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Old 01-22-2010, 05:26 AM   #51 (permalink)
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awww i love it momma, james is so sweet to lily. i love the mushy stuff cant wait for more ur story. wonders what it be like to be a werecat? te hee he
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The Wedding of James and Lily, Not To Be Forgotten
So, nearly fell out of my seat as I read this

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Tom recognized it as a gift Petunia and Vernon received at their wedding from Marge.


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Some cleavage, but chaste,
But very pretty dresses! *grins*

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A pair of skinny leg blue jeans, that rode low and snug on the hips, a pull over blouse that just touched the top of her jeans, and her long, thick light brown hair pulled back into a high ponytail, was how she preferred to be.
You know me/story-me too well though my hair is a lot less pretty than you describe

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She gave Teddy a black eye the first time they met simply for him calling her beautiful and winking at her.
MUAHAHHAHA! zomg, i love it

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After the funeral, Petunia sold Mommas dress as it was too small for her to use, and she said I wasn’t worthy to wear it.
GASP! *slaps Tunney*

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There is no one more worthy to wear that dress than you, and I’m sorry Petunia’s jealousy took away her happiness
Oh, very McGonagall! I heart it

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Something borrowed;” she poked her wand and on lily’s feet appeared Cinderella’s glass slippers.
Nice touch

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In their way of thinking, it was more fun then throwing rice on them.


I love this post-especially the descriptions!
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You're like my star pupil Connie of course I take time to nurture your writing. I should be a writing teacher ... I do it so much here on SS. Professor Otterius St. Catchuscoldus Emeritus Squired and Squared Doctor of Englishology & Know-it-all-ology. But yeah, I was totally peeved ... the kids wanted on the computer I told them not to touch my window and ...

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Next Chapter is: “Butterfly Flutters” to be posted around Friday, the 29th.
I love your title. A life spans in the wing beats of a butterfly. Should I be afraid?

SPOILER!!: Marriage Rant
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First a Note from the Author:
I must encourage anyone reading this, to remember that this is purely fictitious and the use of certain licenses gives advantages to the writer. To say that I believe in true love, and marriage being a wonderful and precious union is factual.

However, I do not suggest or give advice for any couple to jump into any serious relationship and especially marriage when they are only seventeen as James and Lily are. They are in set circumstances, and literally taught to be an adult at seventeen.

In addition, they, being magical folk, will be living in a world of magic wherein their survival depends upon them making adult decisions. Moreover, James and Lily are both quite literally alone. I want to afford them the comfort of being able to marry and be happy. James is well off, and proven to be a very credible wizard, and does secret work for the Ministry of Magic, much like Muggles CIA agents for the American Government. Now that being said, let us get back to the story.
I'm 105 and I agree, Marriage is a great evil foisted on humanity and no one should have it foisted on them! Say, no to marriage and yes to a lifetime of womanizing and cheeky *Ottery takes the microphone away from Teddy*

Teddy not withstanding, I have to say marriage is not for the faint-hearted, the young, the stupid, the young AND stupid, people with commitment issues ... well the list is too long to go through. But yeah, you make very good points Connie. If grown up people can 't make it work what are teenagers thinking they can do? You should have to go through like a marriage test to get a marriage license you know? Like when you get a driver's license, then they can do marriage school and they can send you home with a pseudo-wife and kids and a budget and problems and if you can handle all of that you know ...

It's all a capitalist plot anyways. Marriage is overrated, married people buy more stuff ... and all that lalalala.


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Instead, they sent a wedding present of a very ugly vase decorated with paintings of dogs. Tom recognized it as a gift Petunia and Vernon received at their wedding from Marge.
Hehehehehehe I'm sorry but that's just funny.

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Professor Flitwick was conducting an Orchestra playing “Canon in D”.
You know that's a dirge right? I don't know why people marry to this song it's soooooooooooooooooooooo sad. Beautiful but sad *pets Pachabel* It's the artists greatest woe when people don't understand our message.

Okay, McGonagall as the fashion designer for the whole wedding was cool. I loved all her outfits and that she gave the boys haircuts they needed them if they're as scruffy as I thought

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Ottery and Teddy had been standing with their girlfriends when McGonagall whisked the anxious girls away with her, but not before she gave Ottery and Teddy the same treatment as James and Sirius.
I don't know that Teddy would have stood for that, even from McGonagall.

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No buttons, or bow,
The neck and back low,
Some cleavage, but chaste,
Crimson silk, tight to the waist,
Flow free from the hips, fade crimson to white,
Make this dress a breathtaking sight.
I loved that poem. ♥ Cuteness.

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Eyes, lips, cheeks and jawbones,
Give this face pure hues and tones.
Her curls in long locks of golden hair,
Braid up the sides, tuck and flip there.
Cascade down, her sensual back bare,
Her beauty brought forth; cause all to stare.
Cute but not as much as the first one. Girls and their make up

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Kelly was always more quiet and reserved. Although she was the shortest of the friends and quiet, didn’t mean that she couldn’t take care of herself. She had a temper of a bear if angered. Now, she stood before the mirror and admired herself. She had never thought of herself as beautiful, but had always taken pride in keeping herself looking her best. She has thick, long, black, curly hair that was a contributing factor to Ottery’s notice of her.
Only one correction, Kelly's hair is actually brown, kind of like a soft red but brown. And what really caught my eye when it came to Kelly was her smile, she has the prettiest smile I've ever seen on a girl when I first met her she had short hair but I love the way her hair cascades down her face and it's all wavy and pretty and sometimes when we're sitting in the kitchen eating sandwiches and talking about dumb things in our pajamas really late at night her hair will fall over half of her face and make her look like those old movie starlets from back in the 30's or 40's and the black and white films and she'll smile and she won't even know how pretty she looks and ... she always notices when I stare But moving on ...

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She gave Teddy a black eye the first time they met simply for him calling her beautiful and winking at her. It was true love ever since.
I love ♥ Lari and that would explain why Teddy likes her too


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A pause and then she said, “After the funeral, Petunia sold Mommas dress as it was too small for her to use, and she said I wasn’t worthy to wear it.”

Minerva pursed her lips and after she was sure she could speak civilly said, “There is no one more worthy to wear that dress than you, and I’m sorry Petunia’s jealousy took away her happiness.” Then she gave a sharp nod of her head as if that made her statement so.

Tom was angry and wanted to tell Minerva that Lily’s Momma’s dress was at this very moment hanging in Petunia’s closet. That she didn’t sell the dress and was just too jealous to allow Lily to wear it.
Yeah, Tunnie is just evil. I don't think I like her. She's so petty ... it's sad really that she would do such a thing. But it's totally canon, in a sad way. *sighs*

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“I think I’ve injured myself. Could someone call a nurse for me?”
Sirius is so silly, he needs to hush

Honestly though, the whole bit with McGonagall going into her marriage just seemed too much. I'm sorry but it's Lily's wedding not an occasion for Minerva to reveal her past it seemed to slow the chapter down needlessly. And technically you spent more time on the wedding preparations than the wedding but ... I liked the chapter.

