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07-29-2009, 04:09 AM
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| Comet aka FredK/O Fred's Last Laugh Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nynevah de Wynter | One post at a time, Teddy dear, one post at a time... Ottery's Editor-In-Chief Resident Heartbreaker Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Author's Note: It's Pat Benatar, Kellybear  C'mon hit me with your best shot   You know, it's really a good thing I love you, or I'd be taking aim right now...or hostages *eyes Teddy* Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Neways kiddies, I've been working like a horse, and here you have them. I apologize for any typos, feel free to point them out  I will fix them.  Just remember, you asked for it. And you wanted me to be specific.  Actually, the update was great, all the mistakes were purely grammatical. Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Remember this is still HBP and someone please remind me this is steampunk  :choochoo: Remember, this is steampunk Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole “And you say that life has things this strong,
I can recount to you how a flame is from inside,
I can tell you how much fire weighs,
And it’s just that loving in solitude,
Is like a hole without a bottom,
Where not even God exists …”
Alejandro Sanz, “To the first person” trans. Ottery St. Catchpole with apologies to the author  Seriously, I love Alejandro Sanz. That is soooo beautiful... Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole The thunder crackled in the sky, the rain pouring like sheets of tears and sorrow, as a red car drove around the cliff, the ocean waves slapping against the shore, and on a cliff rising high above the wild waters in the darkness, the old castle stood against the force of elements unleashed on that dark night. The part I highlighted is really the main grammatical error. I'm pretty sure that sentence fragment, in order to be correct, has to refer back to the car. I know you love long sentences but this one really needs to be two or more to work. Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole “You don’t have to visit with him,” the girl remarked. I could go disguised as you. You’re too valuable …” Just a missing quotation mark here. Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole “I don’t bargain with people’s lives,” the older wizard replied coldly, dropping any semblance of cordiality as if it were some disgusting thing he did not want soiling his blackened hand.  Eep, I love you. I l♥ve the imagery there. Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole It was an impossibly high ceiling chamber, a large fireplace, with the help of magic, warmed the large space filled by the small table they were sitting at. All around them large wizard tapestries depicting knights fighting dragons, and wizards fighting muggle oppression, and the Bolshevik revolution, suits of armor in between the tapestries and large rugs on the floor, but otherwise an empty room. Most of the errors here are of tense, except where highlighted. The first, I think needs an "ed" and the second really needs to be a separate sentence. Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole “Be that as it may be, we are united against a common foe, are we not?” the old wizard didn’t nod and the man took his silence as assent, “So, why not ally our considerable resources to putting a stop to this usurper, this pretender.”
“Because then I would be giving you a foot in the door, so to speak, into the Order and the proper wizarding world. I won’t allow that, unless you meet my concessions.”
“Again you harp on that old man. This is a war we’re in, you can’t seriously …”
“No killing. No stealing. No …”
“What are you the Pope? Some kind of Christian conservative?”
“What I am is ever hopeful that you might come back into the fold,” Dumbledore replied, taking another sip of his tea.
“After what the Death Eaters did to … you have … do you have any idea …?” the man gripped the table and taking deep breaths. “I’m sorry, but …”
“I was there Sebastian. And I tell you, you’ve nothing to gain from lowering yourself to their tactics, and fighting them with their own dark magic.”
“I do not condone the use of dark magic except …”
“As a means to an end. And how much different is that from the wizards we’re trying to fight?” The headmaster retorted gently placing his cup on the saucer on the table and helping himself to a biscuit.
“We’ve argued these philosophies for a long time old man,” the stranger said looking away.
“For a very long time, Sebastian, but I remain …”
“I know. Ever hopeful,” the man laughed a little, the sarcasm as clear as Dumbledore‘s stance. ♥  I love the whole dialog here.
Oh, and Teddy, don't tempt me love, you know how much I love taking a dare...
Otty, I will comment on the second update tomorrow. I must go to bed.
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07-29-2009, 11:35 AM
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Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Lari (haven't seen you in ages love ♥ my next chapter is for you, but only if it doesn't suck) Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Author's Note:
As promised, these posts are lovingly dedicated to Lari.  But only if they don't suck.  I know! I mished you! And Kelly too *pokes her*
OMG! *faints* Yay! Of course they won't suck! Otty fics never suck!  Tonks!!!! Dumbledore!!! I love it already Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole “Just the same, if you’re not out in an hour I’m popping in and blasting everything until I find you,” the girl replied with less gusto than she would have wanted. Her words seemed less powerful and she herself seemed distracted. This is so Tonks. I love it. Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole “We’ve argued these philosophies for a long time old man,” the stranger said looking away.
“For a very long time, Sebastian, but I remain …”
“I know. Ever hopeful,” the man laughed a little, the sarcasm as clear as Dumbledore‘s stance. I really love this conversation  Especially Dumbledore's attitude. Sebastian seems really cool...Dumbledore's equal in a way o_O.
