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03-30-2005, 11:33 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: *In the gym at RBJH stocking a certain redhead*
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| The Boy Who Once Lived [One Shot] Disclaimer: I sadly do not own Harry Potter. THE BOY WHO LIVED “Hermione” Someone shook her out of her sleep. Hermione Granger woke up and saw Ronald Weasley was beside her bedside, looking dreadful. “What’s wrong?” asked Hermione groggily. “Harry…Harry…” stumbled Ron, he looked away. “Harry’s disappeared!” Hermione gasped. “WHAT? Are you sure he’s not in the boy’s dormitory?” “We checked there first! We’ve searched the whole castle.” Ron replied. “His Firebolt [an international broomstick] and invisibility cloak is gone and the window was wide open and…”he trailed off not glancing at Hermione. “What?” Hermione asked anxiously. “There was a note on his bed sheets.” Ron pulled out a folded piece of parchment from his black school robes and gave Hermione the note. Dear Ron and Hermione The time has finally come for me to fulfill the prophecy. The prophecy was: “the one with the power to vanquish the Dark Lord approaches…born to those who have thrice defied him, born as the seventh month dies…and the Dark Lord will mark him as his equal, but he will have power the Dark Lord knows not…and either must die at the hand of the other for neither can live while the other survives” That was the prophecy made by Professor Trewlaney 18 years ago about Voldemort and I, before I was born. I am not going to inform you about my location for I do not want anyone to follow me and get hurt as many did in our fifth year. I may come back alive, so don’t worry about me and concentrate on taking your year end exams. STAY AT HOGWARTS!!! Best Wishes, Harry Potter “So he’s gone?” asked Hermione, after she finished reading the letter. “He’s just gonna leave and try to kill Voldemort by himself?” she shrieked. “Afraid so” Ron replied. “Dumbledore wants us to go to the Order with McGonagall now!” Ron replied as he left so Hermione could change her clothes. Hermione grabbed her wand and magically changed her clothes and ran out of the girls dormitory to the Great Hall. Ron was already there and so was Professor McGonagall, who was looking very pale. “It’s a Portkey” she told them and showed the two the cup she was holding in her left hand. The two kids gathered around the older woman and touched the cup with a finger. A few seconds later, the three were transported to the outside of a Muggle [non-magical neighborhood]. As they waited, a house slowly popped out in front of their eyes. Professor McGonagall knocked on the door and it slowly opened admitting them inside. They were now in the residence of Number 12 Grimmauld Place. **************************** They walked into the kitchen where it was packed full of the Order of the Phoenix members. The atmosphere was very tense and silent, like a funeral with a few whispers among the Order members. Hermione pulled out the note that Harry had written and set it on the small kitchen table. A couple of people muttered to themselves about how insane Harry was. A hand patted her shoulder as if to comfort her. Hermione turned to face the person and it was none other than Albus Dumbledore. He looked worried and that scared Hermione. She sat down in a vacant chair and buried her face in her hands. “We must get into action now” Dumbledore said quietly causing everyone to pay attention to his every word. “I will track him down and I’ll inform you all where his location is…I want you to all get prepared for battle” he said in a quiet voice, his eyes were no longer twinkling, but instead were filled with worry. The people in the Order nodded and left the room to do whatever they would do before the battle begun. Ron sat down in a now empty chair and pulled it up beside Hermione’s. “It’s going to be alright Hermione” Ron said trying to comfort her. “Miss Granger and Mr. Weasley…will you please go back to Hogwarts and inform Miss Ginny Weasley for me?” Dumbledore asked them. He held out the same cup that was used before and Ron and Hermione teleported back to Hogwarts, in the Gryffindor Common Room. ****************************** “Bow Harry, bow to death, you will never escape this time” a voice echoed in Harry Potter’s head. A pale, small red eyed man faced him holding his wand directly towards his heart. “After so many years of waiting, I’ve finally been able to get rid of you” the man said cruelly. “Crucio” Voldemort softly muttered and his wand emitted a soft beam of light. Voldemort thought to himself. How stupid can Potter get? Falling into all of our traps just like his fifth year. How did he not notice that we lured him to the cemetery. Voldemort smirked and turned to watch his rival in pain. Harry screamed when the curse hit him. Pain streamed through his body. It felt like thousands of tiny needles were being poked into him all at the same time. The throbbing in