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02-03-2010, 07:20 PM
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| Murtlap
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Dirk First Year | nice work
Keep it going, looking forward to more.
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02-03-2010, 07:35 PM
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| Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | Three whole words, Eight letters late(8) New Post  Chapter 7 (I think haha!)
Hayley began to walk up the pathway towards the castle.
"Miss Veldings." Hayley spun around to see a man in a long black cloak.
"Oh. It's you." she said, turning round and continuing to walk up the path. He caught up and walked parallel to her.
"What do you want Severus?"
"I have to escort you to the castle, and here you will call me Profesor Snape." He said glaring at her.
"Ha. In case you haven't forgotten Sev " She spat his name in disgust. " I am your boss for the time being. So don't push it and show me where to go." She gestured for him to lead the way. It was about after 12 o'clock so the castle was asleep. She followed Snape down to the dungeons after being sorted into Slytherin. (obviously) She jumped when he said "Riddle" and a section of the wall opened and they walked into Slytherin common room.
"Up stairs to the left. You have your own room." He turned around and walked out leaving her alone. She went to her room,to her bed and fell asleep as soon as her head hit the pillow. She hadn't slept right since she found out what she would be doing but she couldn't help it. The bed was so soft. ***
"Your new."
"Excuse me?"
"I know everyone in this school and I don't know you so your new." Hayley was sitting in the great hall at breakfast when this girl had came up to her. She was small with short brown hair and green eyes.
"Yeh. Fine. I'm new do you have a problem with that?" This was fun. She loved arguing with people.
"Uhm" She said nervously. "No I don't " She said after making up her mind. "I'm Chloe. Chloe Baird."
"Hayley" she said "Veldings. You can sit here if you want."
Hayley and Chloe sat for the rest of lunch talking about how she hated men after her father left, she said they couldn't be trusted.
Hayley was relieved when Dumbledore hushed the room. She had yet to create her 'background story'. Her relief turned to dread when he started talking.
"Before every one goes to their classes, I wanted to introduce you all to Hayley Veldings. Welcome Hayley. O.K eery one of to class."
Everyone raised from their tables and sounds of scrapping benches filled the room.
" Miss Veldings " hayley turned around to find Snape behind her.From the cornor of her eye she saw a group of five people raise frome the Gryffindor table and head for the door, on of them detached from the group and caught up with a girl from Ravenclaw she had seen when entering the hall. She could also feel Chloe beside her.
"You know what Sev? I can't talk right now. I have things to do." She enphsize the last part so he would understand. Oh crap. She turned to see Chloe with her eyes popping out of her head awaiting Snapes reaction. Oh well she thought They'll have to get used to it because I'm not calling Snape of all people Professor.
"Your time table." He growled. Hayley loved having this control over him.
"Great. Come on Chloe." She grabbed Chloe's arm and walked towards the door. She had potions first woth the Gryffindors
"Hayley. What was THAT !?!"
"What was what? " hayley asked instantly.
"You called Snape Sev and were being totaly cheeky to him and he did nothing!"
"Oh. That. Thats nothing." She said as they sat down at a table.
'O.K today class you will be given a partner who you will work with for the rest of the year." Oh. Great thought Hayley as she watched Slughorn wadle to the front of the classroom Knowing my luck I'll be with some creep. Comment please!!
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02-03-2010, 08:33 PM
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#103 (permalink)
| Puffskein
Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Scotland
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | Three whole words, Eight letters late(8)
guys if you don't understand something in a post at any piont dont be afraid to ask and i'll sort it all out
Kerri xx
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02-03-2010, 09:20 PM
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#104 (permalink)
| Graphorn
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Enya Mayberry Fourth Year | Workaholic || HOGwart | iloveyou. || SnowQueenEviee.
Good post!!
I liked it!!
Haha Sev 
Cant wait for more
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02-03-2010, 09:26 PM
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#105 (permalink)
| Snidget
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Great.
Loved it.
I had no idea that would happen
Haha
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02-03-2010, 09:32 PM
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#106 (permalink)
| Puffskein
Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Scotland
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | Three whole words, Eight letters late(8) Quote:
Originally Posted by KatielovesHP Great.
Loved it.
