDE IS A CRIME!!!* |
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08-10-2005, 08:01 AM
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| Horklump
Join Date: Jun 2004
Posts: 43
| the love that is no longer there the last part... But this emotive dream abominably shattered and her life became miserable. She went to town with her husband for some shopping, leaving her daughter with her mom. They were walking back home when suddenly the screech of tires sheared the serene air. They rounded the corner and a jeep with sundry men in black attire raced towards them. They were horrified to see them shooting bullets to a police car behind them. With a cry, her beloved husband pushed her behind him. She stood rooted to the ground as she saw one of the masked men fire, his bullet went in the wrong direction and hit him squarely in the chest. Her heart stopped beating as she saw him slowly fall to the ground. She wanted to scream, to cry, to make him stand up and smile his arduous smile. But he lay there, limp and still. He couldn’t die, he couldn’t leave her alone like this, he couldn’t just go away!!! The rumbling of clouds brought her back to the present. A deep sadness filled her once again. She dropped to the ground and started bawling. The tears flowed, just as they had been flowing for the past year. After him, everything had been depressing. His love, his affection, his care, it was no longer there. She hated the injustice of it all. He was the sweetest person ever and still he had been ruthlessly killed. She wanted to kill those abhorrently atroxious people who completely destroyed her life. They took away the person she loved most. With him they also took away her happiness, her life......... THE SAD END well, it was really short.i hope that at least a few people would like it.
__________________ daniel rocks!!! i am obsessed with HARRY POTTER!!!!
"why would i go looking for someone who wans to kill me???" harry.
* I WANTED TO KILL THE MOST BEAUTIFUL, MOST BRILLIANT, SWEETEST AND COOLEST PERSON ON EARTH , BUT THEN I THOUGHT THAT SUICIDE IS A CRIME!!!* |
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08-31-2005, 11:31 AM
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| Niffler
Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: SchruckleNoofer!
Posts: 20,250
Hogwarts RPG Name: Ana-Marie Aylesworth Third Year | Old Man Beans | "BOY" | FARM ASSIST| L u L u | Derping like a Boss
this is good, its different from the usual FF but thats what makes it better
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09-05-2005, 06:08 PM
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| Horklump
Join Date: Jun 2004
Posts: 43
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thanx allucha. uor compliments mean alot to me
__________________ daniel rocks!!! i am obsessed with HARRY POTTER!!!!
"why would i go looking for someone who wans to kill me???" harry.
* I WANTED TO KILL THE MOST BEAUTIFUL, MOST BRILLIANT, SWEETEST AND COOLEST PERSON ON EARTH , BUT THEN I THOUGHT THAT SUICIDE IS A CRIME!!!* |
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09-05-2005, 06:13 PM
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| Mr. Darcy *swoon* Gnome
Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Practicing for solo audition thingies for band...ack!
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Hmmm. I've never read a fanfic quite like this before. It's different. Um...it's and interesting take, keep up the nice work.
Laura
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09-07-2005, 06:38 PM
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| Horklump
Join Date: Jun 2004
Posts: 43
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thanx laura. i m not really a ff writer. i just made up this short one when i was feelin' blue. i wanted to hav something of my own on ss so i put it up here. i hope i can get one of hp soon.
__________________ daniel rocks!!! i am obsessed with HARRY POTTER!!!!
"why would i go looking for someone who wans to kill me???" harry.
* I WANTED TO KILL THE MOST BEAUTIFUL, MOST BRILLIANT, SWEETEST AND COOLEST PERSON ON EARTH , BUT THEN I THOUGHT THAT SUICIDE IS A CRIME!!!* |
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09-08-2005, 05:55 PM
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| Dugbog
Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: wishing on stars up in the astronomy tower
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very interesting story...nice, the way you didn't really need names to keep up with the characters. looking forward to seeing more if your ff's.
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09-21-2005, 05:24 PM
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| Horklump
Join Date: Jun 2004
Posts: 43
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hey, thanx a bunch mugglemom.
__________________ daniel rocks!!! i am obsessed with HARRY POTTER!!!!
"why would i go looking for someone who wans to kill me???" harry.
* I WANTED TO KILL THE MOST BEAUTIFUL, MOST BRILLIANT, SWEETEST AND COOLEST PERSON ON EARTH , BUT THEN I THOUGHT THAT SUICIDE IS A CRIME!!!* |
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09-23-2005, 04:49 PM
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| Mooncalf
Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: In Vonnie's hair lol
Posts: 7,229
Hogwarts RPG Name: Meredith Leigh Brooks-Byron Graduated | The Other Ari | | Cookie Monster
Finished on 8-10-2005
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