OMG! I love the banner...  Yay! Ron's the main character?  *fangirls* Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Ron believed girls to normally be mad.  Yay! I love the narrative at the beginning of the post  It has a really playful tone. Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Ron Weasley didn’t know why exactly that was, they were always arguing about everything. But the odd thing was, it was infinitely more pleasant to argue with Hermione about anything than it was to spend time having anyone agree with everything he said. Too cute for words
Snoozlefoo...nice touch Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole “One of the drawbacks of being a werewolf,” the boy smiled without the slightest sign of being ashamed. Teehee!  I've got to say, your original characters are way too interesting. *examines them with a magnifying glass* Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole The boy looked at Harry curiously, “I told you. My name is Nicholas Black. I’m Sirius Black’s son.” HOLY EARS! Sirius has a son? Who doesn't seem to be that phased about his Dad dying? Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole The voice on the other end of the phone crackling and mysterious simply said, “They’ve caught him. The Hong Kong triads have him. They wish to side with Lord Voldemort in the war. If you don’t act soon, the boy’s dead. Consider this a friendly nudge.” Scratch that question about the Triads. I get it now  Tres scary, though  Oh I mean very...teehee! Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole It was only the finely crafted and well thought out traps that he liked to play. He liked a challenging adversary.  Angel reminds me of "L" or "Near" from Death Note. I like him Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole “Because Love’s funny. Save him or don’t. I’ve done my part.” Click. The mysterious caller's in love with Teddy?
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07-29-2009, 08:34 PM
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| Pogrebin
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| urine trouble | Pat's Strong Confident Other Half | Pees Like a Champion Unicorn Racehorse OMG! Nicholas Black?! Sirius Black's son?! Wow! What a twist of events! I loved it! Tonks is so funny! The way she said she's going to blast everything to find Dumbledore! That's so Tonks! Dumbledore was cool as well! Loved the way he talked back to Sebastian! I wonder who the caller was? Hmmm... And this caller loves Teddy? Wow! Great post! Can't wait for more! |
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07-31-2009, 05:47 PM
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| Blast-Ended Skrewt
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| The Sweetest Thing Lissy De Vil
Oh how I love stopping in for three posts!
I just love how you write Dumbledore. If I tried to quote I would be quoting the whole update. Excellent and I can't wait for more details on Sebastian. Quote:
Next chapter is for Si & Lissylove cuz they remind me of Abra Abra Cadabra ... I want to reach out and grab ya
*squee* I heat up, I cant cool down
You got me spinnin
round and round
round and round and round it goes
Where it stops nobody knows
I love how Ron is pondering Hermione and Luna. I can't wait to see where the ships go! Quote:
It was obvious that the girls were madly in love, either with boys or the idea of love, but the love part was easily lost given the fact that Ron believed girls to normally be mad.
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“If I wanted you dead, you would be,” the boy standing there smiled. He was a handsome boy, blonde hair, blue eyes, and a wicked grin. To Ron’s way of thinking this was the kind of guy that he and all the regular boys hated, cocky, smart, and just plain annoying, someone who woke up in the morning and didn’t have to care if he impressed anyone because he simply did it just by being.
I like him already, but of course I can't help it. Quote:
“I’m sorry Harry, but Sirius is dead,” the brown haired boy remarked, putting a hand on the other boy’s shoulder.
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The boy looked at Harry curiously, “I told you. My name is Nicholas Black. I’m Sirius Black’s son.”
Excellent! Quote:
As the eternal chess game of life played on, one character revealed himself meanwhile, another still hid in shadows, on the great continent in the beautiful city of Paris an old style muggle phone rang. The boy left off eating the chocolate covered crystallized pineapples. The box was heart shaped and the note on it read, “Relish your victory, for now. Love, Ottery St.”
Intrigue!
And of course I need more. *greedy* Quote:
Author's End Notes: Isabella is being a brat so ... *sighs* she's an easy lover, get a hold on you believe it, like no other, before you know it you'll be on your knees the 80's pwn this fic. See you guys in a while ... keep cool or warm depending on your half of the hemisphere, no? Back laterz.
My toddler just nodded off on my lap, so I needs be getting up. I loved the updates and look forward greatly to your return.  and *loves*
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08-01-2009, 12:46 AM
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| Comet aka FredK/O Fred's Last Laugh Puffskein
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Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole
♥♥ In all girls were too confusing, mostly mad creatures to be admired from a distance. Of late however, he had noticed they were more interesting to admire from up close.♥♥
♥♥ But the odd thing was, it was infinitely more pleasant to argue with Hermione about anything than it was to spend time having anyone agree with everything he said.♥♥
♥♥ “You know you’re naked?” Luna remarked and Ron blushed as he noticed the boy was standing undressed in front of them.♥♥ ♥ *ignores the non-werewolf-like werewolf behavior* I could not find anything aside from a few comma errors and those were not worth mentioning. Everything else was pure love, especially the quotes above
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08-01-2009, 01:46 AM
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|   Resident Movie Critic Sphinx
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Ottery boo I have ALWAYS loved how descriptive you get when you write and you have not failed me this time. I love the way you write Dumbledore. GUHHH. Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Next chapter is for Si & Lissylove cuz they remind me of  Abra Abra Cadabra ... I want to reach out and grab ya  AWWW YAY ILOVEYOU Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole that is one awesome picture love Quote:
It was in the lake in front of the house where late nights, Ron and his brothers and friends would go skinny dipping. Lake Weasley they called it, and on hot summer nights that is where the boys cooled off, from the weather and their hormones.