I had no idea that would happen
Haha :L and you dont know who shes going to get paired with (she says sarcasticly)
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02-04-2010, 03:08 AM
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| I Nailed Wormtail Love Hunter Extraordinaire Mooncalf
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hey, new reader here.... I love this fic! So, background... I'm assuming Snape never killed Dumbledore in sixth year and all that other stuff never happened... Interesting. I really like it, PLEASE PAMS!! (:
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02-04-2010, 03:56 AM
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#108 (permalink)
| Snidget
Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: New England
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Kaylee Strap First Year | Dragon..Dragon..Draco.. | | Sirius Lee Black
*glowers at her for daring to be cheeky to my Sev*
lol... Nice job.. Hm.. I wonder who she gets paired with
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02-04-2010, 04:08 AM
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| Firecrab
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Rosalie Wayland Second Year | || Random Moments, Random Times - Sa13+ || Slytherin's Curly-Haired Beauty(:
Hmmm... I wonder who she gets paired with.
*Hayley Williams is just as cool. Is as cheeky(: Jkk..*
Haha..(:
Pamss!
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02-04-2010, 06:13 AM
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| Bugbear
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Cody Liam Evans Seventh Year | HP, Harry & Ginny ♥ | Music Girl ♫ | | BW, JB, CS, 1D, Glee, AVPM/S Lover | Pray & Quote:
Originally Posted by KatielovesHP Great.
Loved it.
I had no idea that would happen
Haha Same!
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02-04-2010, 08:02 AM
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#111 (permalink)
| Jarvey
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GREAT! Wonder who she is going to be paired with........
Cait
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02-04-2010, 04:15 PM
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#112 (permalink)
| Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | Three whole words, Eight letters late(8)
guys if ur wondering the Romancy part is coming up in the next post which might be today i haven't decided yet  :L
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02-04-2010, 04:22 PM
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| Mooncalf
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cool...keep writing...pams...
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02-04-2010, 07:10 PM
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#114 (permalink)
| Murtlap
Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Philadelphia, Pa USA
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Dirk First Year | Sev
Nice work, I like where this is going. Don't forget to alt + tab in chemistry
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02-04-2010, 09:40 PM
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#115 (permalink)
| Puffskein
Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Scotland
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | Three whole words, Eight letters late(8) Quote:
Originally Posted by spinnersend2 Nice work, I like where this is going. Don't forget to alt + tab in chemistry Thank you ! I acctuly didn't know you could do that :O I've just learned something new thanks :L haha
Kerri xx
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02-07-2010, 03:51 AM
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| Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | sorry its so small again Three whole words, Eight letters late(8) Hey guys! Just a small chapter cause it’s kinna 3:30 AM over here any way this is Harry’s point of view. Well sort of because it’s narrative :L ha-ha . Enjoy! OK I’ll try and make it long so I’m going to make it 1000 words because I have a word counter on my Microsoft word ha-ha.
Chapter 8
Harry walked into the great hall with the most beautiful girl’s hand in his. Could he be any luckier? They sat down next to Hermione, Draco and Ron, how looked very uncomfortable with the couple. He occasionally glared at Draco when he wasn’t looking.
“Ron why doesn’t Cho ever come over to our table?” Hermione asked Ron a hint of amusement in her voice, she loved the fact that she never came over.
“Ehm...” Harry knew the real reason was that Cho didn’t like Hermione.
“Who’s that?” Harry spun around in his chair. A girl with black hair and pale skin had just walked and sat at the Slytherin table, the four of them turned around to face Draco with questioning looks on their faces.
“Don’t look at me. I’ve seen her before. She must have got here last night.” Draco stated defensively. After every one was done and just about to leave Dumbledore stood up and silenced every one. After telling everyone about the new girl, her name was Hayley Veldings. They got up to leave when Ron hurried away from them to reach Cho. Harry, Ginny, Draco and Hermione walked to the stairs leading down to the dungeons. Hermione and Draco continued down the stairs hand in hand but Harry and Ginny stopped because Ginny wasn’t in potions this period. She went up onto her tip-toes and kissed him lightly on the lips. “I love you.” She said with so much passion in her voice. It had become a regular thing now, saying ‘I love you ‘but the feeling it gave them never went away. Harry descended the stairs and entered his classroom. He sat down with his partner when Slughorn came in and told them he would be giving them all new partners.
HAYLEY’S POV (first person)
“Chloe Baird with Draco Malfoy , Hermione Granger and Ronald Weasley , Harry Potter and Cho Chang (She had been moved into their class because it was now the only subject she took and she was allowed to choose what period she did it in.) and Hayley Veldings and Neville Longbottom.” I glanced over at the boy I knew to be Neville, I had seen his picture in the paper but he was different slimmer and better toned. He looked sort of beautiful in a way. Wait what is going on stop thinking like that Hayley! I shook my head to try and clear it but it didn’t work.