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“We can’t have a black cat at a wedding, even though you are striped with grey.” She flicked her wrist and Tom became as white as great fluffy clouds on a hot summer day. Much better, you may take your seat.

“It’s better than a monkey suit,” he thought, remembering the tuxedo he had to wear at Petunia’s wedding. Moreover, there would be no pillow with rings to deliver to the Groom. He strutted up the isle quite full of himself.
Tom is love. Seriously, but what's wrong with a black cat at a wedding? I think that's sad, but Tom being a white cat is cool. And yeah, what's wrong with a black cat at a witch's wedding, Connie?! Sorry, I just love black cats. I had one run across my path yesterday ... I think my luck works backwards though

Neways, it's a very heartfelt and cute chapter. I liked it a lot, I think you mispelled a few things, like awe but nothing major important, honestly I was so taken by all the cuteness and loveyness that I didn't pay it any mind. It was a lovely wedding ... and Teddy and Otty running off to blow stuff up is totally canon ... Totally! *fires the cannons*

Pams when you cans ...
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Molly W.: Thanks Stephanie! Did you notice I used basically the same colors you had in your wedding? I’m glad you loved the wedding, Minerva, and Tom. Thankfully you and I didn’t have any tragedies in my past to deal with in our mother daughter moment(s). Wonderful memories stirred while I wrote this chapter, and all I’ll say to that is, Thanks for the memories.

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I wonder if McGonagall recognizes Tom as a werecat, since she is an animangus :O
You’re answer is, yes, she more than likely does.
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Lily told me about the plan to join Dumbledore’s Order of the Phoenix, take me along. Dumbledore, Hagrid and McGonagall, will know what I am, and I can control them if I need to. We are quite rare you know. Honestly though, I’m curious how you knew.”
A few tears welled in my eyes while writing this chapter as well. I’m touched you respond to my story the way you do. Thank you.

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If you was a werecat, I hope you would be like Tom. He’s my hero.

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She gave Teddy a black eye the first time they met simply for him calling her beautiful and winking at her.
It’s a good thing she didn’t have her light saber on her.

~Otts: You made me laugh till I cried. You’re such a sweetie.
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You can always add your illos later Connie, I'd love to see them it, do you have any sketches? Show me your work?
Yeah, I’ll work on getting them in later. You and your little family are welcome to come over for fruit flavored coffee and a look see at my work, but it’s a far piece to travel. Would you like me to e-mail them instead?

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I love your title. A life spans in the wing beats of a butterfly. Should I be afraid?
Possible spoil alert: No fear yet. (It is coming though, and a clue at the end of this chapter) Ask Kelly if she knows of, butterfly flutters.

I loved your Marriage Rant. lol I however, believe in the Biblical reason for marriage, but I don’t look down upon anyone who believes differently.

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You know that's a dirge right? I don't know why people marry to this song it's soooooooooooooooooooooo sad. Beautiful but sad *pets Pachabel* It's the artists greatest woe when people don't understand our message.
~Otts to my rescue again! While Canon in D is a beautiful song, and is frequently played at weddings it isn’t the song I was thinking of. The song I was thinking of was written for a friend of the author and performed for the first time at his wedding, and not written by Pachelbel. No way was this a dirge! So I asked my daughter about it. Stephanie told me kindly that I was confusing two different songs. She showed me some sheet music for the song she thought I was describing to her, and there it was. The Wedding Song (There Is Love) by, Noel “Paul” Stookey of Peter, Paul and Mary. It was written for Paul’s friend Peter Yarrow’s wedding, and performed for the first time there. So, Thank you ~Otts, and my deepest regrets and apologies to Johann Pachelbel for my clumsy mistake. And this clarification doesn’t require a need to write another page from Lily’s Diary.

McGonagall revealing her past I thought was necessary to help Lily understand her reason for wanting to help her. She needed Lily to trust her intentions for wanting to help her, and why she loved her more than just a student. Lily lost her parents, and didn’t have any family to share with her and help her with her special day. Minerva’s maternal instincts’ took over to be there for Lily to be able to have her Mother Daughter moment, and give her the wedding she knew Lily would love to have. Plus, this is foundation for her actions later on. Steve and I was only going to have a couple friends and immediate family, but his mom, God rest her soul, stepped in to give me a wedding she wanted to do for her daughter’s wedding,. She never had any daughters, so she took me aside one day and sweetly asked could she please do these things for me. I was astounded and said yes, just for her to do what she needs to do to make her happy. Needless to say, we had a huge wedding, over 200 people, flowers, the whole thing. It was beautiful, and she and Steve’s dad paid for the whole thing, even though they didn’t have the money to spend on it.

The reason Minerva changed Tom into a white cat and even allowed him in the church, was to take away from what was going on in the wizarding world. The black cloaks of the Death Eaters was an all too common site being seen about, and she just wanted to give Tom a pure look (white) to keep any remotest thought of evil, superstition, and fear out of the wedding.

Ottery and Teddy’s fireworks was something I wanted to make bigger like you said it would have been, but I didn’t want to make the ending of the chapter about them, but what they wanted for the couple.

I’m so happy you like this chapter as much as you do, and thanks again for looking after me, so I don’t muck up my story terribly bad.

Thanks to all my readers for sticking with me, and I welcome any new readers I might have and would like to invite anyone who wants to, to comment if you want. Also I want to start warning you that this story is gradually getting darker, and much sadness will come, but some light heartedness with it. Next chapter will be posted hopefully next Friday. Chapter Eleven: Tom Learns A Secret, and A Family Heirloom?







CHAPTER TEN

Butterfly Flutters

James and Lily lived in the house he inherited from his parents. They were so very happy. Tom enjoyed his life and could not imagine that his life before Lily saved him was so hard and desolate.
Lily marveled at how close James and Tom were. Sometimes she wondered if people might think they were strange treating their cat the way they do, as if he is human and one of the family. The thing is he acts like no other cat. "He seems to know what we are all about and he understands us completely", she thought.

In all her remembrances, he has been her best friend. He gave her the idea about the rose bush she was tending. A smile was on her face as she wondered how Petunia was enjoying her bush so full of roses during this time of the year when it should not be blooming. She was deliriously happy at how her life had turned from long periods of harsh storms, to the likes of perfect sunny days with mild breezes that carried fragrances of sweet smelling flowers and freshly cut grass. Life was good, and she was thankful for her many blessings bestowed on her.

