Well it sounds OK to me....

YAY!!!!!!!!!!! someone else
aaaw gorsh you think its that great
hi join da party

okay im workin on that line in the last post so plz save the tomatoes until you see it all

danz: do you mean it or are you just bein nice
btw i edited Riddle
somehow left out a line

might as well show you the finished product
here goes:


Bay Kissed Wind

you have yet to crucify the mind
to the day I should never cast to open sea
freeze the waves and savor the chaotic beauty
too imperfect
a godsent day in April
a hand in plea does reach to the heavens
only to catch itself red
you please the wicked minded
and crawl on bloodshed ground
not fit to lie with the lesser of the beast
when you will it
endure not a doubt of my coming
cloud not to count
you will find me
just to closing my final color
kept in abeyance on undisturbed waters
with the ashen dove
unscathed


i hope its okay someone said they didnt understand it very well

okie dokie this threads dead
well i have too much time now so im kinda feelin lonely so close this thread?
plz

I'm here! and that last one was great :dragon:

Danz_angel x lol that is just amazing *poke*

oh hey sorry you like em that much its been sooo long i mean ive written like a million more

*waits*

aaaw u like me u really like me...that much
well lets see where do i start here ya go to make up for lost times:

A Little Less Time

not a masterpiece
nothing special
simply here
no unaccounted hours ever spent on me
a simple chord
no thoughts gone unwritten
on this plain white page
i can only try
others do the same
so still nothing more than there
i am my own band for none else will play
to applaude my own silent melody
a reminder of what bliss
being no one brings


No Time To Wave

not a word in silence
retreat to mourn
dark for the breathless
grey for the blind
why not ask for mercy
when beat is so many prayers away
stack and topple
shade the light from view
and love
broken down too many a day
a certain proposal to leave in peace
search and rescue before its too late
or should i have the heart to
pull in the drapery
listen once for a lifetime
and slowly take my place in rest
one more note to hear
one more cry for tears
that just refuse to give
one more feather to fall
my last farewell to all

Sidewalk

scatter the timber poles
the thick draped crow is left of murder
how lovely a broken balance
to keep held within
not one of my better
heade my best
raindrop, teardrop
we all cry for one thing
does the earth part for you alone
if stone should give
the archway cave
the willow grin
who will be left
but the thick draped crow




~lotsa luv for bein so patient with me~