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I'm not a good poetry writer, but just to get opinions on my attempts, I'm posting some of them here. So...yeah. Tell me if you like them, please. Memory I once was here, But now I'm gone, To a better place, Far beyond the Children's cries, High above the Smoggy skies. I remember that It wasn't all bad... Remember the fun That we would have? And as the sun comes At dawn, I'd like you To know that I love you, Even though I couldn't Tell you until now- WHen I'm gone. I know it's stupid, but tell me what you think of it. |
that's good. |
I really like it. I think it is really good. |
wow i love it, tuns of meaning...i mean its not so "cheery" its good... |
wow i absolutely love that one, really makes you think too... |
oh, i'm glad people like it! makes me feel better about my poems! Here's another one, tell me if it's alright. Time to Tell I haven't told you often, I haven't told you tons, But this seemed like a good time To say thanks for all you've done. I love you very deeply, And with all of my heart, Yet I know that I don't always Show this hidden part. So I will tell you here, and I Will tell you now, while I still have a chance, Before my time runs out. I love you, and thanks For all you've done. I'm Sorry I couldn't tell you Sooner. |
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thanx hpangel and blonder_than_u. i'm glad people like my poems! here's another one that i just wrote. Life Life is a river, flowing out to sea. Or maybe it's more like a stream, Wandering endlessly... It could Even be the ocean, for it is vast, You see. WHo knows what life is It's the greatest mystery. You can SIt and wonder why we die, and Why we live, and why we cry. YOu can ponder life constantly, ANd determine if it is river, Stream, or sea. It may even vary Individually. I don't know what it is For me. |
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