She saw the time and moved away from her rose bush to start washing the vegetables from the storage bin, for their evening meal. The stuffed duck she had been roasting slowly all day and the vegetables would be done at the same time if she got stated on them now. James was splitting wood the Muggle way, with an ax and a lot of muscle. He wanted to do it this way to keep fit and trim.

Tom was at his station watching James dutifully, as was his custom to follow James around whenever he was outside. She wondered if maybe Tom might only be pretending to watch when, actually he was napping. She couldn’t tell because his back was to her. She laughed gaily at the site of James talking and laughing with his cat as though he was a real person, maybe like to a son he was teaching life lessons.

She dropped her carrot she was washing, and put her hands below her stomach, a little flutter. She twirled into her cloak, ran out to James, and threw her arms around him. James had no choice, but to drop the ax behind him, as he was about to take a mighty swing on the waiting log section to be split.

“I love you so she exclaimed!”

At first, James was afraid something had happened, and had grabbed her shoulders to look at her. However, the exuberance of the way she told of her love calmed him from that thought.

“I love you to, but Honey you know better than to come up on me like that when I’m splitting wood. I could have split you in two.” he chided her.

“You was about to have to stop because I caused the log to fall over, you wouldn’t have swung that ax. Nevertheless, I had to tell you something this very instant! She exclaimed.”

“Okay” he said confused at her getting so emotional, and what kind of emergency could possibly happen that would make her so happy? “Well, calm down, what is it?” Her enthusiasm caught hold of him and he felt his self-control ebbing away. He laughed and hugged her to him because she was now bouncing off her toes. She planted a kiss full on his lips and said she couldn’t help it.

“My, but you’re a sexy man, your muscles all pumped up, and the smell of sweet sweat mixed with the aroma of pine wood, on this cold crisp day.” She giggled at his arched eyebrows.

“Now?” he asked incredulously. He let the ax fall over onto the ground, and a smile crept to his face.

Lily laughed; she was having too much fun at James’s expense. She decided to behave herself, and give him the reason for her intrusion on him. “Just now as I was washing the vegetables, I felt a little flutter down here.”

“Oh” he said not knowing what to say, “um maybe gas?” he offered, and a little disappointed.

She surrendered her laugh to a little soft kiss, “No Honey, it’s the first indication a woman gets, letting her know that her baby has gotten big enough to feel it move.”

He swept her off her feet and sat on the garden swing with her cuddled onto his lap and chest. “That’s exciting, can I feel it? How big is it now? Can we call it him, instead of it? When will we know if we have a boy or a girl? Do you have any names picked out that we can be thinking on? What did it feel like?” His last question he asked in wonderment.

“It was such a subtle movement; I could have missed it easily if I was doing something more physical. It was so beautiful; I got chills up my spine. He’s a tiny little us happy and content.” She smiled at the wonder on his face.

“When will he come? Honey, I’ll be a great father, and you’ll be a great mother. He’ll be the luckiest kid in the world to have both parents who want nothing more than to love and teach him what makes the world go around. And a great cat for him to chase,” he added seeing Tom wanting to be included in on the conversation. “Come on up Tom.” James said patting Lily’s lap.

Snow flurries were starting to drift down from the cold gray sky. They lingered there on the swing, looking about them as the snowflakes started collecting other snowflakes instead of melting. The garden was no longer full of green shrubs, and vines and beautiful flowers that were there in the spring and summer. Now, clumps of white snow covered brown bare branches that shivered their leaves several long months ago. Still, in that moment it was a beautiful place to be. James put his warm hand on Lily’s face, wiped the flakes from her lashes, and kissed her brow.

“We better get our baby and his wonderful, beautiful mommy in the house Tom,” he said not taking his eyes off his bride of nearly a year and a half. Tom jumped down and walked over to the ax now covered with snow. “I’ll come back out and put that away in a minute Tom.”
“Nonsense, you can put it away now, I can manage getting in the house on my own. I don‘t want treated like I‘m an invalid,” she said. “Go ahead and get that ax put up, don’t forget to oil and wipe it down.” She said as she went to the house.

Tom followed James into the shed, and turned into Jim. James put his coat around him quickly. He new he would get cold very quickly without all his fur on him.

“What’s up Jim?” He glanced towards the house, and seen Lily in the kitchen window orchestrating, flying pans, vegetables, and gravy, to finish making the meal. He smiled at the time they had just spent on the swing, making her have to use magic to finish her meal preparations to keep on her schedule. Still smiling, James shut the shed door and turned his attention to Jim.

Jim said, “While you and Lily were talking, I saw Peter Pettigrew looking around the corner of the house.”

“Really! I wonder why didn’t he come on up and visit.”

“Something is amiss with him lately, and he is so nervous. I don’t like the feeling I get around him anymore. He’s even more cowardly than normal.” James considered what Jim had said carefully.

“Maybe it’s the uncertainty that things are in these days. When we were at school, he had all of us to hide behind and feel safe. All he has now is his mom, and rumor has it that she is a poor witch who drinks too much. I’ll drop in on him tomorrow and see if I can’t do a little fishing. Meanwhile, I’ll put up some charms and enchantments here.”

“How about Lily feeling the baby move Jim, isn’t it great?”

“Yes, I felt him stir last night as the two of you slept.” Jim said, “I didn’t touch his mind though. That is the honor of the father and mother. Start talking to him when she starts showing. You’re never too young to start learning. Teach him the sound of your voice. Teach him how to stay calm in tough situations so he can think clearly. Teach him to trust his instincts.”

“We’re having a boy?” James asked folding his hands under his chin. “You felt him? I didn’t know you could do that.”

“It’s my magic, I didn’t feel him physically, but his presence, and yes, he is a boy.

“How will I teach him all that stuff?” James asked doubting the possibility of such a thing.

“Each evening when Lily is resting, lay down with your head on her lap, and tell her you need to confer with your son. Then just talk as though he is there and you are telling him of the day you had, and what you did that day. Tell him what it felt like when you played Quidditch. Read him stories. Tell him stories of when you were in school. Tell him things you were afraid of and how you overcame your fears.”

“James, are you spending the night in the shed?" Lily called to him.
“I’m nearly done, I’ll be there in a second,” he answered.

“Jim,” James encased the small boy’s little face in his hands, then hugged him and kissed the top of his head. I love you Jim, I hope you always know that we love you so much. And thank you for all that you are, and all that you do for us.”

Jim smiled a little red in the face. “Yes, I know, Little One, and the feeling is mutual” He handed James the coat, thanked him for it, turned back into Tom, then ran ahead of James to the house. James, being filled with tremendous pride, strutted behind Tom as they entered into the house for their evening meal. He was wearing a smile, as large as his pride, upon his face. He was going to be a Daddy!

