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FireboltFlyer's Poems Hey, everyone! I hope you like my poems. They're about the world through my eyes. Tell me what you think. You look at me. I look away. I look down at my feet, Appearing to be so far. I feel the warm blood rise in my face. Thinking so hard about being perfect, My words string together, My voice distant, Unreal. I look to your face. You look down. Why must we go through this torment, Tearing, Ripping us apart. Icy cold runs through my body, Erasing my mind of all around me. I see you looking to your feet, Feeling the pain I know. I'm bleeding, Pleading, Screaming inside, Though you don't hear a thing. |
That's really good. From how I see the poem, I get how you feel. |
This is good.You are very talented please write more. |
Wow!! |
Great job! I hope you write more! Lol, must be better than mine, it got more reviews *winks* |
Thanks everyone! I'm really happy you liked it. Through you, All depression was lost. Pain was forgotten. I was no longer out of place. The warmth of your arms. Your sweet touch. The way you made me laugh, When I thought all joy was lost. You were my strength in my time of weakness, But now you are weak. I need you, But you need me more. I know you do. You are screaming with pain, As I am screaming with lonliness. You need to be held, And I need to hold you. |
This is good and I am like anti-love so if I like it,it must be good! :P |
Wow!! |
Great work! It's really touching. |
*sitting looking at poem, mouth opening wider with each line* I can't belive that ur 14, well yes i can cause ur my best friend, but any way........WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! good jod Firebolt!!! i give it a :up: |
Okay....I'm waiting..... :P |
he, he :P Thanks! What is it about you. Why do I feel this pain, Pulling me down into you, Robbing me of my sanity, Piercing the blood in my veins, Tying up my voice, Hoarse, Weak, Suffocating, Drowning. I ask myself, Am I to always feel this way. I am lost, Denied, Broken. |
*Sits there with mouth wide open looking very stupid* Wow!!! :o |
i like ur poem it has a lot of emotion and it is very good |
yeah, u can tell everythin ur feeling, and i think its even just great of you to put so many of ur feelings out in the open good job :) |
That is good.If you call I have some more poems I wrote last night. |
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I compete too but I don't get that feeling.That was very good.By the way did you write that after Escondido or another one? |
UGH, NO! I was talking about Disney Ice, you know, Glacial Falls? |
and life and I know how mean u get when ur cold, this is u "hey steph...." "WHAT?!?!" "I was just gonna say good luck" "THANK U" *eye poping out of socket like the guy on Daria. he eh, just teasing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Poet's Block! |
Then I'll step in and do one for you. (artists help each other out. Look at Mozart and Whatshisname) I love your work, but I always write lighter stuff: (enspired by the name of the post) I fly through the air with the gratest of ease, My hair gets messed up as it's tossed by the brease, I'm admired and loved by all of my peers, Potions master Snape is the least of my fears, The guys envey and hate me and swear I will pay, 'Cause their loves I have stolen away! P.S. tHis is a parody of that (old) poem "The man on the flying trapees" |
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