Whaaaat? Leaving it like this? You caaaan't!

Brilliant. I love this last part, how you start each section with the same statement and show everyone's POV on it. Wonderfully done.

:O i feel epic really does explain this chapter
i love how you did the diffearnt points of view it really helps understand how each chracter feels at the time, must have been difficult to write from all of their points of view as well twas briliiant

and i think i shall actually attempt an entry 4 the teddly lupin fanclub thingy as well..hhmmm ...ooohh the fun

*wonders what to fling at him* *agrees on the evil git thing*

He makes a lemon sweet. The donkey thing just popped into my head when i read it and i thought i should mention it.

Yep. Very colourful. Dull robes doesn't suit Teddy!


Yes i am! *takes out magnifying glass and searches for his footprint*

He is! Well, not horrible but he told me off for laughing too much in his lesson when i did much more laughing the year before and got a really good mark in my exam! Silly guy! Anyways.

Ugh! He knew how to do the Trip Jinx! Still don't like him!

Yes it is. Actually, i don't even know!

Yep. I'm following him! He will pay! *takes out wand*

Teddy played more tricks on Smith?! Wow! Go Teddy!

*gasps* How can he?! Is he not human or something?

Yes he does! Do you know something? Hm...

*gasps* You now something! Well of course - you made up the story! But still...what do you know?

*high-fives everyone who hates him*

Haha! Yeah, you do. Is this person named after a bully, enemy or horrible teacher? Hehe! I was watching a couple of shows of Omid Djalili on Youtube whilst i was having pasta!

Ah! That's how she knew he was her dad! Aw! You've got a birthmark on your stomach? Wow!

*pours coffee in a flask and sends it via owl post* There you go. Thank you!

Ooh! What do you mean you're not happy with the ending?! I'm sure it's perfectly fine! Well, more than fine, since it concerns your story! Ooh! We get to vote! Or do we? Hm...

Ok. *gets ready to read*

Aw! Poor Cosmo! *hugs him* Aw! He thinks they're covered in ketchup! Aw! *sniffs; then starts crying* Poor family!

Noo! What are you doing?! What's wrong with you?! Are you even human?! Stop treating Remus like that! Ah! That's so sad! Cosmo had to watch while Remus gets tortured! *cries even more*

Aw! Poor Caitlin! That's so sad! She also had to watch while Remus got tortured! Well sort of. Wow! The pink light came! Is Amelia awake?! Wow! Hope she is! Hope she's ok! *crosses fingers and cries even more* OMG! What happened to Remus?! Why you evil gits! *takes out wand and stands in front of Remus*

Yes! She's awake! Hope she's ok! *tries to cross fingers and realise that they are already crossed*

Yes! Teddy forced the poles out of the seat! Yes! Go Teddy! Hope he manages to hex Smith (i'm still going to call him that) with something so good, he ends up in the Hospital Wing for eternity and beyond! *crosses toes for extra measure*

Aw! Cute, cute, cute, cute, cute! That was just really, really cute! Especially Remus saying that he'll never let Tonks fall. I couldn't help crying even more. Haha! Tonks' last comment was so funny!

:faints: OMG! OMG! OMG! What did he just say he's going to do? That silly, silly man! Right. That's it. *points wand at this person*

Ah! No! What do you think they're doing?! Stop torturing Remus, you evil gits! Wow! The blue orb! Hope he's ok!

OMG! Such a long comment! Haha! I think i took up most of Page 8! Wow! I don't mind the multiple view thing. It's your story, you can do whatever you like with it. I can try taking part in the competition but i'm no good at graphics or writing! OMG! I just realised. Is this story nearly over? Is this the penultimate part? *whimpers and cries even more* I'm sorry i'm too enthusiastic (again). This time i had too much chocolate! Hehe! Great post! Loved it! Can't wait for more!
Kita

I know, I'm getting good at cliffhangers, considering that I don't like them! Thanks for the compliment, I really like that technique of showing everyone's POV.

Epic, I think that's the word of the week! It was actually really fun to do the POV part
A competitior!!

And the award for the longest comment on the Bright Lights thread goes to... Kita!