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Beautiful!!! I knew Lily was pregnant when she felt that!!! Yay! I love James. He is such a wonderful person. And Tom/Jim... I wish I had a werecat! My cat came up to me while reading, so I asked her if she was a werecat... She just looked at me and then walked away.

UGH! Peter Pettigrew... That little slime ball!

This is a wonderful story! Keep it up! I can't wait for more.

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AHAHHAHA I burst out laughing here TOOO good!

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ARG! Gosh, it's wierd thinking that James didn't think that was suspicious...why he was even friends with him I'll never know...

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Oh, I love these lines...so perfect for the series. Trust your instincts, think before you do. It sort of gives you that little idea of something other than luck keeping Harry alive throught the series-well, that and his friends

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OMG, I just remembered that they had a cat-Lily told Sirius about it before she died Wow, you're like the master of little cannon details Conners!

And btw...butterfly flutters...genius tittle...ZOMG! Is it the invisibility cloak's first introduction in the next chapter?

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awesome post...Connie...i really liked it...it was so sweet and reading the previous comment even i realised yes that there was a cat at Lily and James' place that's cool...
we dont know what JK thought and brought in the cat but the way you have written this one its really cool...
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Well, sorry, but I'll have to tell you in person my personal thoughts on this chapter. It was very nice...lot's of joyful emotions and nice lil' segway into the darker things to come. How is it that, in all the books, I overlook Peter? I'm always surprised to see him again, and then it's like, "oh yeah...him" It must be a little awkward for James to see Jim as a little boy, when in fact Jim's older than he is. Hmm...a little Saphira/Eragon there with that "Little One", eh? Anyway, loved it Mom.
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hiya,momma love this chapter. just how old is jim/tom? why he not age, is it his magic? keep u the good writing cant wait for more.sory hadnt been much been under the weather lil
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Jim always appears to be about the age of a nine year old male. Yes it is his magic. You'll find out his approximate age in chapter 15. Can't tell you the title yet. Not enough people likes spoiled milk to give that information.

Please enjoy this chapter. Next Friday I'll post: Chapter Twelve "Narrow Rescues, and Narrow Escapes"


CHAPTER ELEVEN

Tom Learns the Truth, and A Family Heirloom?

Spring came early to Godric’s Hollow, and James let the shield and charms down around the house one warm day, because they were going to have company. Sirius, Remus, and Peter, were coming over for a game of Basketball. A Muggle sport Lily told James about. Intrigued, James decided he wanted to play it. He missed playing Quidditch so much. They acquired a ball and hoop, and made a half court behind the garden. Sirius, and Lissy, arrived followed only a minute later by Remus. Lissy went in to visit Lily, and small talk ensued with the guys outside while waiting for Peter to appear.

“Let’s just get on with it!” Sirius said, smiling broadly. “This sounds like a game Remus and I can whup up on James!”

“About time too,” added Remus good-naturedly.

“In your dreams boys, in your dreams,” laughed James. “Okay, let’s have the rules and scoring, and then we’ll fill Peter in when he gets here.” Sirius said a little impatiently, but with a devilish grin.

“Hold up there girls, want some real competition, or are we too much for you?” Teddy and Ottery came in shaking hands, smiles big as the world. “We were down at the Leaky Cauldron, where we saw Peter talking to Sevy. (The pus filled scum bag, interrupted Teddy in a lowly voice) “Easy there boy,” Ottery soothed Teddy. “We um left before Teddy could watch the fire cracker he threw under their table scare them out of their pants. They were having such a delicious conversation about you and Lily.”

“What were they talking about?” Everyone was suddenly serious. “Well, Peter was crying about being scared, and not wanting anything to happen to James and Lily, and Snape was impassive as ever, and said nothing would happen to Lily, and Potter was going to get what’s coming to him.”

Everyone stood looking at James. “What do we do mate? Sounds like Peter’s turned on us.” Sirius said sadly.

“We give him a chance to explain himself, is what we do.” said Remus. “In case you’ve forgotten, Peter is our friend.”

“Of course, you’re right Remus. Let’s get on with our game. When Peter gets here,” ---”we’ll ask him about it.” finished Ottery hitting his fist in his other hand.

“There’ll be none of that.” said James smiling kindly. He was touched at the loyalty of his friends. “Come on now, Lily is going to wonder why we’re not playing.”

They started playing and were really enjoying the game, even though it seems a different variation of the rules were in play. An hour into the game Peter showed up. “Hi guy’s,” he said trying to control his nerves. He kept looking behind him. “I need to talk to you before we play.” looking around at them all.

“Sure Peter, what’s up?”

“Well, I was on my way here when Snape,” (taking a second to spit on the ground) “cursed me with the leg locker curse. He took me in the Leaky Cauldron, sat me in a chair, and told me if I know what’s good for me that I need to do as he says. Well, I was scared plenty, but I managed to ask him what he wants of me. He said he heard we were getting together today, and for me to sneak into your shed and put this on your ax.” He pulled out a jar of clear liquid and showed it to them. “I told him I didn’t want you and Lily to get hurt. He said Lily wouldn’t get hurt, and you would get what you deserve. All of a sudden, there was a massive explosion that nearly scared me out of my pants. Snape put everything in order as if nothing happened, staring at me not even blinking an eye! He stood up to leave and said my curse would wear off in a while, and not to speak of what we were doing or else he would get me. I asked him what he’d do to me if I didn’t do it and, he just said it would be kinder if I didn’t know. I didn’t know what to do.” He said trembling.

“Here Peter, let me have it.” James said with sympathy. “It’s alright; we’ll make it look like you did everything you were s’pose to.” He took the jar, went in the shed, and brought out his ax. He set up a small log as if to split it, poured the liquid onto the jar, then stepped back ready to take a swing.

“What do you think you’re doing? Are you crazy?”

“Look guys, Peter was given a job to do, and was threatened if he didn’t do it. It won’t be something that will kill me, and you guys can set me straight, after what ever happens. Peter, tell him that we was going to have a contest to see who could split the most wood the Muggle way in sixty seconds. He’ll eat that up, especially with me going first. Now stand back, and just be ready to set me straight before Lily sees me.”

Before there were any more opposing arguments, James swung his ax. No less than fifty vipers exploded out of the ax, all of them came at James with an accelerated rate of speed. At once, they all came together in front of James and exploded, sending great globs of gunk all over him. Everyone laughed hysterically except Teddy who exclaimed he needed to find out how to make him one of those.

“Here you go mate.” Ottery scooped some of the gunk off James into the jar it came in, and handed it to Teddy. “The recipe; compliments of Severus Snape, you’ll figure all it’s ins and outs.”