his head increased and all Harry was capable of doing was yelling in agony. Voldemort watched with no mercy. An evil little smirk played over his lips as he watched the 17 year old boy being tortured. The pain was gone as rapidly as it came. Harry gasped as he caught his breath. Air. Air was all he needed right now. He glanced around at his surroundings. It was not very pleasant. He was encircled by almost 35 deatheaters that could kill him in a second just with a two word spell. Dementors were hovering about outside the circle of Deatheaters. Voldemort was a meter in front of him his wand facing Harry, who was thinking his last thoughts. I’m sorry everyone he thought to himself. I didn’t even say goodbye…I’ll be joining my parents soon. A tear trickled down his dirty cheek leaving a clean track. “Harry Potter, dieing on May 8th” Voldemort mocked. “He’s going to die and all he can do is cry.” Cruel harsh laughter tainted the air. The Deatheaters were enjoying every moment of this. Their Master’s enemy was finally going to be beaten, once and for all. ****************************** The large group of Order of the Phoenix members held there wands in front of them. Careful not to make a noise they spied on the scene in front of them. A direct charge attack would be the most stupid thing they could do right now. They glanced at all the Deatheaters and Dementors around Harry and Voldemort himself was mocking Harry. The group stood there trying to figure out what they could do to save Harry while watching the scene before them. ****************************** Hermione and Ron were back at Number 12 Grimmauld Place with Ginny who had been informed of what had happened. She was now pacing about the living room crying, thinking the worst possible things that could happen to Harry. ****************************** “Die now Harry James Potter” Voldemort smirked at his enemy. “Avada Kedavra” he yelled and a bright green beam shot towards Harry’s heart. Harry smiled at Voldemort and gradually fell to the ground. Dumbledore ran forward and muttered the exact same curse and directed it to Voldemort who wasn’t expecting the attack. The rest of the Order fought against the Deatheaters and the Dementors who finally realized they were there. Voldemort took his last breath and fell to the ground just like Harry had. Tears streaked down Dumbledore’s face as he stared at the finally defeated Harry Potter. He looked around and saw the bodies of the Deatheaters and Dementors scattered all around the floor. The Order who were now exhausted from fighting, came over and glanced at Harry who they had all were friends with and silently cried to themselves. Dumbledore picked up the boy in his arms and stood up. “He fought a brave battle” he said between tears. “He shouldn’t have to be buried among the enemy” Dumbledore pointed his wand at Voldemort and turned his body into ashes, letting them spread in the wind. He did the same with the other dead bodies and stopped when he noticed a headstone carved and all ready for someone to be buried in. It read Harry Potter, the boy who lived. Dumbledore destroyed it and transported back to Hogwarts of Witchcraft and Wizardry to tell everyone about the boy who once lived. __________________________________________________ _______ Please tell me what you think of it! -Serena Malfoy
Last edited by cho_chang8888; 03-31-2005 at 05:31 PM.
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03-31-2005, 06:50 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: *In the gym at RBJH stocking a certain redhead*
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Please Read and Review, or just post some comments on what you think of the story.
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03-31-2005, 08:23 PM
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| Murtlap
Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: stoke, uk
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I think it was great
sad but great
i hope to see you post again soon
Love Becca xxx
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03-31-2005, 09:34 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: *In the gym at RBJH stocking a certain redhead*
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Thanks!!! A flower  for u
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03-31-2005, 09:41 PM
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| Red Cap
Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: Where ever those voices in my head tell me to live
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| i don't think it's really authentic. I mean, Hermione and Ron would've probably come along to look for Harry, ALSO, Dumbledore would've like jumped in front of Harry so Harry wouldn't die. Not to mention that Voldemort has taken a ridiculous amount of step toward immortallity. last, JKR seems to have a taste for pisaz(or drama) so I don't think she'd let Harry die without a fight. (sorry for being such a tough critic).
