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narnia_potter 11-23-2011 04:24 AM

Memories - Sa 13+
 
Hello, everyone! This is my... 2nd ff? Yeah, 2nd. My first one is currently being written. It is called The Wedding. I also have a Christmas story up on booksie.com called My Child: My Story. Check them out if you want. :)
Disclaimer: This whole world and characters belongs to J.K. Rowling.
Ok, this one, as you can tell, is called Memories. It is a one-shot. I got my inspiration reading Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows this past weekend when I was sick. And I got to the part where Voldie is about to kill Snape. And so I started to wonder what if Snape was actually allowed to go find Harry. So I wrote about the "what if". Hope you guys like it and tell me what you think!




Memories



“But Potter hates you. You won’t be able to get near him,” said the high, cold, unfeeling voice standing opposite of me.

“Yes, my lord. But I know his weaknesses. I know how to bring him in. Six years of teaching him was not a waste. I can bring the boy to you. Let me.” The Dark Lord paused and considered.

“Alright, Severus. Bring him to me. What I must demand of you can be done later. Go, Severus.”

I walked out of the Shrieking Shack calmly. As soon as I hit the edge of the forest, I took a deep breath and apparated—praying Harry would listen to me. I apparated to the edge of the Hogwarts grounds and made my way through the throngs of battle. People were fighting right and left. I cast a disillusionment charm on myself so I could protect my students without either side knowing who I was. Flashes of light were flying everywhere and fires burned, lighting the castle. I made my way through the courtyard and into the castle searching for Harry Potter. I had something to give him. He had to know everything.

I ran. I shot spells at fellow Death Eaters and protected the students I swore to protect with my life. I could not see Potter anywhere. I searched and searched. I wouldn’t give up until I found him. Finally, at the end of the corridor I was in, I saw the brown plait and the fiery mop of hair of Potter’s two best friends and accomplices, Hermione Granger and Ron Weasley; I knew Potter must be nearby. I raced toward Granger and Weasley. Then I spotted him; I spotted Harry Potter.

He was running towards his two best friends and I was in between him and them. Granger and Weasley were dueling too hard and their backs were toward Potter so they would never notice if I took my chance to grab Potter. So I did. I grabbed Harry, silenced him, and dragged him down a nearby corridor. I made myself visible again and I saw the hatred in his eyes and I understood why the hatred was present. He did not yet know the truth. I took off the silencing spell.

“WHO THE HECK DO YOU THINK YOU ARE?!?!?” I knew he was going to yell at me. “I know you were sent to capture me. I saw it! But I’m not going down without a fight!!”

“It was never my intention to take you to him, Potter.” I saw the astonishment flit across his face.

“Then what is your intention?”

“I came to tell you the truth, Harry.” Again, surprise flashed across his features but this time it was because I used his first name. I drew a flask from my pocket and put my wand to my temple and began to draw out memories: memories that would explain everything. But to do that, those memories had to start at the beginning. He needed to see everything before he could understand anything.

“Take these memories—my memories—to Dumbledore’s office. Take them to the Pensieve and watch them. Watch everything before you do anything. Try not to hate me any more than you already do. Go straight there. No detours.” I could see him relax slightly when I referred to the office as Dumbledore’s rather than mine. But his guard was still up and I understood why. He turned to leave but I grabbed hold of his arm. I had one favor to ask of him.

“Look at me, Harry.” He looked straight into my eyes and I saw the same eyes of the woman I had long ago fallen in love with. Now they were her sons’ eyes. But to me they would always be Lilly’s.

“You have Lily’s eyes . . . Now go!”


Fin

sweetpinkpixie 11-30-2011 10:43 AM

http://i969.photobucket.com/albums/a...riestories.jpg


Thank you for sharing your talent with us again! You sure you want to just make this a one shot?! shameless Snape fan here

XenoLongbottom 11-30-2011 09:09 PM

Aww!! That's so sweet! I would luv it if you made more, but I know how it feels like to be pressured into making more chapters. It's fairly annoying! Well, I luv it, and i can't wait to see the recepyion for the Wedding! :)

narnia_potter 12-01-2011 04:28 AM

Thank you! Both of you! To be honest, I highly doubt I will post more on this one, but I will not rule out the possibility. :)
Thank you for your comments!
-Rachel :)

Connie 12-02-2011 08:49 PM

Hey Rachel, I saw this late last night, but I lost Internet, cable, phones, everything until just now. You did very good with this oneshot. It would be interesting to see this version played out to the end. It would be hard to do, but I think you are capable of doing a great job of it. I'm sure I understand if you don't, but if you do ever decide to continue it on, let me know so I can read it.
This bit is very well written, and I love the way you handled Harry and his willingness to hear Snape out, without wasting time arguing.
Quote:

“It was never my intention to take you to him, Potter.” I saw the astonishment flit across his face.

“Then what is your intention?”

“I came to tell you the truth, Harry.” Again, surprise flashed across his features but this time it was because I used his first name. I drew a flask from my pocket and put my wand to my temple and began to draw out memories: memories that would explain everything. But to do that, those memories had to start at the beginning. He needed to see everything before he could understand anything.

“Take these memories—my memories—to Dumbledore’s office. Take them to the Pensieve and watch them. Watch everything before you do anything. Try not to hate me any more than you already do. Go straight there. No detours.” I could see him relax slightly when I referred to the office as Dumbledore’s rather than mine. But his guard was still up and I understood why. He turned to leave but I grabbed hold of his arm. I had one favor to ask of him.
Very nicely done, Rachel :glomp:

LoonyLupin99 12-27-2011 10:41 PM

You know, now that I think about it, this probably is exactly what Snape was going to do before he died. Great job! Oh, and my inner Wicked fan appreciates that line on the top of your posts :) Merry Christmas and Happy New Year :snowflak:


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