Used teabags? Rotten eggs?


Donkeys are sweet natured creatures really. He's more of a vulture than anything else.

Silly man indeed.


What do I know? Lots about lots. Is he human? Sadly yes he is. Is he powerful? Well, we'll have to see.

Of course he did, he's a mini-marauder!

His name will be explained. As will someone else's I'm a bit surprised that you haven't questioned me calling him John Smith, I've borrowed that from somewhere

Cheers! I may need some more soon.

I did some work on it and I'm happier than I was. I had three possibilities and now I'm down to two possiblilites. You're not going to get a vote though sorry, I changed my mind.

Starts crying? Yikes!

Bless her she's a bit more aware than Cosmo, a bit more grown up. Is Amelia ok? No Comment.


This is Smith we're talking about. The first thing he did was take Teddy and Amelia's wands.


Thanks! This was an extra I wrote due to the 'epic split'. I thought we needed something lovely, considering what's coming up...


Silly? More evil than silly surely? He means it.


I want to tell you, I really do, but the spoiler police will come and get me!

I hope you're sharing that chocolate? Or is that too much to ask? The next bit is the end of chapter eight and then there's the epilouge, which is the end! Sorry But I'm planning a story for Hermia, called Tempestuous. Keep an eye out for it.

Have a go at the comp Kita! I'm sure you'll be great!

Once again, the flashbacks were great! And of course, multiple points of view always makes for a jucier story. Now, off to work on my in-hibernation-FF.

- Mel

I got an award! *goes up on stage and accepts award* "I would like to thank HannahLongbottom for a wonderful story, Teddy because without him, we wouldn't even have a story and everyone else who reads this story because they like this story too! *starts crying from all the emotion* Haha! I'm melodramatic again!

*takes items and flings it at Smith; turns around and runs away before he can hex me*

Yeah, they are. Go HannahLongbottom for coming up with the perfect animal for Smith! *cheers and claps*

Exactly. No more said on him.

Ugh! He's human! I was hoping he's one of he cyber-men! You know if he's powerful! Dun,dun,dun!

Oh yeah! I forgot he's a mini-marauder! Go Teddy!

Ooh! Someone's name's going to be explained! Wow! Oh yeah! How did the name John Smith come about? Hm...

You're welcome!

Ah man! It's ok! Yay! You're happier! Are those 2 possibilities very different or slightly different? I bet you're not going to tell me!

Don't worry! I'm a very emotional person!

Yeah. Girls mature faster than boys! *gasps* You know something about Amelia. If she's not ok...*promises to give Smith another hex*

True. Still can't believe it, though.

You're welcome! *gasps* Something bad is coming up and you know it! *takes out wand and mutters lumos* We need a lighter atmosphere!

Yep. More evil! But i just like to call him silly!

Silly spoiler police! We won't let them get you! They can't!

*wraps bars of chocolate and sends it to HannahLongbottom* There you go! Aw! It's nearly the end! Yay! A new story! I will definitely be reading that! Thank you! I'm not too sure, though. If i have time, i will have a go. Haha! I did it again - i posted another long comment! Can't wait for your next post!
Kita

Glad you like the multiple POV, I wasn't sure but I think it does work.

More from you? Hooray!

LOL you make me grin!

*joins in*

Thank you


Of course I know if he's powerful Do you think he's powerful? I borrowed John Smith from someone who has encountered Cyber Men (frequently)


How can you forget he's a Mini-Marauder?

Well you see ***The rest of this sentence has been removed by the spoiler police***

Me too. I've had moments were I've had to stop writing so I could have a bit of a cry


Of course I know! She's ***The rest of this sentence has been removed by the spoiler police***



I'm not sure why, he's like the cleverest Ravenclaw of his generation. Even Crabbe would disarm his opponent given half the chance

Or was that a mis-direction? Is this a mis-direction?


I suppose threatening Teddy's wife does count as silly


Thanks! I know you'll love the bit where ***The rest of this sentence has been removed by the spoiler police***


Green and Blacks Dark Chocolate with Cherries, my favourite! How did you know? I'm glad I'll have one reader. It was a long post, but not a record breaker!