Skinny dipping eh?
I'd so do that with them Quote:
Ron Weasley like Ottery was of the always-late-to-the-party party, and neither had realized quite what had happened to the girl’s around them. It was obvious that the girls were madly in love, either with boys or the idea of love, but the love part was easily lost given the fact that Ron believed girls to normally be mad. Something we can excuse our hero for because he had been raised in a household full of boys.
Mmmm I love that Ron thinks girls are mad for being in love. The way you wrote him here kind of reminds me of my current boy because he thought love was a silly thing. That is until he met me Quote:
There was no denying they were both intelligent, but Hermione seemed to have a never ending romance with books and the library, and Luna always seemed lost in thought, and whenever she said something it surprised Ron. Should he laugh, or was it something Luna had meant seriously? In all girls were too confusing, mostly mad creatures to be admired from a distance. Of late however, he had noticed they were more interesting to admire from up close.
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“Thinking about love? It is a full moon night, you know. In the olden days people used to believe that full moons would drive people crazy,” the girl sat next to him on the log.
I love Luna. Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Harry Potter blinked. The boy said he was Nicholas Black. WAIT WHAT. Quote:
The boy looked at Harry curiously, “I told you. My name is Nicholas Black. I’m Sirius Black’s son.”
AGAIN WHAT!? Quote:
“Because Love’s funny. Save him or don’t. I’ve done my part.”
aye that it is Quote: Author's End Notes: Isabella is being a brat so ... *sighs*  she's an easy lover, get a hold on you believe it, like no other, before you know it you'll be on your knees  the 80's pwn this fic. See you guys in a while ... keep cool or warm depending on your half of the hemisphere, no?  Back laterz.
stay safe <33333333
can't wait to read more
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08-03-2009, 06:37 PM
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| Mooncalf
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Tilly C. Richards First Year | Bluejay | Potatopop! | SRS - Stupid Ravenclaw Syndrome NEW READER! I LOVE THIS STORY!
IT'S FANTASTIC!
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08-05-2009, 04:41 AM
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08-08-2009, 04:30 PM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Ottery St. Catchpole Gryffindor Third Year | Thank you all for reading, no I haven't abandoned this fic. *Loves* Paris & Kellybear r luv :Read Otty 's fics:Gone With the Wind:I♥Rupert
Got internet for a few minutes so I thought I'd sneak in ...
Neways, I've written ten pages on this story, more ... yeah, but it needs to be beta'd, hopefully soon. I will be back, oh, and Ali's birthday is on the 18th so ...  spam his inbox with birthday wishes on that day, yo!
And I will probably be posting the next update in this post cuz I don't wanna get in trouble for spamming so
I'm listening to "Details in the fabric" by Jason Mraz, go youtube it kids ... *sniffles*
Why can't life ever be easy? Why must we suffer? Why are the people we love often the cause of the greatest pain in our hearts?  those are themes of this story ... yeah, and have nothing to do with how I feel right now ... yeah, this story.
Back soon, HERE, with a post. ♥ peace out kids! EDIT 1: Told you all to keep an eye on this post ...
Today's moment of Zen:
We forge our happiness today through the sorrows of our past mistakes ... EDIT 2:The revenge of the Edit Seriously pay attention ... LOL R/L yay!  Maybe ... I also ship L/D & D/G so ... I'm not saying so stop asking ...
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08-11-2009, 10:55 PM
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| Comet aka FredK/O Fred's Last Laugh Puffskein
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nynevah de Wynter | Ottery's Editor-In-Chief Resident Heartbreaker
*tries to send you subliminal messages about R/L or N/L* Ship them...shiiiip them...*cue spooky sci-fi music*
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08-12-2009, 12:50 AM
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Not Neville and Luna ship! Nooooooooo!
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08-15-2009, 10:24 AM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Ottery St. Catchpole Gryffindor Third Year | I opted out of editing that last post because it wouldn't show up as an update ... Paris & Kellybear r luv :Read Otty 's fics:Gone With the Wind:I♥Rupert A/N: This is STILL not beta'd so ... read at your own risk. I swear I should just ask Katiebell to come in here and edit my posts but she's too busy so ... I really should e-mail her ...
Neways, whatever, my grammar doesn't suck that bad. You're reading this aren't you? Oh stop cringing already ... kiddies, you know the rules, post any corrections you'd like and here's more story. I've been gone too long.
