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02-27-2004, 10:19 PM
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Hey guys.... 
I will post all my poetry in here... and please review!
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02-27-2004, 10:23 PM
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She Lied...
I don't care
She's my nightmare
She lied
I cried
I don't care what she says
I hate her these days.
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02-27-2004, 10:24 PM
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Deceived
You told me I wasn’t strong
But I know that you’re wrong
You’re the one who’s weak
My advice you always seek
When will you realise
That I won’t compromise
The person that I am
You have nothing to say
Think you’re in control day after day
You had us deceived
The lies we in believed
Were is the girl I though I knew
A soup of lies you always brew
Who are you really?
You think it’s your right to be mad
But to be honest you’re really sad
Your friends is running away
They have seen the real you one day
Now your sitting in the darkness
With no one to bring you happiness
So what have you become?
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03-02-2004, 09:04 PM
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Will someone please reply????
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03-03-2004, 06:50 PM
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Poison
You words are like poison
They take away my senses
You look at me like
Life has no consequenses
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03-06-2004, 03:51 PM
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Free.
Hope fills me up inside
There is no need to hide
I finally broke free
I am all that I can be
No longer under your spell
It's just a nightmare from hell.
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03-14-2004, 05:37 PM
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these are extremely well written! i really really enjoyed them. you shoudl keep writng, because ill keep reading!
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03-14-2004, 09:31 PM
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Thanks... your the first one to reply so I was kinda scared....
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03-14-2004, 09:34 PM
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Speechless.
A big black wall
I feel so small
There's no way back
Of spirit I lack
I want to get out
But can not shout
I'm going speechless
Swallowed by darkness.
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03-15-2004, 12:10 AM
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well i nejoyed reading them, and i like that last one too, but i dotn see why you would be scared....
maybe you could read mine? (its called Alyonna's Poetry)
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03-15-2004, 09:18 PM
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Sure I'll go read them now...
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Big Brown Eyes
He looks at me
With his big brown eyes
And I can see
He will never tell me lies
My heart beats so fast
Does he like me?
And would it last?
Can he see?
With him I want to be.
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This is my favorit of all my poems...
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03-16-2004, 01:20 AM
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ooh i like that one, and thanx for reviewing my stuff!
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03-16-2004, 02:37 AM
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i like ur poetry! keep it uP!
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03-17-2004, 10:02 PM
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Thanks... woaw... people are actually replying! yay!
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The Pain
It hurts so much
I can't hold on
I feel out of touch
It's been for so long
The pain will win
It always does
i don't know where to begin
And that's just because...
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03-17-2004, 10:33 PM
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very very very well written! but i love them ALL!
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03-21-2004, 07:13 PM
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xxxxxxx
He makes me feel weak
His guidance I seek
He completes me
We are forever to be
I am in love
It is like heaven above
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04-02-2004, 01:56 PM
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Goodbye
I'm going to cry
Why do you say goodbye
I'd miss you so
I can't let go
Stay with me
And you will see
The world through new eyes
A world without lies
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