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03-11-2007, 06:37 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Canada
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Jessica McPhee Fifth | The End Of The Dark Lord - Sa13+
This is a one shot fan fic and i would appreciate any constructive criticism you may have....ENJOY!!!
It had been exactly two years since the fall of the Dark Lord and when everything in Ginny’s life came crashing down around her.
They had all been together right until the very end, Ginny, Ron, Hermione and Harry; the love of her life. They all knew it was going to end badly; the four of them were the only remaining members of the order. Everyone else had been killed, compliments of the death eaters or Voldemort, himself.
The night of Voldermort’s downfall there were spells flying in every direction. Once Voldermorts presence was know at the scene, time seemed to drag on and prolong the attacks. He turned and without hesitation, shot a killing curse directly in Hermione's direction. Ron pushed her out of the way and felt the full effects of the curse himself. With a blast of green light, Ron’s lifeless body tumbled to the ground. Frantically, Hermione threw curses savagely through the air targets unknown, just to do damage. As tears beaded down her face, she ran to Ron’s side. There was a blast of green light and then two young bodies lay lifeless, side by side in the dark of the night.
Harry, having Ginny pinned magically to a tree, threw the invisibility cloak around her. With a quick kiss and an anxious “I love you”, he turned to face his destiny. Ginny watched as both Voldemort and Harry battled fiercely, throwing curse after curse. Soon it was all over; tired and seeking an end to each other, simultaneously the two adversaries shot killing curses directly towards one another. Harry Potter, “the boy lived”, was dead.
The binding curse instantly lifted off Ginny’s weeping body. She fell to the ground and her body shook gently as tears streamed down her face. Tormented by everything she had seen and everyone that she had lost, she slowly crawled over to where Harry’s motionless body lay sprawled on the bloody, damp lawn. Gently lifting his head, she coddled him in her arms as she wept, rocking him soothingly.
Ginny was unsure of how long she had been sitting on the blood soaked lawn. All she knew was that she couldn’t feel anything. She’d gone numb; numb to all the pain and destruction she had witnessed. The few remaining aurors finally arrived, astonished at what they were seeing. One rushed quickly to Ginny’s side and softly lifted her off the ground, frantic and determined not to leave Harry. The auror rushed to transport both Ginny and the deceased Harry away from the scene. The auror had apparated them to an undisclosed building, St. Mungo’s had been attacked by death eaters a few months earlier and therefore was no longer safe.
As she lay in the hospital bed, she could distantly hear the whispers of the healers discussing someone that was dying, for they had lost the will to live. Relating with the unknown patient, Ginny began to understand exactly what that felt like. With one last thought of her family, friends, and Harry, she silently died.
I hope you enjoyed this and again I would appreciate any constructive criticism you may have. Thank you!
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03-13-2007, 10:34 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: May 2006 Location: Hogwarts
Posts: 571
Hogwarts RPG Name: Ellen Calaway First Year | R/Hr Bridesmaid
Your fanfic is sooooooo good, but it is sooooooo sad. Other than being really sad, I think your fanfic is briliant!
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03-14-2007, 02:40 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Canada
Posts: 563
Hogwarts RPG Name: Jessica McPhee Fifth |
Thank you sooo much that really means a lot to me. I hope more people take the time to read it and reply!
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03-15-2007, 09:20 PM
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| Chizpurfle
Join Date: May 2006 Location: In a world with Dan
Posts: 10,764
Hogwarts RPG Name: Lilly Young Second Year | Keeper of Harry's Smile Guard of Dan’s Curiosity
I loved it so much. The emotions were great. It was so sad but good. you are very good at it.
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03-16-2007, 02:38 AM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Canada
Posts: 563
Hogwarts RPG Name: Jessica McPhee Fifth |
I really appreciate that it means so much to me I worked really hard on this Im glad you enjoyed it!!
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03-16-2007, 09:42 PM
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| Puffskein
Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Pompano Beach, FL
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Great way to capture the emotions. It was very sad but it was great.
Roshni
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03-16-2007, 11:47 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: May 2006 Location: Hogwarts
Posts: 571
Hogwarts RPG Name: Ellen Calaway First Year | R/Hr Bridesmaid Quote:
Originally Posted by Ginny14 Thank you sooo much that really means a lot to me. I hope more people take the time to read it and reply! I also wrote an FF and not very many people took the time to post, so I know exactly how you feel. If you want to read my FF the title is My Angel.
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03-17-2007, 11:46 PM
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| Lobalug
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Hanging out in my cousin's fic....... When You Say Nothing At All
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Kaitlyn Weasley None |
Oh my, that is just so sad; but it was also beautifully written. Great job!
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03-18-2007, 07:02 PM
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| Fire Slug
Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Playing quidditch with Harry, Ron, and Ginny.
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| omg that was so good. it was extremely well written and very sad, but brilliant.
~Cheyenne~
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03-23-2007, 08:51 PM
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| Puffskein
Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Reading my two FF's
Posts: 1,879
Hogwarts RPG Name: Hufflepuff and proud of it! Fifth |
Your story is the best ever!!!!! Please do another story
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04-06-2007, 11:15 PM
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| Nogtail
Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Hogwarts School of W
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Mindy Song |
Like I told other few one-shot story writers, I don't read them very much. This one is the only one that ended so sad. It's great! (not great that it ended sad) Hope you're writing more stories to the end!
~*Mindy*~
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04-07-2007, 12:43 AM
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| Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Jacqueline Marie Granger Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run! Oh my goodness!!!!
Girl I hate you so much right now!! Your story was amazing!!!!!!!!
I actually almost cried! It's so sad!
Excellent story darling!!!
~Emma
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