-------------------------------------------------- Holdin' on,
The days drag on
Stupid girl
I should've known, I should've known
That I'm not a princess
This ain't a fairytale
I'm not the one you'll sweep off her feet
Lead her up the stairwell A/N: If you don't listen to Taylor Swift, you should! Chapter: Love is a battlefield
O: Lovingly dedicated to Si & Lissy♥love ‘cuz they’re old friends … I guess that would make them Old School, no?
T: *fires the cannons* and thanks Lari, for inspiring Otty to write me a romance 
Regret is an emotion made of equal parts sorrow, stupidity, and other ingredients that escape me at the moment, and while the exact recipe did not pop into Ottery’s head at the time; the dark haired boy felt the sad pangs of it in his heart. His eyes wandered over the cell he was trapped in, dank and dark, the rats were his only company, thankfully they were well read and traveled and not your garden variety dull rats, but still, he was bound in chains and not ropes so they could do little to help him escape.
At the moment, however, he was all alone, his rodent companions fetching what information they could for him. This left Ottery sitting alone in a darkened room, not the first time he had found himself in just such a predicament, lost in thoughts of girls in white dresses running through fields of sunflowers.
“You’ll never catch me Otty,” the little girl laughingly teased, her voice like spring and joy dancing.
“Who said I wanted to catch you, anyway?” the dark haired boy complained grumpily, crossing his arms and sitting on the tree stump.
“Oh don’t be like that Otty,” Hermione complained. “It’s Easter and you volunteered to be the bunny.”
“Yeah, Otty, and besides,” Ginny teased, “It can’t be Easter without a bunny hop chase.”
Ron smiled at his friend, dressed as he was in a bunny suit, while the twins and Harry tried hard not to laugh. Mrs. Weasley walked up to the boy and straightened his bow tie, and whispered, “Oh, don’t you mind them, Ottery dear. They’re just jealous because you’re the best bunny we’ve ever had, dear.”
Ottery could remember the year the twins had played rabbit, pelting everyone with rotten eggs, hiding colored eggs that exploded when you found them, and using magic during the bunny hop chase (which was a Weasley tradition) to tie everyone up in brightly colored streamers and stealing their candy.
The boy was lost in happier days. Ottery wondered what Ron was doing just then, and if he’d ever see another Easter at the Burrow. Somehow he always managed to land in trouble, and by some remote chance he always escaped with his skin intact. This time, however, Teddy was lost somewhere completely oblivious to what Ottery was doing, The Order of the Phoenix was busy with Lord Voldemort’s return, and he couldn’t count on his other friends, because they were all busy saving the world, or plotting to take it over.
Ottery ignored the slow drip of water preferring to lose himself in another memory. This time it was a beautiful tea party, everyone dressed in white, pastels or brightly colored robes to celebrate the coming of summer, and the Burrow had been enchanted so that it wasn’t raining there though all the counties around where swamped in typical late spring downpours. Ottery sighed and handed two eggs to Hedwig with orders to drop them on the twins, while he set his sights on Ron who sitting across from him at the breakfast table outside the burrow. For, once again finding themselves with far too many guests and not enough room in the kitchen, the Weasleys had opted to have all their meals outside.
A bowl of strawberries flew across the table past Ottery, followed by another filled with cream and still another with sugar. Still, he sat there head in hands just watching Ron happily wolfing down his stack of blueberry waffles, which Ottery had especially made for him. Ottery fancied himself a bit of a chef in the making. Next to Ron, Harry talked with Ginny, who was sitting next to the dark haired boy, completely oblivious to the fact that her sweet charms were working their magic on him. To Harry’s mind Ginny had become this completely interesting girl now that she actually talked.
The days could always be counted as being happy with the Weasleys at the burrow, or with Harry and the gang when they were off on a summer adventure or another. Here the boy started to reminisce about that time their fourth year when they’d gone to Paris chasing after that werewolf they had believed to be in possession of Dumbledore’s pants.
“Hey, Otty, look! I can see your chateau from up here,” Ron remarked.
Ottery simply smiled. It was nice, standing next to Ron on the Eiffel tower, and at night no less, the whole world seemed to sparkle beneath them, a mirror to the starry sky above them. They could see a large, steam powered zeppelin in the distance, and a long steam train winding through the city.
“Funny isn’t it, how all of this was for nothing though,” Ron remarked.
“What do you mean, Ron?” Ottery asked.
“Well, we were chasing that bloke because we thought he’d stolen Dumbledore’s pants, but … Dumbledore’s a wizard so … of course he doesn’t wear pants, he wears robes.”
Ottery just smiled and pounced on Ron in a playful way. It was difficult not to love the boy just for being himself.
Then there was their adventure in India, Hermione and Ottery were kissing, hoping to disguise themselves from the local authorities who were searching for a party of rambunctious, and obnoxious American tourists (which meant Teddy & Otty) and their British companions (which meant the rest of the Hogwarts gang).
“Ottery you dolt!” Hermione exclaimed, slapping the boy across the face. It was then the dark haired boy was awakened from his memories by the sound of the door opening, a shaft of hard light piercing the darkness, blinding him, and a fleeting figure entered the room too quickly. The door shut and all was darkness again.
