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Maxilocks 07-15-2009 03:34 AM

-dead'ed-

Yeah, that's how that poem made me go. -dead'ed-

REALLY intense poem.


Droo 07-15-2009 11:35 AM

Great Poem!

Lollipop! 07-15-2009 01:36 PM

Page 3!
Still really love it! (and you) :val3: :loved:

Lollipop! 07-15-2009 02:01 PM

I rated you five stars!

Lollipop! 07-15-2009 02:05 PM

I can't pm you!

Maxilocks 07-16-2009 12:47 AM

Wow. That was so, so sad. =[

*pokes you* A cheerful poem next time? Pwease? Pretty pwease?


##Hermione&Draco## 07-16-2009 04:02 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by SenoritaMaxie (Post 8401385)
Wow. That was so, so sad. =[

*pokes you* A cheerful poem next time? Pwease? Pretty pwease?


Sure Maxie:)
Any request of what you want me to write???
Ill try to post soon...
Your ROCKIN Buddy!!,
Xavier

hermionesclone 07-16-2009 06:02 PM

New reader! Your poems are so good, so deep and meaningful! I love all of them to bits. You're so talented! I started crying so much for all of them, even some of the more cheerful ones (i seemed to have run out of tissues). I still loved them, though! I look forward to reading some more of your poems! Please post some more soon!

Lollipop! 07-16-2009 08:09 PM

Oy mh gdo!
I can't even talk propawee!
Soooooo Sad! :cry:
Your so sweet!
I can't believe you would dedicate it to me...

##Hermione&Draco## 07-17-2009 03:40 AM

I want to apologize...
For breaking the rules..
I honestly Didnt see about that..
I apologize to you..
My readers..
And to SnitchSeeker..
Man I feel so Humiliated..
And Embarrased...
I feel horrible...
I will post another poem when...-Well Just keep looking at my thread to c if I post another poem...
Hope your days will be better than mine..,
-Xavier-
P.S. Im sorry again...
Bye.

hermionesclone 07-17-2009 09:34 PM

Aw! You apologized in a poem! You don't need to apologize, though! Well i don't think so. The poem was still brilliant! Can't wait for some more!

Droo 07-18-2009 10:48 AM

It's ok... mistakes are easy to make.
I've had to be warned too when I first started :P
I liked your apology poem!

##Hermione&Draco## 07-18-2009 01:53 PM

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Honestly I didnt know it was a poem..
Man..
I guess I have poetry in my blood..
Kool!!
Lol..
Ill post poems up soon..
-Xavier-

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I hope all of yall are doing great...
Here is a poem that has to do with my real Life...
But is still Hp related..
Hope yall like it...
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I Still Love You
Everywhere...
Everytime...
People seemed amazed...
When they look at you...
Your Famous..
Your The..
"Chosen One.."
Your too busy..
with hunting..
trying...
To kill...
Lord Voldemort..
Which means..
you barely have time..
To talk to me...
Even..
Look at me...
It was a lost cause...
Just a waist of time...
I should just move on..
And on the way...
Mend my Broken Heart...
Night after night..
Trying to hide my tears...
I never slept..
For I was to consumed...
And In love with you...
I want you..
To hold me...
Protect me...
Love me...
That feeling hurts..
It will never come true...
I should just get over you...
Day...
By day...
Time goes on...
I still lay sleepless..
Thinking about you...
I tried and tried...
Being together...
With Dean...
All these days...
Kissing him..
Was nothing..
There was nothing...
I thought I loved him..
And got over you..
But Im still in love with you...
Wanting to kiss you...
But I bet you think...
There is nothing between me and you...
Im just your best friend's sister...
And nothing more...
Still trying to break free...
But Im trapped..
Cant you see all you want...
Is here...
Its Me...
Wherever you are...
Whatever you do...
Nothing will change...
What I feel for you...
It wont dissapear...
Ill try to move on...
Kiss upon other lips...
Try to fall in love with anybody...
Doing so...
It will hurt....
But then Again Dean came...
Pulled me in to his open arms...
He said..,
"I love you..."
I nodded...
Lying...
To him but not to you..
Because I still love you...Harry...
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Hoped you liked it...
Plz read and review...
Ill post more soon...
Love...Your beloved poetry creator,
-Xavier-

Lollipop! 07-20-2009 07:43 AM

Oh my god!
That was so sad!

JeshieRAWR 07-20-2009 07:59 AM

Xavier!!!
That was amazing!!
I loved the whole story part of it!
Ahhh I hate Fenrir:whip:
Great Job!!
&& I loved your other poem too!!! :D
:) Jess

P.S. I only had a little bit of time to come on the laptop, Germany is amazing! :)

Droo 07-20-2009 11:57 AM

I really liked it!

hermionesclone 07-20-2009 09:55 PM

Aw! That was so sad and yet so sweet! I can't believe it! I felt so sorry for Ginny! It was so sad on her! It felt so real. As if in HBP, that's what she's thinking. Loved it to bits! Can't wait for more!