“Ok, guys clean me up quickly, this is starting to burn. They all got serious and cleaned him up in great haste. “There you go, now you’re good as new.”

James was shaky and not feeling very well. Peter came up to him. “I’m sorry James, I was so scared, and I didn’t know what to do! He whimpered.

“Peter, potions were always your strongest subject,” James said doubling over, and talking in great gasps. “I think the poison seeped into my skin, make something, and hurry!”

Sirius grabbed James and held him as he started convulsing, and foaming at the mouth. “He’s dying, get Lily! James, James, James,” Sirius cried, “Peter! Hurry so James doesn’t die!”

“Wait!” Peter broke in. Severus said Lily wouldn’t be able to help him. Do you remember Lily being the best potion mixer Hogwarts has seen? Slughorn said so. It is not a poison. And, James is right; he could not do something that would kill him. Let him be. It’ll right itself. He took him to deaths door, but, he, he, he’ll come back.”

“Look, here he is, James can you here me? James” Remus repeated, who also was kneeling beside James.

“I’m fine.” James said weakly. “Good job, Peter,” he said.

“I didn’t do anything, it wasn’t a poison.”

“Ok, let’s talk about this later; Lily’s going to find out.”

Although everyone was somewhat shaken, they got back into the game, after telling Peter he was on Ottery, and Teddy’s side and told him the basic rules. At first nobody could get into it, as they were constantly watching James. When they realized James was the only one scoring any points, they all started playing hard. It was a good game, and everyone was having such fun. The harder James played the better he felt. By the time they needed to quit, he was completely back to normal. They was breathing and laughing so hard, sweat covered them all, and they were all shirtless, with the exception of Peter. It was such a site seeing them standing with their hands on their hips, and exalting themselves for spectacular shots, or the awesome blocking. Many excuses why there were missed shots, and praise for ones that were made, even though they seemed a little too impossible to make, some how impossible shots were made.

Lily came out carrying a tray of lemon aid, and pumpkin juice. “Who’s winning?” She asked.

“We are,” they all said at once.

“You’re all on the same side?” She asked, as Ottery stepped in front of her and took the drinks from her.

“Let me help you.” he said being a perfect gentleman.

“Why thank you kind sir.”

“Not at all, Ma’am.” he said bowing, and tipping his non existing Stetson. “Come and get your drinks you lazy skunks.” He said cracking up laughing, as he put the drinks down on the garden table. They all thankfully took their drinks and guzzled them down, and went for refills.

“Peter, it’s so nice to see you. You haven’t been around for ages.” Peter turned to respond to her and spewed his drink all over everyone, and started choking.

“Hey! What’s up with that?” They all objected falling all over each other laughing.

Peter pointed to Lily’s very large belly, with big eyes ready to bug out of his head.

“Come on now,” James, said as he tried hard to gain his composure. “Don’t tell me you didn’t know we’re having a baby?” He said as he messed up his hair as he always does when he is feeling particularly proud of himself. “Yup, the end of the month, you’re all uncles to a baby boy. Except you Sirius, you’re to be his God Father, if you don’t mind.”

Everyone was honored and started in on how they was going to teach their nephew this and that, and make sure they’re all told when it happens and… While everyone else was talking it up, three was not.

“Will you Sirius, be his God Father? If something happens to me, or both of us, will you raise, and love him as your own?” James asked being very serious.

“You know I will.” Sirius said very emotionally.“

And then there was Peter who stood staring and pointing at Lily’s belly, with pumpkin juice slobbering down his chin.

“Why would you want to do that?” He gasped indignantly. Everyone became silent and stared at him. None more than Tom though. Tom was getting more and more leery of Peter, and now he knew why. His heart had changed, and Tom felt he could no longer be trusted.

“I mean,” He laughed nervously, “The poor boy will be teased horribly if he looks anything like you James. I can see the whole picture now, he is out playing on the playground and some mean bully say’s, “Hey there little feller, you shouldn’t be wearing such an ugly mask, you’ll scare all the pretty girls.”

He laughed, then Sirius laughed, and said, yeah (winking at James) we better start praying that God takes pity on the boy and gives him Lily’s looks, in a masculine way of course.”

“Play nice now boys.” cautioned Remus, half-smiling, looking at Peter. James saw Tom move over between Peter and Lily.

“All right gang, let’s call it a day.” Lily went back in the house as she heard the timer go off to get the bread out of the oven. We have an order meeting tonight. Don’t forget.” “Hey, if you all enjoyed playing Basketball lets get together again next Saturday and play again. I had a blast.”

“Oh yeah, that was a blast what with you getting sprayed with some sort of funky demented acid gunk, nearly killing over, and scaring us all to death. What do you have for next week’s half time entertainment?” Ottery asked with a wry smile on his face.

“Point taken” James said.

“How ‘bout if any of us get stopped by a snake in the grass we stick our wand up his nose and tell the ugly git to mind his own business.” Teddy said in a matter of fact voice.

“Yeah ok” Agreed Ottery, and Sirius.

“Just don’t anyone tell anyone else we’re going to be here. See you all tonight at eight then.”

That evening as James was getting ready for the meeting and Lily was cleaning up after supper, the Muggle way, Tom came in and James sat on the bed to tie up his laces.

“You gave everyone quite a scare today.”

“Not you though. Thanks for stepping in when you did. It really frightened me, thinking I would never see my son, or, well, just thanks. I felt your presence in my mind, and you telling me I was ok helped me immediately. It’s such a strange feeling, being next to dead.”

“Yeah, I know. It’s even stranger feeling yourself die, and then come back to life.” On a different note, I don’t want to go to the meeting tonight. I think I should stay here with Lily.”

“Thank you for that Tom. I was going to ask if you would mind staying home with her. Can’t take any chances with our girl can we?”

“James?”

Yes Tom?” He sat back down and looked at him.

“Remember that day we met, just before Lily came out of her trance? You said you’d tell me sometime how you knew I was a werecat.”

“Yeah, I remember. Do you want me to tell you now? I just never brought it up again, it being such a sour memory and all. But, yeah, I’ll tell you.” He smiled and scratched behind his ears and started stroking his fur.

“When Lily arrived at Kings Cross that day, I snuck over behind her, and started listening to her and Petunia and I noticed you there. I watched you and realized you was a werecat from a book I have on magical creatures thought to be extinct. I was so thankful I was down wind of you so you couldn‘t smell me, cause I knew you would never trust me if you knew I was there, hidden from you and Lily.”

“You was behind us? I remember looking around when Petunia started getting loud and I didn’t see you. Wait a minute; I did see you! I watched Lily going to the train in tears over Petunia being so hateful. You was standing against the train with your arms folded. You was waiting for her.”