“ Lumos,” and the room was alight, the boy closed his eyes. As they adjusted to the light he ventured a look and he saw her standing there. All long black hair under a beret, she winked, and gave him a smile before walking over to him. The boy flinched, as she took out her wand. Torture was never a pleasant thing, and he still hadn’t talked, or rather he had talked endlessly for the sake of not saying anything important. “ Alohamora.”
The shackles opened and the boy fell to the floor in a slump. He knew some silent spells, but couldn’t think of one to use now, as if he were under the spell of the confundus charm.
“Would you like something to eat? You need to keep your strength up,” the young woman said, as she made a short table appear out of thin air and on it sat a plate full of sandwiches and a goblet with wine. The boy made no move to take any of it, did not even rub his aching wrist but merely sat there looking up at her. He recognized her. “Your friends will be here to rescue you soon. You’re going to need your strength then.”
“You’re …”
She put a finger to her lips, winked again and smiled.
“Teddy?” He asked, as he grabbed the goblet, thirsty as he was after days of being without water.
“No.”
“Then who …”
“You must have friends in high places, love. Because there’s an Angel in the city.”
At those words, Ottery spit out his drink and stared at the girl in disbelief. ♥ End Note: So we end with a spit take ... inspired by Sam and Carly from iCarly, you all should watch that show too, I think Freddie is cute ... and Spencer's a riot. LOL
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Reason: Snuck it in there when you weren't lookin' LOL :P
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The feeling of love is happiness!
You were not in pain, you were not in pain!
Love is the reason for your sadness!
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Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole His eyes wandered over the cell he was trapped in, dank and dark, the rats were his only company, thankfully they were well read and traveled and not your garden variety dull rats, but still, he was bound in chains and not ropes so they could do little to help him escape.  Those are some interesting rats Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Ron smiled at his friend, dressed as he was in a bunny suit, while the twins and Harry tried hard not to laugh.  TOO CUTE! Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole This time, however, Teddy was lost somewhere completely oblivious to what Ottery was doing, The Order of the Phoenix was busy with Lord Voldemort’s return, and he couldn’t count on his other friends, because they were all busy saving the world, or plotting to take it over. Oh, gosh! Otty has evil friends? Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole To Harry’s mind Ginny had become this completely interesting girl now that she actually talked.  Too true...that line works for lots of people too Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole Hermione and Ottery were kissing
“Ottery you dolt!” Hermione exclaimed, slapping the boy across the face.  What no H/R ship? Though anything with Ots is fun to read Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole “You must have friends in high places, love. Because there’s an Angel in the city.”
At those words, Ottery spit out his drink and stared at the girl in disbelief. Ooooooooh! Angel sounds so coooooool! Quote:
Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole ♥ End Note: So we end with a spit take ... inspired by Sam and Carly from iCarly, you all should watch that show too, I think Freddie is cute ... and Spencer's a riot. LOL iCarly does rock so does Freddie |
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| urine trouble | Pat's Strong Confident Other Half | Pees Like a Champion Unicorn Racehorse Hahaha! Their adventures were so funny! I couldn't help laughing at that! And the bunny chase! Especially the part when Fred and George were bunnies! Easter must be really interesting at the Weasley's! Wonder who that girl is! Great post! Loved it! Can't wait for more!
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So I'm finally caught up! I realised how slowwww of a reader I've become XD I mean, wow. I had it with me and read it during the car ride today, and I kept laughing when it came to the last update. It was pretty much pure Otty-Brilliance, in it's truest form. I loveddddddddd this segment: Quote:
“Well, we were chasing that bloke because we thought he’d stolen Dumbledore’s pants, but … Dumbledore’s a wizard so … of course he doesn’t wear pants, he wears robes.”
Ottery just smiled and pounced on Ron in a playful way. It was difficult not to love the boy just for being himself.
Then there was their adventure in India, Hermione and Ottery were kissing, hoping to disguise themselves from the local authorities who were searching for a party of rambunctious, and obnoxious American tourists (which meant Teddy & Otty) and their British companions (which meant the rest of the Hogwarts gang).
“Ottery you dolt!” Hermione exclaimed, slapping the boy across the face. It was then the dark haired boy was awakened from his memories by the sound of the door opening, a shaft of hard light piercing the darkness, blinding him, and a fleeting figure entered the room too quickly. The door shut and all was darkness again.
The way you went from humour to reality was ace.
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08-16-2009, 12:59 AM
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Originally Posted by Myh Ottsy “Well, we were chasing that bloke because we thought he’d stolen Dumbledore’s pants, but … Dumbledore’s a wizard so … of course he doesn’t wear pants, he wears robes.” 
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| The Sweetest Thing Lissy De Vil OLD SCHOOL!
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I just got in to read, had work over the weekend. I don't know if I told ya, Otts but the meanies there took away internet.  So I don't do much here on SS on work weekends.