##Hermione&Draco## 07-20-2009 11:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hermionesclone (Post 8414822)
Aw! That was so sad and yet so sweet! I can't believe it! I felt so sorry for Ginny! It was so sad on her! It felt so real. As if in HBP, that's what she's thinking. Loved it to bits! Can't wait for more!

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Ya it was sad..
And it was real...
I went through that...
Except Im a boy...
But that is Life I guess...:console:
Im going to post another poem today...
I hope you like it...
Your friend,
Xavier:)
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Quote:

Originally Posted by SeerCassandraTrelawney (Post 8413334)
I really liked it!

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Thank you SeerCassandraTrelawney:D
You are very kind....:loved:
I hope you like my last poem...
Your friend,
Xavier........
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Quote:

Originally Posted by Hermione<3Ron (Post 8413075)
Xavier!!!
That was amazing!!
I loved the whole story part of it!
Ahhh I hate Fenrir:whip:
Great Job!!
&& I loved your other poem too!!! :D
:) Jess

P.S. I only had a little bit of time to come on the laptop, Germany is amazing! :)

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Thank you...Jessluff.
**I snuggle in your arms..**
I hate fenrir too...
Im writing another poem now...
I hope you are having a great time in Germany:)
I miss you!!!!!
Your bestest buddy,
Xavier:)
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Quote:

Originally Posted by LilyLunaGinnyPotter (Post 8413060)
Oh my god!
That was so sad!

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It was sad......
All my poems are mostly sad...
Im posting another poem now...
Hope you like it!!!!
You friend,
Xavier

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Hello Everyone!!!!:hello:
Here is a poem...
Please read and review...
Thank you:) ...
I hope you like it...
################################################## ################################################## #### Whats Underneath His Skin
Pale skin...
Dark hair...
That covered his face...
It was Hiding...
Hiding the truth...
Only Some...
They see it in his eyes....
According to all the teachers...
Of Hogwarts...
They would say...
That he was nice...
They cant see what hides....
He holds a wand...
Against a student's chest....
"What were you saying about me...???"
He seemed vulnerable...
He was unprotected...
His weak voice said...,
"I said I was sorry..-
I was just joking-
playing around..."
Tom Riddle just studied him...
The smell of fear...
"Not so brave are you...
Where are your friends...
No one will save you...
You made fun of me....
And you will suffer....
You didnt think that I..
Tom Riddle..
can protect himself....
I have you..
with no protection...
No one shall see who I really am..."
The boy was against the wall..
Scared....
and said...,
"No one?"
Tom riddle whispered in his ear..,
"Goodbye..."
Red was splattered on the wall...
The scene Shifted...
Charming...
Sensitive....
A person you can relate to....
If you get too close...
He will soon be in control of you....
Make you do wrong...
Make you hurt people...
Say goodbye to your will power...
For he is too much for you...
And soon you will be dead like the rest..
After he is done using you...
After you have been too drawn to him....
But too late your dead...
He walks the hall...
Some people think he never does anything wrong...
He has pureblood friends...
His past says different...
He is embarrased..
Ashamed of his family...
His past...
His first year at Hogwarts..
All he had to do..
Is fake his identity...
Just simple words..
Like...
"Im pureblood"
Can Change his life...
He takes walks after dark....
All he wants to be...
Is immortal..
And thats what he intends to be...
If it would take killings...
It didnt mind to him...
He killed once...
No twice...
Maybe three...
But no one will notice how he really is...
Because no one really sees...
Whats really underneath his skin...
Just only the people...
Well lets just say....
They are with the dead...
Now..
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Hoped you liked it...
To be honest not one of my favorites...
But still it was an Hp poem...
Please read and review..And Im happy all of you..
Arent giving up on reading my poetry....
But I wish I had more readers...
But I glad I have you....:loved:
Thank you for being here for me..:glomp:
Your friend,
Xavier:)
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JeshieRAWR 07-21-2009 10:14 AM

Xavierluff that was amazing!!
I loved it sooo muchh!!
It really shows Tom Riddle's personality.
Great Job!!!
Your bestest buddy,
Jess (Jessica) lol

P.S. I will get you more readers! :)

hermionesclone 07-22-2009 06:19 PM

Wow! You portrayed Tom perfectly! It totally shows his personality and what he is like! Well done! It was a really good poem! Can't wait for more!

Droo 07-23-2009 03:39 PM

I liked it very much... now lets get some happy ones!