So this is the last part of the last chapter. But don't worry, there's still the epilouge to go.


Eight, part five, Black

“Daddy?”

“That’s right”

Hermia reeled at his words, two such ordinary words which had changed her world, rewritten her life.

“Where were you?” she demanded, no longer scared of him, just angry.

“I was where your mother instructed me to be. I had no right to question a great woman like her.” His voice was flat and devoid of emotion. He was still wearing the same twisted smirk.

“Didn’t you want to be with me?” Now that she knew who he was, she wanted answers. Smith looked her straight in the eye. There was no warmth, no tenderness or remorse there. She realised that he had no interest in her. He was like Nequam. He wanted her mother. His smirk became a twisted smile but his eyes were still cold.

“Of course, of course I did but there are times in life when you must do what is right. You must do what you are told. She picked me, above all others, to be your father. I knew when we created you that you would be exceptional. Had I had a hand in your upbringing, you may have even bested your mother.” He seemed to consider her for a moment. From the corner of her eye she saw Teddy trying to pull the back of his chair away from the seat.

“You still might.”

As Smith spoke, Remus was thrown to the floor. The burly man who had been holding him was bent double and let forth a burst of the foulest language that Hermia had ever heard. She saw him twitch his wand and Remus began to scream.

“NO!”

Both Hermia and Smith were shouting but the masked man just laughed maniacally.

*****

For once, the kitchen in Grimmauld Place was warm. Remus was sat at the table, picking at the supper that Tonks had cooked for them. He was thinking about the message that Severus had sent to him about Harry.

“Moony, there’s no wonder you’re so skinny, you never actually eat anything. Tonks isn’t that bad a cook, I quite enjoyed it.” Sirius raised his glass in a mock toast. He may have been joking but Remus knew that he was worried.

“Quite enjoyed it? That’s my speciality!” Tonks pretended to pout.

“I wouldn’t boast about cheese on toast if I were you Tonks.” Kingsley Shacklebolt’s slow deep voice was coloured by the laughter that he was clearly biting back.

“Tonks is the only person that I would expect to poison me unintentionally.” Mad-Eye moody threw his head back and laughed loudly, exposing the gaps where several teeth should have been.

“If you’ve all finished having a pop at me, you can make your own meals in future.”

“Not very friendly little one, your mother wouldn’t like that.”

Tonks shot Sirius a nasty look and he laughed. After a second or so she joined in. The laughter added to the warmth in the kitchen. It was interrupted by a silver doe bursting through the kitchen door. They fell silent as Snape’s voice issued from the patronus.

“Potter has not returned from the forest. He seems to have gone on a rescue mission, taking others with him. Black, inform who you can and wait for Dumbledore.”

The doe vanished leaving a deathly silence behind her. Remus looked at Sirius. Every trace of laughter and colour had drained from his face and he was gripping the table as though it was his only anchor to reality. Moody was the first to speak.

“As much as I can’t stand the man Sirius, I think he’s right. You should stay here.” He looked around at the others. “What are you all waiting for? Come on!”

Moody’s words were like a starting pistol; they all sprang into action, grabbing wands and cloaks.

“KREACHER!”

The elf appeared immediately with a crack, something that Remus had never seen him do for Sirius. Suspicion prickled at the back of Remus’ mind.

“Dumbledore will be here soon Kreacher, tell him we’ve gone to the Department of Mysteries to get Harry.” Sirius was grabbing an old cloak from the hooks by the kitchen door.

“Yes master.” Kreacher’s acquiescence worried Remus.

“Sirius do you think -”

“Remus, I’m coming. We can argue on the way.” Sirius’ tone was resolute, his expression determined and Remus knew there was nothing he could say or do to make him stay behind.