Anyway! What a lovely Monday surprise! Quote:
O: Lovingly dedicated to Si & Lissy♥love ‘cuz they’re old friends … I guess that would make them Old School, no?
T: *fires the cannons* and thanks Lari, for inspiring Otty to write me a romance
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Regret is an emotion made of equal parts sorrow, stupidity, and other ingredients that escape me at the moment, and while the exact recipe did not pop into Ottery’s head at the time; the dark haired boy felt the sad pangs of it in his heart. His eyes wandered over the cell he was trapped in, dank and dark, the rats were his only company, thankfully they were well read and traveled and not your garden variety dull rats, but still, he was bound in chains and not ropes so they could do little to help him escape.
I started off  so true and well said and ended with a  on this paragraph. I love it. Quote:
“Oh, don’t you mind them, Ottery dear. They’re just jealous because you’re the best bunny we’ve ever had, dear.”
Oh, I'm going to have to remember that you were the best bunny ever, Otts. Quote:
The Order of the Phoenix was busy with Lord Voldemort’s return, and he couldn’t count on his other friends, because they were all busy saving the world, or plotting to take it over.
Interesting variety in friends. Quote:
“Well, we were chasing that bloke because we thought he’d stolen Dumbledore’s pants, but … Dumbledore’s a wizard so … of course he doesn’t wear pants, he wears robes.”
Yeah, I loved this line too. Quote:
Then there was their adventure in India, Hermione and Ottery were kissing, hoping to disguise themselves from the local authorities who were searching for a party of rambunctious, and obnoxious American tourists (which meant Teddy & Otty) and their British companions (which meant the rest of the Hogwarts gang).
I love how you and Teddy can be a "party" all on your own. Quote:
“You must have friends in high places, love. Because there’s an Angel in the city.”
At those words, Ottery spit out his drink and stared at the girl in disbelief.
You always leave me wanting to know more!
Loved the update! Quote:
End Note: So we end with a spit take ... inspired by Sam and Carly from iCarly, you all should watch that show too, I think Freddie is cute ... and Spencer's a riot. LOL
Spit take! Yes, we watch that show here!  I agree, Freddie is adorable. Silly Carly. Spencer steals the show for me.
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Ohhhh Such an awesome update!! I love it Ottery!!! Keep up the amazing work!!
And Heyyyy I'm Old school too!!!
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Thank you all for sticking with my story, even if my story sticks to the roof of your mouth like peanut butter ... you know ... it gets annoying and what not ... SS looks so much better on Safari, I should try goggle chrome ...
To begin with I'd like to rectify a mistake on my part, because *Flower* is indeed certified Old School  she's the PT Princess, and other assorted aliases ... she has to keep changing them because she's a baseball fan and you have to be careful of football fans they get out of hand *eyes Teddy warily* yes Mexico won, we pwn! *fires the cannons*
Therefore it is to *Flower* a.k.a. I liked that cute baseball guy, girl  and Allucha because it is his birthday that I dedicate the following updates. But first, replies, then *Teddy plays mysterious music* ... a much needed recap because even though the term hasn't started a lot has happened ... Lari, uhm, Freddie is mine ... *glomps* and Sam's. I totally ship them together ...  I think it's cute Freddie like Carly but ... nah. I loved your music too ... thanks for reading ... you're certified Old School! *fires the cannons* hermionesclone, thank you for reading my fic, I love new readers. I'm glad you liked the Fred and George bunnies, I just love bunnies in general but ... Allucha, Happy Birthday agent A, don't worry about reading everyday I only post once in a great while LOL and thank you for all the compliments on my writing, I hope I am getting better, I've been doing it for a while. SenoritaMaxie, uhm, did you just start a new fic? Seriously, you're addicted. LOL I just started reading your other one about Death? Why can't I remember titles? Gah! Lissylove you're the bestest *runningtackleglomps* and I am the bunny ... when I'm not the otter  And Teddy and I really are our own party ...  with fireworks and everything *Teddy fires the cannons at Otty but misses and takes out the Bermuda triangle* I hope nobody needed that. Kellybear, Si, Thumper, X-girl, Lily Lupin, LilyLunaGinnyPotter, HannahLongbottom and the rest of y'all, we miss you ... *sniffles* come on back now y'hear? Quick RECAP (For those of you who, like Otty, are perpetually late to the party):
Our story finds our intrepid heroine Hermione in the throes of a book on subversive Hogwarts history (which may or may not later come into play). Harry for his part was in the middle of a car chase with Sirius Black his godfather, chasing after some Death Eaters. Their merry chase led them to a neighborhood and a street fight which introduced us to the character of Nicholas Black, Sirius Black's son? (I'm not telling  ).
Next, we find Ottery St. Catchpole prisoner of Rodolphus LeStrange in Hong Kong of all places. Lord Voldemort it seems is planning an alliance with the Chinese Magical Triads. Tonks escorts Professor Dumbledore to see a new face in the magical world, a very dangerous face, an old friend ... Sebastian Shaw. They part ways, Dumbledore refusing to accept Sebastian's help because his army employs the same evil tactics that the Death Eaters do.