“That’s right, I was there then, but had you looked, earlier, you wouldn’t have seen me, because I came over as soon as I seen Lily. I stayed long enough to hear Petunia and all that she had to say, about us all being freaks and all. When it looked like she was winding down, then I ran over to the train and pulled off my invisibility cloak.”

“You have one of those? Can I see it?” He asked anxiously.

“Sure Tom.” James went over to the closet and pulled out the cloak. “Have at it.” He put it on the bed for Tom to see. “Lily didn’t know about it till much later. I used to play such tricks on her,” he said smiling at the memories.

“Hey watch for Lily for me.” he changed into Jim. “This is the one, the true invisibility cloak! Listen James, don’t ever let this out of your possession, and you need to start wearing this when ever you go out.” I did not believe Peters story today. I think he had a change of heart and he and Severus were planning the whole thing. It’s odd that he didn’t take off his shirt today when everyone else did. Could it be that he was hiding his new tattoo? And you don’t think it a little bit odd that Peter of all people was the one keeping his cool, and figured out Severus’s brilliance, when no one else did?”

“Lily! James warned in a whisper. He turned back around to look at Jim as Lily walked into the room.

Tom was on the bed washing himself. “That was close!” He thought. Tom looked up at him and winked his eye.

“Are you guys about ready to leave?” she asked as she came into James arms. She tilted her head and they kissed. Smiling she gave him another soft peck on the lips and pulled herself away.

“Yup,” All ready, only Tom is going to stay home with you from now on.

“Awe Honey, Tom loves going to those meetings, and Dumbledore seems to really enjoy him being there. He always makes such a fuss over him. If anything goes wrong here, I can just apparate over to the meeting. I do know the way of course, after all I did grow up in that house.” She had donated the house to the Order to have their meetings in.

“No, Lily. I need him to stay with you. He’s such a comfort to you. He’ll keep you company and you won’t worry if I’m not home when you think I should be. Oh, and on that subject, Dumbledore asked me to stay after the meeting for a minute after everyone else leaves. He’ll escort me home for extra protection.”

“No James! Don’t give him your cloak! Tell him no!” Tom put in James’s mind, so forceful, that he had to shut his eyes hard.

James kissed Lily, and scratched behind Toms ears. “Don’t worry, I’ll be home before you can miss me.” He smiled and left the house.

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Oh, Connie! This was such a great chapter! I am glad you posted when you did. I was looking for something to do, and voila! You posted!

That Peter!!! Why why why why why!!! It so sad to think that he could do such a thing to his friends!!! And how peculiar he was acting when he saw Lily's belly...

Great chapter! I can't wait to see what else you come up with!!!

P.S. I swear my cat must know when I am reading this story because she does not leave me alone while I am reading it!!!
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really nice post Connie...waiting for more...
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Great post, Mom. Really enjoyed it. However...i wanted to hear more of their version of our muggle game lol.
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Hello evrybody,I thought my computer was whacked out with everything kinda purplish pink, then realized that Pro. Gilderoy Lockhart must be on the loose. No matter, it's kind a cute. Happy Valentines Day when it gets here. Short replies, then the next chapter

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Molly W.: Stephie, as to more of the basketball game, I did have loads more, but was afraid it would take to much away from the main story line. There was stuff like, Sirius and Lupin ganging up against James, Teddy accidentally,blowing up the ball, and for some reason the ball he conjured up always seemed to score points for him, and Ottery never did believe Peter's story, and for some reason, Peter had a really hard time getting the ball, and was always having to pick himself up off of the ground, the cluts. always the loyal pal that Ottery.

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I'm glad everybody liked the chapter, and thanks to each and everyone who takes the time to read this story. Missing Ottery, and hope he's able to come back real soon. Please pay close attention to the A/N in the very beginning of this chapter! I'm serious. Next Friday, hopefully I'll post: Chapter Thirteen - "And What of Neville?" Please enjoy, and post comments, to let me know if it was too much, because you know there is going to be more.


CHAPTER TWELVE

Narrow Escapes and Narrow Rescues

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Please be advised that this chapter contains much hardship and heart wrenching passages, and if there are those who have trouble with this sort of thing, you are best off to skip to the next chapter. Also these next two chapters are short and told in a sort of documentary style, as Tom could not possibly have been at all these places, so we’re learning about these goings on as reports were made, and converted to story form by the narrator.



Times were getting so frightening. Torture and murder was happening all over. Now and then, Death Eaters captured Order members, and did terrible things to them. Widespread panic had a grip on magic folk all over the world.

Maria, and Steven, moved to the states, California, to campaign for more witches and wizards to join the Order. (Her Aunt Connie misses her very much.)

Ottery and Kelly moved to Albania. Eyewitness accounts to Dumbledore places Voldemort there. They were to be very cautious, and find a business to run that would enable everyone to communicate with each other secretly. They had a most dangerous duty to the Order, for they were going to send coded messages to other Order members right under Voltemort’s nose, and His Death Eaters were everywhere. They started a club that went over airwaves for magical folk and internet for Muggles and squibs. They call it, “The Seeker of the Snitch” It was really quite ingenious. Ottery would go out on missions, then return and he and Kelly would write ingenious stories that communicated information to Dumbledore who translated the code and reported the new information to the Order. They were exceptionally talented writers and got quite a following of fans.


Of James and Lily’s duty, James did most of the work so Lily could stay home with baby Harry.


Lissy was madly in love with Sirius, and although he finally told her he was madly in love with her, (not his words though) told her he couldn’t commit to her at this time. He said he was trying to work something out to help James and Lily. There had been several attempts on their lives, and James had more than a few narrow escapes. Lily had a narrow escape while she was out with Harry, and James said it was due to the cat that they escaped.


K’Lari and Teddy are doing very dangerous search and rescue operations. They live with their lives on the line twenty-four hours a day. Teddy use to laugh and boast this was the reason he was born. It shook him though when the death eaters captured Aurors Frank and Alice Longbottom along with their baby, Neville. He still beats himself up for not saving them. K’Lari scolded him and reminded him that he did save them and the baby, and he himself, narrowly escaped death in the process of the rescue.


The Longbottom’s received a warning that the Lestranges were on their way to their place. They set out their Patronus‘s, but had to leave as they sent them. Teddy and K’Lari responded when they received the Patronus’s, and was there only seconds later. They were already gone and it was obvious someone was after them. K’Lari’s uncanny tracking skills found clues to each place they stopped at.

Frank had been working on a special patronus charm that would leave just the tiniest silvery wisps to settle just above the ground. It would linger until discovered, then change into a cryptic map then dissipate. They were able to get to them almost instantly. The way the Lestranges were able to get to them was they caught hold of Alice as she was starting to disapparate.