They rushed through the house, causing Mrs Black’s portrait to scream insults at the top of her voice. Disapperating from the top step, they arrived in the Atrium of the Ministry and charged towards the lifts with Sirius in the lead. Tonks was hot on his heels with Remus just behind her. She seemed have a sudden burst of nervous energy and sped up. Her foot caught the hem of Sirius’ cloak. Time seemed to slow down as all they both began to fall. Remus reached out to catch Tonks and she grabbed his arm, pulling him down on top of her. They landed in a tangle of limbs and cloaks. The determined look that Sirius worn since Snape had delivered his message was gone. As he looked steadily at Remus, his haunted grey eyes had an imploring look within them. He glanced at Tonks, who was trying to disentangle herself as gracefully as possible, and then back at Remus. Sirius nodded and after knowing each other for almost a quarter of a century, Remus knew exactly what he was thinking. The moment passed, time sped up and the three of them sprang to their feet, racing after Kingsley who was heading towards the lift.

*****

“Loki No!”

“STUPEFY!”

Hermia screamed the spell and Smith sent one of his own at the huge man. One of the stunners hit the huge man squarely in the chest, the other hitting the teak dresser, breaking the centre panel. Letters, photographs and gold spilled out onto the floor as his the man fell, hitting his head on the corner of the dresser before he hit the stone floor with a nasty thud of his own. Blood oozed from his temple. Remus groaned as Hermia scrambled to her knees, supporting him in a sitting position. She looked down at him and was frightened by what she saw. He was scared; the veins in his neck were standing out in an ugly, unnatural way. He was trying to breathe deeply but he couldn’t. Tears ran down his face. She looked up at Smith.

“Why have you come here? What do you want? I doubt that it’s to make up for missing my birthday party.” Her voice was acidic, almost as though she wanted her words to poison him.

“Oh, you are a fiery one Bellona. Just like your mother.”

“DON’T CALL ME THAT!” Unbridled rage flooded her body and green sparks flew unbidden from her wand.

“Bellona? It is your name. It is your destiny.” He closed the distance between them and she saw that his eyes were exactly like her own.

“Destiny?” she spat at him, still cradling Remus, “My destiny? It’s my destiny to fight? That’s what Bellona means, isn’t it? Well if I have to fight, I’LL decide who and what it is I’m fighting for!”

“My girl, you are so young. You’ll see soon enough that you have to take your true name and fight for the survival of our kind.”

Hermia felt sick. “What do you want?”

“You. I want you.”

“Why now? Why like this?”

“I waited. I bided my time and I watched you. I needed you to be of age. I wasn’t going to make the same mistakes as that idiot Nequam. I wanted to see how powerful you really were. I wanted to see how flexible your loyalties might be.”

“My loyalties lie here, with the only family I’ve ever known.” She sneered at him.

“I’ll soon cure you of that foolish sentimentality.”

“YOU WILL NOT!”

Remus sat up, supporting himself finally. Hermia stood up, her wand firmly clenched.

“Come child, you cannot hope to win a duel with me.” Smith was almost laughing as he stepped towards her. He paid no attention to Remus, who was dragging himself towards the inglenook, out of the firing line.

“You’ve broken into my home, half killed my parents and tortured my little brother. If you think -”

“They are not-”

“My family? Yes, they are. They took me in when I was a vulnerable child. They’ve loved and cared for me while you’ve been watching and waiting to see if I was good enough, powerful enough to be of any use to you! If you imagine that I’m going to leave here willingly, you are extremely deluded!”

Red sparks shot out of her wand towards him and he laughed. Smith took another step towards her, his tall frame towering over her petite one.

“You are so like your mother.”

“I’m like myself. I have no memory of her or you. Until I was fourteen I had to look after myself. The two of you were only ever interested in yourselves. That’s why you dropped your real names. She was Morgana, enemy of Merlin. I’m Bellona, born to fight. He’s Loki, servant of the gods. And you, you’re Alberich, the sorcerer king who was a master invisibility. Well, I must congratulate you on that. How long have you been an Auror?”

“Fourteen years.” A smirk of satisfaction twisted his face.

“True invisibility then, to be seen but unseen, to be a trusted member of the ministry for all those years without anyone being suspicious.” Hermia was still grasping her wand tightly, pointing it squarely at Smith. Behind her she could hear at least one of the children crying.

“You will fulfil your destiny Bellona.”

A movement over Smith’s shoulder brought a smile to Hermia’s lips.