As if that wasn't enough action to keep you all awake at nights wondering how Ottery's shorts are a horcrux, then I don't how you all sleep at nights? *realizes that sentence makes no sense* Teddy will fire the cannons at anyone who objects. You have been warned.
Meanwhile back at the Burrow, Ron is mooning about love, but for whom? It's too early to tell. When Luna pops up looking for snoozlefoos and a naked werewolf pops up looking for trouble.  Harry confronts Nicholas about his identity, and somewhere in Paris a cute boy receives a mysterious phone call about saving an old ... hmm ... (friend? enemy? playful adversary? playful friend?) No, I'm not telling you that either
As if all that wasn't more plot than most episodes of Hannah Montana, we turn our eyes back to Ottery who receives a late night dinner guest in his cell, a girl he knows, but who mysteriously stops him from uttering her name before we can learn it. Dang you Ottery, and dang your pov!
And now on Ottery's Human Nature ... *the hair on the back of Otty's neck is all a tingle* Uh, uh, uh, more action and adventure just you watch.
Chapter: Spinner’s End
“Do you think it wise to come here, Dumbledore? They are watching me, as you well know,” Professor Snape whispered quietly and silkily.
“Oh, I don’t worry about the muggles. I took every precaution,” the headmaster replied twirling around the small study in his muggle disguise, a pair of plaid red and white pants, a purple shirt, yellow vest, and bright almost blindingly so, pink jacket.
“I meant the others,” Snape remarked pulling up his shirt sleeve.
Dumbledore smiled, hands behind his back. He winked.
“I sent Wormtail on a busy errand.”
“That’s very well, it’s best he doesn’t know that I was here, in any event,” Dumbledore stood there smiling at Severus who asked him to sit and invited him to tea, sadly there was nothing in his home like a sweet biscuit, and Dumbledore did not much care for saltines so the headmaster contented himself with just lemon tea.
“Headmaster, you do know about the vow I had to take. Other Death Eaters could just drop in unannounced at any time.”
“To their peril." Dumbledore replied, looking at his Potions Master from above his glasses. "What could be more normal than the headmaster coming to visit one of his professors so close to the end of last term, especially when I’m here to inform you that you’re to take over the Defense against the Dark Arts post?”
Professor Snape stood dumbfounded.
Struck by the news, the Potions Master did not know what to say or do, but merely stood, disbelievingly. Dumbledore never played jokes with him, yes, the headmaster was a funny man but even Dumbledore knew better than to try jesting with Severus Snape, though there had been occasions when Snape thought the professor had been less than serious with him.
The Potions Master waited for the punch line, but none ever came.
“If all goes as I’ve planned, and I’m absolutely sure it won’t,” Professor Dumbledore continued, “I can get Horace Slughorn to the position of Potions Master and you can then take the vacant defense position.” Dumbledore stood up and put his hand on Severus’ shoulder. “There are many things I am entrusting to you my friend. I do not doubt, when the time comes, that you will not fail me.”
Severus looked at Dumbledore’s face, the headmaster’s eyes sparkled with joy in spite of the care and worry present there, and his lips wore that kind smile Severus had first seen when he walked through the gates of the school his first year at Hogwarts.
Professor Snape’s face as always remained impassive, his usual expression of derisive boredom present. In spite of it, he managed to say, “Thank you headmaster. I look forward to serving you to the best of my abilities.”
Dumbledore nodded knowingly, "Serving the school and the students, as well as you've always done, Severus." Dumbledore finished his tea in one gulp and looked up in time to see a shadow disappearing behind the window sill outside. It was just his imagination surely, Severus would have had the house warded against eavesdroppers. “Well that’s all the time I have I’m afraid. I have to go pick up Harry Potter, he’ll be staying with me until term begins.”
Snape was shocked at that bit of news as well. Professor Dumbledore for his part, merely commented on the interesting books that made up Professor Snape’s large library/study. The Potions Master really did have a tiny house, obviously, even wizarding world school teachers did not earn much. Author's End Note: Next ... *gigglesfiresthecannonsbyaccident* Teddy! Only he's not a bear, but everything else is still the same ...
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Thank you all for sticking with my story, even if my story sticks to the roof of your mouth like peanut butter ... you know ... it gets annoying and what not ...
SS looks so much better on Safari, I should try goggle chrome ...
But I like peanut butter! It's all nummy.  And oooh, you're making me want to get safari. Quote:
Happy Birthday agent A, don't worry about reading everyday I only post once in a great while LOL and thank you for all the compliments on my writing, I hope I am getting better, I've been doing it for a while.
Why thank you Foxtrot. And you know what, as amazingly surprising as it is (but only cause you began as superb!!!) I think you're getting better. Quote:
Chinese Magical Triads
Bwahaha I thought it was that triads! Woo! Quote:
As if that wasn't enough action to keep you all awake at nights wondering how Ottery's shorts are a horcrux, then I don't how you all sleep at nights? *realizes that sentence makes no sense* Teddy will fire the cannons at anyone who objects. You have been warned.