##Hermione&Draco## 07-24-2009 12:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by SeerCassandraTrelawney (Post 8423657)
I liked it very much... now lets get some happy ones!

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Im glad you like it..
I should tell you...
That whatever my feeling is..
It will affect the mood of my Hp poems...
And now I dont feel good...
So prepare for some sad poems...
Sorry...
Your Friend,
-Xavier-
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Quote:

Originally Posted by hermionesclone (Post 8420855)
Wow! You portrayed Tom perfectly! It totally shows his personality and what he is like! Well done! It was a really good poem! Can't wait for more!

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Thank you..
You are very kind...
Ill post another poem soon...
I promise....
your friend,
-Xavier-
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Quote:

Originally Posted by Hermione<3Ron (Post 8416213)
Xavierluff that was amazing!!
I loved it sooo muchh!!
It really shows Tom Riddle's personality.
Great Job!!!
Your bestest buddy,
Jess (Jessica) lol

P.S. I will get you more readers! :)

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Jessluff!!!!!!!!
Im glad you liked it:loved:
Aww..
Im your Bestest buddy...
I feel soo loved..
Oh and your I like your full name dont cover it up..
I think its wonderful..
Thank you for trying to get readers for me..
It means alot..
Ill post a poem soon...
YOUR BESTEST BUDDY,
-Xavier- :D
P.S. I miss you!!!!!:flowers:

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Hello Guys...
How are yall???
I would like to say thank you to yall for supporting me...
Well...
Here is a Hp poem I wrote..
Hope ypu like it..
And just to tell you its not a happy poem..
#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#*#* #*#*#*#*#
Black Smoke
The Clock Bell Rang...
Ringing...
Ringing...
Loud...
And Heavy....
Scary.....
I was just sitting....
Then.
I was suddenly at the Town Hall..
But I wasnt alone...
Every person from our town...
Was here....
The Bell rang once more....
Everything went dark....
Then Lightning shot up in the air...
In those quick seconds...
Of blinding light....
I saw....
With every lightning shot...
A New dark hooded figure appeared...
Right in the middle of the street....
With a big bang...
The lightning once again struck...
Then..
Around my people of the town...
Every eletric,moving thing..
Stopped...
And A small piece of light shined....
Toward the people in mask.....
Some people yelled...
But I wasnt afraid at all...
The man in the middle said...
With a happy..content tone...,
"Your prime minister....
Is dead....
There are other people within your world..
Hiding...
And Un-discovered...
There are wizards...
Magic exsist....
Dont deny it...
You filthy Muggles...
As yall live Unharmed...
And untouched....
Something has brought up...
There is.
A war...
You see...
I.
And my Fellow DeathEaters...
Are loyal to A Person...
With great power not even a regular wizard has...
He soon shall have the wizarding world in his grasp..
And by the looks of it...
You need someone to lead...
And take the postition of being your Prime Minister....
Lord Voldemort...
Will now be your leader...
If you break any rules...
The punishment..
Is Death.
Does anyone have any objections?"
'No one spoke up....
I was shocked....
I couldnt believe wizards exsisted...
But I belived this person named
Lord Voldemort...
Couldnt be nice....
Bad things were happening to the other wizards....
Us...
I think the correct term...
As the wizards called us..
Muggles?
We needed to make a stand...'
The Deatheater nodded...
As no one seemed to be objecting...
And said,
"Wise choice muggles...
I shall see that Our..
Lord Voldemort doesnt kill yall...
Not until for another week...
Goodbye."
Lightning flashed once more....
When I opened my eyes...
The sun shined once more....
And the so called,
"DeathEaters.."
Were gone...
And the electricity and every moving thing...
Worked again...
Then.
"What the Hell???!!!
How did I end up back here??!!!"
I was back in my house..
sitting....
A war between us humans..
And Dark wizards is going to begin...
to be continued
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Ok let me explain...
There is going to be four long poems....
This is the first poem..
But I ended it short..
Because this poem is long...
And I want to leave the rest of this first out of four long poems...
As a cliffhanger...
Well I hoped you liked it so far...
And trust me...
THERE IS ALOT MORE TO COME
I just need a few more new readers...
Your friend,
Xavier

Boy Wonder 07-25-2009 12:59 PM

Awesome Duuuude!!!!

JeshieRAWR 07-25-2009 10:22 PM

Xavier!!!
That was amazing like always!! ^_^
Can't wait for the next three!!! :D
Your bestest buddy ;) ,
Jessica :D

dracos.girl 07-25-2009 11:42 PM

Hey Xavier! I'm not much for poems. but these are great! I especially liked the Snape and Lily one :) Great job! :yes:


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