When Teddy and K’Lari caught up to them, they had already started torturing them with the Cruciatus Curse. The scene was too gruesome to describe in detail. Let it be known though, that the Lestranges are veracious wicked animals, who laughed during each curse. They kept asking what the baby’s special power was. They were screaming that he did not have any. Then they did the unthinkable. They summoned a great snake called Nagini to hold Frank and Alice in her coils, and started performing the Cruciatus Curse on poor, poor little Neville. His screams were insufferable. They begged and pleaded, they did not know what they wanted of them. The relentless curses and seeing their precious Neville writhing about, screaming and crying drove them mad.


K’Lari screamed, and vomited. They were only there seconds. Teddy in one motion scooped up Neville and handed him to K‘Lari, who was two feet from him. “Go!” he screamed. “I’ll catch up!”

Teddy killed one of the Lestranges, and the other one got away. “Hopefully I’ll live to get her and send her to be with her husband.” Thought Teddy, as he watched the snake release the Longbottom’s and start slithering over to him. Quickly he conjured a soft rope and looped it around James and Alice, then touched it with his wand and said; “Portus St Mungo’s” and they disappeared as the snake struck him.

He performed all kinds of spells on it, but they just bounced off it. He tried to disapparate, but was unable to move, the poison already affecting him. The snake struck repeatedly. He knew he was an inch from loosing his life when Dumbledore showed up.

Dumbledore assessed the situation, and released a great bolt of lightening on Nagini. This was not a magic spell. The lightening was real; magic was the cause of it. Therefore, the magic shield protecting her from magic spells did not prevent the lightening bolt from hitting her. It shortly dropped back. Dumbledore knew this would not kill it, but it did give him enough time to pick up Teddy and disapparated with him.

Teddy was in St Mungo’s clinging to life only by sheer will power. For two weeks, he fought to stay alive. Finally, on the fourteenth night there, his Dr. called K’Lari from his room. “We’ve done everything we can for him, and he’s so weak. Tired of fighting, I can tell. If he comes to any at all, "he paused and put his hand on her shoulder, "you need to say good-bye, and let him go."

K’Lari did not want to accept what the Dr. told her. During the night, she woke, while sitting at his bedside holding his hand, to see Teddy looking at her. He smiled slightly and whispered very weakly. “Hey beautiful, how about a date? We can break out of here and go have some fun. What do ya say?” Then he closed his eyes and lay motionless with the smile still on his face.













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Ohhhh! How sad! Great chapter. It really brings about the tragedy of what happened, and how scary times once were! I like what you put in about the silvery substance sticking around and becoming a map. Clever! So sad! Poor Neville! How horrible! the Lestrange's were awful people! TEDDY! NOOOOO!
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Mom? Really? *sniff* ...you had to kill off Teddy? I was expecting tragedy with the Longbottom's, dreading it with James and Lilly...but...Teddy? :'(
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hiya momma me again love the chapter still hates snakes. Dumbledore should turned it in to a rose or something te hee he but love the action sory if i sound ummm lil evilish cant wait for more love greenie
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K'Lari,Yep, the prize goes to the, Super Sleuth, OOPS! Did I just give away a clue to K'Lari's big moment in this chapter? (and there is no prize, it's just an exspression you know)Hope you like the chapter.
ZOMG! I loooove the chapter

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“The Seeker of the Snitch”
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It shook him though when the death eaters captured Aurors Frank and Alice Longbottom along with their baby, Neville.
They're still alive at least...and Neville will be the bomb *huggles Teddy*

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Then they did the unthinkable. They summoned a great snake called Nagini to hold Frank and Alice in her coils, and started performing the Cruciatus Curse on poor, poor little Neville.
ARRRRRRRRRRRG!!!

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Teddy killed one of the Lestranges
Not sure if I like this departure from cannon, but it's all good considering Bella's still alive. Her insane love for Voldermort makes more sense this way, with her husband dead

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“We’ve done everything we can for him, and he’s so weak. Tired of fighting, I can tell. If he comes to any at all, (pause) you need to say good-bye, and let him go."
I hate it when they say that But Teddy's NOT going to die. NO.

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“Hey beautiful, how about a date? We can break out of here and go have some fun. What do ya say?”
I say..."Yeah, with you being in great shape and all..."

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Then he closed his eyes and lay motionless with the smile still on his face.
He didn't die, did he?
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heya Connie...nice post...i was slightly surprised by end of Teddy...i hoped he wouldnt leave...K'Lari......but i guess its writer's choice?...waiting for more...
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Hey everyone. I hope I still have readers after the last chapter. But, are you all sure you read it correctly?
I guess you'll have to read on and find out.

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I like what you put in about the silvery substance sticking around and becoming a map.
This was as I said, a new type of Patronus Frank was working on. And if you remember, Neville uses his dad's wand. And when he is in the DA the last time before Umbridge found them, Neville was able to produce a "feeble wisps of silver smoke" He didn't know it, but just like Harry produced his dad's Patronus, the Stag, neville produced his dad's patronus the silver wispy smoke. A coded map of where to find them if there's trouble.

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I was expecting tragedy with the Longbottom's, dreading it with James and Lilly...but...Teddy? :'(
You know what to expect, and it will come, but all is not lost.

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Obi-Wan K'Lari: K'Lari,
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ARRRRRRRRRRRG!!!
Girl you got that right! If only you had your light saber! Yes, you could have taken out the Lestrange's AND Nagini!
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Her insane love for Voldermort makes more sense this way, with her husband dead
Yes, exactly my thinking. And I'm pretty sure he is killed, I'll have to look that up and make sure.

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heya Connie...nice post...i was slightly surprised by end of Teddy...i hoped he wouldnt leave...K'Lari......but i guess its writer's choice?...waiting for more...
Thank you, and just let me say, things aren't always what they seem.

To all my readers, thank you for reading. I hope you all like this new chapter, and the next chapter, (14) I'll post next Thurs. or Fri. is titled, "Joy In A Time Of Overwhelming Fear" It is a fun chapter for the most part.

CHAPTER THIRTEEN
And What of Neville?

The following morning Professor Dumbledore came to see Teddy. K’Lari had told him that Teddy woke up again and asked about the Longbottom’s condition. He was devastated to hear what happened. "Alive, but insane. Was there nothing but hardships left to live in this world?" he asked her sadly.

“Hello Teddy. Look who I brought with me.” Dumbledore said jovially.
Teddy looked intently at the baby in Dumbledore’s arms. He smiled, still very weak, and asked if he could bring him closer. Normally he wasn’t to keen on being around these little people that seemed to take enormous amounts of time and energy to take care of, and was usually rewarded with partially digested stuff heaved from within, all over you, resulting from the smallest burp, or slight movement. Nevertheless, he had to see that he was ok. Dumbledore studied him for a moment then set Neville on his bed. He sat there with a vague look in his eyes, but other than that, he looked perfectly normal.