“Perhaps I will. STUPIFY!”

The spell hit Smith in the chest as Teddy hit him over the head with the back of the chair he had been tied to. Smith fell to his knees and then flat on his face. Teddy pulled his wand out of Smith’s pocket. Hermia flicked her wand and bound him with ropes. She did the same to Loki while Teddy rushed across to Remus.

“Hey little man, how are you?” He saw the pale silver blue light pulsing around Remus’ chest. Remus was trying to take deep breaths but he couldn’t. Tears ran down his face. Teddy lifted him up and stepped towards the fire. At that moment, Ashtad Djalili burst into the room. He pushed his dark curls out of his eyes and gaped slightly at the scene in front of him.

“Well, I came to save the day but it looks like I’m a bit late. Mr Potter is on his way.”

“That’s an understatement. I’m taking Remus to St. Mungo’s. Look after things here. I think they’re working alone, that’s Smith’s style.”

“Alright boss, will do.”

Teddy and Remus disappeared in a burst of green flames.

Ashtad was healing Amelia’s wounds. Hermia pointed her wand at his throat.

He frowned at her. “What are you doing?”

“When we were both at Hogwarts, what did you do to me in the Great Hall?”

“I spiked your tea with Fever Fudge and you passed out. You fell backwards off your chair and everyone saw your underwear.”

Hermia lowered her wand, lips pursed. “I had to check you are actually you, not another evil nutter come to kidnap me.”

As soon as Ashtad had healed Amelia’s wounds she looked at Hermia.

“Where are Cosmo and Caitlin?”

“In the Inglenook seat, I heard it close while Smith and I were…”

She trailed off, unable to describe what had happened between the two of them. She watched as Amelia crossed to the inglenook while Ashtad cast additional spells over Smith and Loki. Cosmo and Caitlin climbed out of their hiding place. They looked suspiciously at Ashtad.

“Who are you?” Cosmo demanded.

“I’m Ashtad.”

“Have you come to take Hermia away too?” It was Caitlin’s turn to demand an answer.

He smiled. “No, I’ve come to take these two away, is that ok?”

They nodded, still eyeing him warily.

“Come on cheeky monkeys, time for a bath and bed I think.”

Amelia began to lead the twins out of the kitchen when Harry stepped over the threshold, followed by O’Brien and Johnson.

“HARRY!”

The twins rushed towards him and he crouched down so that he could hug them both.

“There’s two bad men over there. They hurt mummy and daddy and Remus but Hermia stopped them.” Caitlin spoke so quickly that it was a wonder

Harry managed to follow what she was saying. She pointed at Ashtad.

“And that man says he’s called Ashtad and he’s come to take them away, but I’m not sure about him, so I’m glad you’ve come.”

Harry chuckled. “Ashtad works with me, mummy and daddy. He’s very, very good.”

Caitlin frowned. “Are you sure?”

“Oh yes, I’m very sure. Now I think it must be bath time?”

The twins nodded and followed Amelia out of the kitchen.

“Hermia, sit down. Djalili, Johnson, stand guard over those two. O’Brien, could you make us a drink please and then come and take notes.”

Before anyone could follow the instructions, Ashtad spoke. “Umm, Mr Potter, I think we might have a problem.”

“What’s that?”

“The big guy’s dead. I didn’t want to say anything with the little ones in the room.”

Hermia was aware that Ashtad was still speaking but after the word ‘dead’ she was unaware of what he was saying. She sank to her knees and started to sob. Harry pulled her to her feet and steered her into a chair. It had been her stunner that hit Loki, she was sure of it. She stared at her wand. Ivy, ten and a half inches, dragon heartstring. It was the only wand she had ever owned and had been her only constant companion since the age of eleven. It was the wand that had now twice been an accidental murder weapon. She handed the wand to Harry.

“You need to examine it properly. Smith and I both cast stunners. One hit Loki, the other hit the dresser. He hit his head on the way down. I think it was me. I stunned him because he was using the Cruciatus curse on Remus. John Smith admitted to being Alberich. He’s my father. I… I…”

She could not speak, there were no more words. She covered he face with her hands. Accidental or not, she was a killer. Wave after wave of guilt and self loathing washed over her. She was like them. She was just like her parents.