“Hayley?” Chloe’s voice brought me back to earth. “What happened to your hair?” Oh crap. Sorry It's only like 420 but I am really tiered I'll maybe post more tomorrow but there kind of a cliffie Hope you enjoyed it but please if u read it please please comment or review Good and Bad criticism is welcome 
Kerri xx
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02-07-2010, 03:59 AM
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#117 (permalink)
| Jarvey
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AW, she is falling for Neville! Hahaha, great post!
Cait
PS - like the part about her hair changing color!
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02-07-2010, 04:03 AM
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#118 (permalink)
| Puffskein
Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Scotland
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | Three whole words, Eight letters late(8) Quote:
Originally Posted by cait malfoy AW, she is falling for Neville! Hahaha, great post!
Cait
PS - like the part about her hair changing color! Man you're good lol you kinna cracked my code haha oh well it just means I don't have to drag it out as much aha !
I'm glad you enjoyed it 
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02-07-2010, 11:16 AM
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| Graphorn
Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: University.
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Enya Mayberry Fourth Year | Workaholic || HOGwart | iloveyou. || SnowQueenEviee.
Awww yeahhh falling for Neville 
I loved the chapter
Draco at the Gryffindor table...and no remarks fights?? wow!!
Cant wait for more
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02-07-2010, 12:20 PM
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#120 (permalink)
| Snidget
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Fabulous Post Kerri!
Great. The romance is coming, I can feel it.
The way that you have put Cho in is very clever!
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02-07-2010, 11:38 PM
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| I Nailed Wormtail Love Hunter Extraordinaire Mooncalf
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Awe, Neville does need somebody; as long as she's a good person... Great post! PLEASE PAMS!! (:
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02-08-2010, 06:15 PM
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#122 (permalink)
| Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | Three whole words, Eight letters late(8) Quote:
Originally Posted by emilyblack Awe, Neville does need somebody; as long as she's a good person... Great post! PLEASE PAMS!! (:
Oh but is she a good person ? Hmmm mwahaha!!!!! New post Tonight!!!1
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02-08-2010, 09:19 PM
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| Murtlap
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Dirk First Year |
Looking forward to it
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02-08-2010, 10:02 PM
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#124 (permalink)
| Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Isla "LaLa" Williams Second Year | New post !!!! Three whole words, Eight letters late(8) New post Enjoy !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Chapter 9 ( maybe. i forget  ) Hayley's POV
TWO WEEKS LATER !!!
Oh.Crap. Am I falling for him?
I just sat there staring at him. I was practically drooling all over the library book that was lying infront of me. I quickly moved my face as he looked over at me, my now chestnut hair fell infront of my face.
"Why is it your hair changes colour again?" by this point the whole school knew i was a metamorphmagus because every time i saw Neville my hair would suddenly get lighter though no one knew it was because of him. I was used to it changing with my mood but I could usually control it but this was incontrolable. Chloe was begining to suspect something because she was always around me. I sighed but when i looked at him I couldn't help but smile and blush.
"I'm a metamorphmagus." when I saw that he was confused I continued. "I can change my apperance at will, look." I had to consentrate really hard because he was there but i managed to turn my skin purple. " you get it now?" I asked laughing at his expression
"Wow. Yeh I get it. but what i don't get is why you always have your hair lighter when your with me but its black anyother time."
"Uhm." Great he would ask that. I needed a destraction. I glanced at my watch and there it was, my destraction. "Oh crap. We're going to be in so much trouble. It's 3 hours past curfew."
We were running through the corridor when " Crap. Its Snape! Quick in here."
Great I would pick the smallest broom closet in the whole world. We were actully pressed together our noses nearly touching. My breathing had become really heavy when our eyes met. Oh what the hell. I closed the distance between us and kissed him full on the mouth. He stood there for a moment, his brain regestering what was going on. I was thrilled when he rapped his arms around my waist and started kissing me back. I responded by rapping my arms around his neck as the kiss got more passionate.
Ok there was no denying it. I had fallen for him and falled hard! Hope you enjoy the little bit of romance i provided. Ok i promise the next post will be 1000 words
COMMENT PLEASE !!!!!!!!
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02-08-2010, 10:07 PM
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#125 (permalink)
| Jarvey
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!! I love it!!! They're cute!!!!
Cait
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