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slytherin_gurl13 · 04-17-2004, 11:21 PM

This is my first poem so I hope you guys like it!
This one is called More Than Friends?

I pass you by in the hall
You say "Hi" and that is all
We've been friends for some time
But something's changed in my mind
I think about the times together we spend
But now I see you as more than a friend
Do you feel the same way too?
'Cause I see you watching me with those eyes of blue
You must think of me that way
I can tell by what people say
But the only one who really knows is you
You can tell me 'cause I love you too
I know you're shy, but so am I
Let's be together, or at least just try
'Cause if it doesn't work out, you're still my friend
We'll always be by each other 'till the end

What do you guys think?

Dawn Bloom · 04-18-2004, 11:57 AM

Excellent!

RIGHT ON!!!!

slytherin_gurl13 · 04-18-2004, 07:57 PM

Thanks! Just so you guys know, my poetry is based on things that I've gone through. They're all true. Writing them kinda helps me release all my thoughts and feelings and all of my stress.

slytherin_gurl13 · 04-19-2004, 11:35 PM

Ok, here's another one, even though I don't have alot of posts! :sad:
This one is about the same person in the first one.

The Dance:

I see you there at the dance
We see each other at a glance
We talk to each other for a while
Oh I love it when you smile!
A slow song comes on and I'm led away
But it's not by you, I want to stay
We're both dancing but not with each other
I wish that we could be together
I look to see where you are
I see you, it's ok, you're not far
You turn your head and catch my eye
I can't turn away, I'm hypnotized
We stare into each other's heart
We cannot turn away, we cannot part
I look away with a blink
My head is spinning, I cannot think
The song ends and I'm free to go
Something's about to happen, but I don't know
Later on I stand by you
And you turn to me with your eyes so blue
"Do you want to dance?" you say to me
I feel like I had been waiting an eternity
"Yes" I say and we're on the floor
And the space between us, there is no more

Well, what do y'all think?

Shacklebolt · 04-19-2004, 11:48 PM

They're really good! Keep it up!

slytherin_gurl13 · 04-21-2004, 11:01 PM

Thanks! I'm glad you guys enjoy!

Dawn Bloom · 04-22-2004, 03:35 AM

WOW, that one was so great!

Chimaera135 · 04-22-2004, 03:16 PM

good work! Keep it up!

slytherin_gurl13 · 04-24-2004, 10:15 PM

I'm glad you guys like it! I'll be posting another one soon!

slytherin_gurl13 · 04-24-2004, 11:46 PM

Ok, new one!

It's My Life:

You tell me who you want me to be
I listen to you, but I disagree
You say I can do that or this
I say "no" but you don't get the jist
I know that you're trying to do good
You're only helping out like good parents should
But I already know who I want to be
So give me the reins and let me take the lead

It's the shortest one so far but.....

MerCY_bLAcK · 04-25-2004, 01:15 AM

i luv yur poetry keep postin'

bad_faith · 04-25-2004, 01:38 AM

WOW!!! You are sooo talented- thats really good!! Oyeah and the ones before that one are super dooper good too!!

Dawn Bloom · 04-25-2004, 07:58 PM

'Twas Great! :rose:

slytherin_gurl13 · 04-27-2004, 02:54 AM

Thanks guys! I'll try to post more sometime soon. I'm busy at the moment. Stuff's going on with me and the guy in my first two poems (Yay!!). Hopefully everything will work out! But I'll try to get another one up soon!

bad_faith · 05-02-2004, 08:51 PM

lol Good Luck- I hope all goes well!

slytherin_gurl13 · 05-02-2004, 09:25 PM

Ok I'm back! Here's another one for y'all!
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A Phone Call Late at Night:

I wrote you a letter the other day
There were so many things I needed to say
I told you everything I knew
About how much I feel for you
I asked you to call me that night
When the phone rang, it gave me a fright
I answered the phone and heard your voice
You called me, late thought, but good choice

I asked questions about the way your friends act
Your answers were weird, though, and not exact
Was there someone in the room with you?
Maybe your parents and brother too?

Your answers didn't make sense, you know
Are you hiding something that you don't want me to know?
It's ok if you like me too
Because you now know that I like you

We talked about other things for a little longer
Then we hung up and I sat to ponder
I wasn't so sure if you liked me like that now
Because of course by now we'd be going out
But little did I know that I would soon change my mind
'Cause I heard something from a friend that talks to you all the time
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I hope I'm not boring you all about what goes on in my life! It's just easier to write stuff from experience. Oh well, hope you guys like it!

bad_faith · 05-04-2004, 10:17 PM

omg i love it!!! write more asap :flowersmile:

slytherin_gurl13 · 05-07-2004, 11:38 PM

Thanks! I'll probably post another tomorrow or something. Thanks again to all you guys!

bad_faith · 05-08-2004, 08:30 PM

^ good!

slytherin_gurl13 · 05-09-2004, 10:01 PM

I'm back now! Here's one.

Why?:

Why does everything have to be so difficult?
Why do I feel trapped in a vault?
Why don't you talk to me anymore?
Why do you just look at me and close the door?
What did I do to make you be this way?
Was it something I did or didn't say?
I used to talk to you all the time
But I told you how I felt, is that a crime?
Maybe we're better off being friends
I don't want things between us to end
Could you just say something so I know things are alright?
I don't want to feel like we're in a fight
Sometime soon I'm going to talk to you
So that our relationship will not be through

Hope you all like it! It's another shorty!

bad_faith · 05-11-2004, 03:04 AM

omg!! i emailed this one to my friend(dont worry i gave you all the credit, of course,

) and she LOVET it!

slytherin_gurl13 · 05-15-2004, 03:58 AM

LOL! Thanks! I'm glad you two liked it! I don't have one right now, but I'll have one either tomorrow or the next day. Thanks again for reading! You're awesome! Rock on! LOL!