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03-31-2005, 09:46 PM
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| Firecrab
Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Typing on the computer at Hogwarts (Is that possible?)
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That made me depressed. I'm guessing you're not going to add any more to it?
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03-31-2005, 09:54 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: *In the gym at RBJH stocking a certain redhead*
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K, thanks for reviewing! yes but Dumbledore sent Ron and Hermione to get Ginny by the time they were back they were gone. Its ok lol i wanted people to comment on my story not lie about it lol, not saying anyone lied about it!
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04-03-2005, 08:23 PM
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| Firecrab
Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Typing on the computer at Hogwarts (Is that possible?)
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are you going to do another one shot?
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04-04-2005, 11:47 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: *In the gym at RBJH stocking a certain redhead*
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yes i will be doing another one shot i'm am currently writing it right now and i will have it up soon
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04-08-2005, 11:02 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: i live in a world when i am with Harry and fighting and falling in love...in my mind
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that was really sad! that all i got to say!
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04-16-2005, 07:11 PM
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| Gnome
Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: my computer, duh!
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I'm really depressed now...
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04-22-2005, 12:55 AM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: *In the gym at RBJH stocking a certain redhead*
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awwww lol sorry that was the point of the story but sorry to everyone who i made sad
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04-22-2005, 02:46 AM
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| Nogtail
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Maybe it wasn't as dramatic as The Lady writes but it was most heart felt and real. Some times that's the way heros meet their end.
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04-25-2005, 11:45 PM
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| Jarvey
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: *In the gym at RBJH stocking a certain redhead*
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lol thank you!!!
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02-04-2006, 08:45 AM
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| Jobberknoll
Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Port Angeles, WA
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it was really sad, but I'm wondering one thing, why did Harry go to the cemetery?
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02-04-2006, 09:12 AM
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| Swedish Short-Snout
Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Wangdoodleland.
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ya, okay, not to sound super duper mean, but YAY!!! (hehe, harrys' dead, i point and laugh at their pain....) okay, but at the end, Harry didn't die with a fight, he layed their and cried, that's not fighting. second, Dumbledore and the rest of the Order wouldn't have stood their watching Voldy torture Harry, they would've cast spells on all the Deatheaters before they knew it. but ya, if you're going to keep Harry being dead, obviously, then draw his death out more, make him suffer more. And make the order show up like at the very end of the spell, as Voldy shouts "ra" from kadavra, and then the order would be completely helpless to save their "dear beloved Harry" from dying. Voldy died too easily, the deatheaters did too, none of them tried to save their Lord. But mainly, just draw Harry's death out more, describe the pain and stuff more, make him scream and wish for death to escape the pain, and the order should really show up and not be able to do anything. but, as someone already said, Hermione and Ron would be their with the Order, there's no way they'd stay behind. But, why did harry go to the cemetery? he's not exactly stupid, so why? and what's up with the going back to get Ginny, wouldn't they have gotten her, when they got Hermione? O, but one more thing, boys can't get into the girls dormitories because they're not trusted enough, remember in the book? and movie? girls can go into the guys, but the guys can't go into the girls.
pink is the devil, death to the pinkness.....
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02-12-2006, 11:42 PM
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| Bundimun
Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: United States
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| I liked it, and I'm not going to criticize about what the actual characters would have done, etc. because how would anyone know they're going to do that anyway ? Plus you wrote the story, so isn't it up to the author to decide how they write their story ? Anyway, I thought it was very good, and can't wait to read anything else you have.
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02-21-2006, 08:24 PM
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| Manticore
Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: whoville
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it was really good
sad but good
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03-01-2006, 07:02 AM
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| Jarvey
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Very sad. Bu thappy the Voldy is died. Rest in Peace Harry
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