“He’s fine, fully recuperated, thanks to you and your wife. He will have a rough way to go until he heals mentally. We had to perform a very deep memory charm on him. He will be able to learn and function, but only just. With so many pathways closed in his mind, it tends to give the feeling that something is just not right. He just won’t have the fullest of confidence in himself. He will second-guess himself so much that he’ll end up with very low self-esteem although he has the ability to be brilliant. I am very confident that he will come out of it fine in time.”

Teddy tried to smile at Neville, but could only manage a partial one. A tear welled up in his eye and fell down his square jaw. “I’m sorry Neville, I’m so sorry,” he said softly. Neville looked at Teddy, and climbed over the cumbersome bandages, and bedding. He positioned his little self over Teddy, opened his mouth, and planted a great slobbery kiss on Teddy’s eye. “Nevys Teddy Bear all better?” “All better, thank you Neville.” Teddy said winking at him, only keeping his eye closed. K’Lari dabbed the slobber off his eye, then turned to dab her own eyes. Neville smiled showing his four front teeth, and then he laid down on Teddy’s chest, got a handful of Teddy’s long hair, and slept with a free thumb in his mouth.

“I guess he was tired, Teddy said. His own voice sounding tired.” Dumbledore said that sense being rescued this was the first time he has gone to sleep on his own. “He doesn’t understand why his,” he cleared his throat and started to reach for Neville. “I’ll take him back to his room for you Teddy.”

“Oh, well, only if you have to. I mean he is ok here. It only hurts just a tiny bit. If you don’t mind he can stay here.” He added with authority, and keeping a hand on the baby’s back.
For two hours, Teddy and Dumbledore discussed the Order and of accomplishments made. K’Lari asked about the Potters, and other members, friends of theirs. Neville’s’ grandmother came in unceremoniously and said she had been searching the whole hospital for him, but softened when she saw Neville slumbering so peacefully on Teddy.

“I’m sorry” she said, “It’s only on account of that they said I could take him to see his parents now. They’re both awake,” then she went over to Teddy and just touched his shoulder, with what one would assume to be a gesture of affection. “Thank you son. Albus told all of us of the tremendous courage and bravery you,”

“No,” Teddy interjected roughly, even in his extremely weekend state. He wouldn’t accept praise and laud for something he didn’t feel he deserved. “I didn’t do anything anyone else would have done.”

“I think not.” She said gruffly. Neville woke and gripped Teddy’s gown at the sound of his grandma’s voice. She reached over to get him, but Teddy put up his hand.

“Hang on a minute.” He twirled his wand and a beautiful ivy plant appeared in his hand. It had tiny little buds on it that changed colors every little bit. “It’s a mood vine, Neville. See it change when I put it in your hands?” It did indeed change colors. Neville squealed with delight. Plants are wonderful friends to have, because you can talk to them, and they don’t get mad at what you say, they can make powerful medicine to make everything better, and they can make things blow up when you need-”

“Tell Teddy thank you.” Grandma ordered.

“Thank you.” Neville shouted in his exuberance and started to lean in to give another very slobbery kiss. Teddy smiled and closed his eyes to receive it, but it did not come.

“Stop that now!” Grandma put in sharply.

Neville stopped abruptly. “Nevy love Teddy Bear,” he said meekly.

“Why does he call him Teddy Bear?” K’Lari asked, her heart thumping hard in her throat.

“Oh it’s just a silly endearment Alice used on him all the time. “Come here Nevy, mommy’s precious teddy bear.” (Giving them an example) “It’s the way she always talked to him.”

Teddy, with effort, brought Neville to him and kissed him, and told him he loved him too. Then he moved his head slightly forward and pulled Neville to him, and closed his eyes to receive his slobbery kiss. Neville didn‘t wait for his grandma to stop him and quickly gave Teddy his slobbery kiss. Neville laughed and rubbed noses with Teddy, and then very carefully put the side of his face on Teddy’s, and gave Teddy butterfly kisses.

Neville looked down at Teddy’s arm and drew in a sharp breath. “Uh-Oh, Teddy Bear’s booboo very ouchie.” He put the Ivy plant to a bandage with fresh blood seeping through it. “Booboo get all better now.” he said softly. He turned quickly to see his grandma huffing and tapping her foot impatiently, but not saying anything so as not to be in trouble with Teddy again. In that short instant, Teddy touched his wand to the bandage. He did an in audible, Scourgefy, spell to clean the blood off the bandage.

“Thank you, Neville” Teddy said to the baby, showing him the all better booboo.

Neville smiled and patted the plant with his little fingers. “Good boy, Ivy Plant, good boy!” “Please allow him to visit me, whenever he wants to, or needs to.”

Mrs. Longbottom took him, and not to gently, but certainly not unkindly. “Oh for goodness sake, he’s a baby, he doesn’t know what he wants, or even needs.” They watched as Neville hugged the plant to him, and they disappeared into the hallway, with Neville peeking around her shoulder, and yelled, “Bye-bye”

Teddy looked at K‘Lari and said, “Babe, please go straight away to the gift shop and pay for that plant. I didn’t have time to go shop for it properly.”

“Consider it paid in full.” said Dumbledore, getting up to leave. “One more thing-”Dumbledore was starting to say.

“Professor, sir?” Teddy said abruptly, and winced at the sudden movement.

“Teddy, you are much too tired and weak for a prolonged visit. You are awake just this morning from a coma you’ve been in, for two weeks,” he said.

“But, sir,”

“Then, if you must,” he said with a patient smile. “You are not a student anymore, but, a friend. Please call me Albus.”

“I never, I mean I want to thank you for getting me away from that snake. You saved my life. If it struck one more time, and if you hadn’t rescued me right then, I would be dead. I could feel my life ending.” Thank you”

“It was worth saving, and you’re very welcome. Now, I must leave, but before I do,” he pulled out a stuffed envelope, and handed it to Teddy. “When you are up to it, Mr. OtterySt.Catchpole has sent you a get well story by none other than, himself. It is called, “The Misadventures and Misfortunes of Teddy Bear Without the Great and Powerful Wizard of Otts There to Save the Day… or aka, Get Well Soon”

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wonderful post Connie...and i loved the last line......Ottery is such a self obssessed guy......
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loved this line...
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!

I love it

And the "get well story" title too
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Haha! That Ottery Boy is so silly! I am SO glad Teddy didn't die! Hurrah for Dumbledore Little Neville is so cute! What a wonderful explanation for Neville's performance later in school, and a great touch with the ivy plant! It's no wonder he'll be good in Herbology!

Yet another fantastic post, Connie! I'll be watching for your next one!
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