Oh gosh, lmfao. Wow, dude. Seriously. *bows*
And.... zomg, you make that tea cozy look SO much better. Quote:
“Oh, I don’t worry about the muggles. I took every precaution,” the headmaster replied twirling around the small study in his muggle disguise, a pair of plaid red and white pants, a purple shirt, yellow vest, and bright almost blindingly so, pink jacket.
Wizards...
But... without quoting the whole post. I'm gonna say. Whoa. I liked that, it was a nice little insight onto a Dumbledore&Snape moment. Probably why I loved the end of DH so much, Snape's such an interesting not-evil!  character.
And =O TEDDY!
Lovin' this, Sir Foxtrot. And be here I shall when I can. *stalks*
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08-19-2009, 12:56 AM
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Originally Posted by OtterySt.Catchpole SS looks so much better on Safari, I should try goggle chrome ...
To begin with I'd like to rectify a mistake on my part, because *Flower* is indeed certified Old School  she's the PT Princess, and other assorted aliases ... she has to keep changing them because she's a baseball fan and you have to be careful of football fans they get out of hand *eyes Teddy warily* yes Mexico won, we pwn! *fires the cannons*
Therefore it is to *Flower* a.k.a. I liked that cute baseball guy, girl  and Allucha because it is his birthday that I dedicate the following updates. But first, replies, then *Teddy plays mysterious music* ... a much needed recap because even though the term hasn't started a lot has happened ... YAY!!!!!  I'm old school!!! Otty!! I have missed you!! and Yes! I still am PT Princess Thea,ohhh and.. The Thugs say hi!! *waves* And yes you have to watch out for us baseball fans..
But I got married.. so I don't love the Baseball guy anymore!!
So now I'm an adorable Skunk from the movie Bambi!! SS looks pretty good on google chrome!! Quote:
“Oh, I don’t worry about the muggles. I took every precaution,” the headmaster replied twirling around the small study in his muggle disguise, a pair of plaid red and white pants, a purple shirt, yellow vest, and bright almost blindingly so, pink jacket.
EEE!!! Awesome outfit!!! Not inconspicuous at all!
Like in the old school Batman, where they went inconspicuously from the room... out the window!!
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The really cool part about you being in the same room is that I already pointed out what I saw, so yay!
Idk, I always thought Dumbledore was such a snappy dresser. I mean, his robes rock!
I love the whole Dumbledore/Snape moment. You write them so well.
OMG I am sooo Team Jacob...can I have Jacob for my birthday? Ok, so no  I shouldn't be greedy, given that I already have a superhot, shirtless supernatural guy.  Will jump out of my cake? Please??? Ottery's plot twists work better than any confundus charm.
So what can I do to get you to throw in a little R/L?
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| urine trouble | Pat's Strong Confident Other Half | Pees Like a Champion Unicorn Racehorse Haha! Dumbledore's outfit! Talk about blending in! I love his robes, though! Wow! The Dumbledore/Snape moment! You've portrayed them really well! Great post! Loved it! Can't wait for more!
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| Blast-Ended Skrewt
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| The Sweetest Thing Lissy De Vil Quote:
Thank you all for sticking with my story, even if my story sticks to the roof of your mouth like peanut butter ... you know ... it gets annoying and what not ...
I agree with Ali, I like peanut butter.  Eat it straight up on a spoon at times. Yum. Quote:
Lissylove you're the bestest *runningtackleglomps* and I am the bunny ... when I'm not the otter And Teddy and I really are our own party ... with fireworks and everything *Teddy fires the cannons at Otty but misses and takes out the Bermuda triangle* I hope nobody needed that.
*loves on the Otter-Bunny* Quote:
Our story finds our intrepid heroine Hermione in the throes of a book on subversive Hogwarts history (which may or may not later come into play).
Knowing you, Otts...
Love the recap.  Horcrux shorts indeed. Quote:
“That’s very well, it’s best he doesn’t know that I was here, in any event,” Dumbledore stood there smiling at Severus who asked him to sit and invited him to tea, sadly there was nothing in his home like a sweet biscuit, and Dumbledore did not much care for saltines so the headmaster contented himself with just lemon tea.
Now there is the problem. Get that man some sweets! Quote:
“If all goes as I’ve planned, and I’m absolutely sure it won’t,” Professor Dumbledore continued, “I can get Horace Slughorn to the position of Potions Master and you can then take the vacant defense position.” Dumbledore stood up and put his hand on Severus’ shoulder. “There are many things I am entrusting to you my friend. I do not doubt, when the time comes, that you will not fail me.”
Ugh. That foreshadowing gets me.  The whole scene was well done. I could totally see that conversation going down just like that. Great post Otts!
Oh and yes, I loved Dumbledore's disguise.
Looking forward to more! So many interesting plot lines to come... What will be nest?
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