She felt someone wrap their arms around her, pulling her into a tight hug. At first she thought that it was Brighid O’Brien, but then she caught the familiar musky scent of Ashtad. She looked up into his dark, liquid eyes and she felt a rush of gratitude and safety. She was aware of Brighid putting a cup of tea in front of but she didn’t want to look away from Ashtad. He was keeping the tide of guilt at bay. Brighid sat next to Harry and started to make notes just as Teddy emerged from the fire.

“How’s Remus?”

Hermia stared at Teddy, dreading his answer.

Teddy’s hair had turned black and his face was grey.

“Ted, what is it?” Amelia was standing in the doorway.

His voice was barely a whisper. “He’s gone.”

“Gone? What does that mean?” Amelia demanded, but Hermia knew. Remus was dead.

“When Loki threw him to the floor, his two of his ribs broke and punctured his lung. It was too late. I was too late, I couldn’t…”

Amelia started to scream. Teddy managed to cross the kitchen and wrap his arms around her. He couldn’t understand it, his boy was gone, was taken from him, never to come back. The weight of that thought pressed on his heart and shattered it into a thousand tiny pieces.

~

Ashtad and Harry sat in Harry’s office after taking Smith to Azkaban, sharing what was left of a bottle of Firewhiskey Harry had stashed in his desk.

“Thanks for everything you’ve done today. How did you work it out?”

“When Amelia didn’t come back from the Prophet, I was concerned. I went to see if she was still there and they told me that she never arrived. After that I went to the Hobgoblin in Bath to see if Teddy’d been there. I know how much he likes that pub. When they said he hadn’t been in I sent a message to you and went there.”

“You’re good Djalili, Teddy’s right to have confidence in you.”

“Thank you Mr Potter. Do you think Smith killed Andrew Williamson?”

Harry surveyed his mead and sighed.

“I think John Smith is what muggles call a sociopath. He’s superficial, charming but callous, he feels like the world owes him something, he has no understanding that other people have rights and as far as I can tell, he’s incapable of love. I think it’s entirely possible that he has been killing ever since he worked out how to get away with it.”

“Merlin. That’s just sick.”

“Yeah. It really is.”

“What’ll happen to Hermia?” Harry saw the concern in Ashtad’s face; it wasn’t just the concern of a friend.

“Nothing. She was defending a child who was being tortured. She might blame herself, but she’ll be the only one. I just can’t believe that Remus is…”

The shock of losing Remus sat heavily over them both, a silent cloud of regret, each man blaming himself for not being able to intervene and save the child.





All right I'm sorry! I almost didn't do it but in the end I had to. Does anyone need a ?


The Teddy Lupin Fan club Comps have been extended until 25th Oct. Give them a go!

*shakes fist* HannahLongbottom!!! I cried again!! Really brilliant though!!

Yay! I'm happy i make you grin!

*gives you items to throw at Smith* Well done on joining in!

You're welcome!

I think he is powerful. I don't know why. OMG! I can't believe i didn't link it with Doctor Who! And i watch that show so much! Do you watch Doctor Who as well? Do you not like Doctor Who or something? *crosses fingers hoping it's wrong*

I'm sorry! I just didn't register that fact!

That's not fair! Ah well!

Aw! It's ok!

Hey! They did that again! Silly spoiler police! Only kidding!

Haha! That Crabbe comment was funny!

Hey! That's mean! Making me all confused like that. Hmph!

It does! Especially when we know about it! *stalks them; invites you to join in and help*

And that's 3 times! Are the spoiler police stalking this thread? I'll go and stalk them! *turns around and goes off to stalk them*

Isit! *sends you some more* I'm sure you'll have more than 1 reader! My next post about the story will be a record breaker! At least, i hope so! Sorry i won't be able to post about the story now, i'll post sometime soon!
Kita

THE...END?!!!..
it cannot be
but WOAH wat a chapter..now i loved this.. but i was near tears when i got to the part about Remus, i can't believe you killed him after all Hermia and Teddy went through just then!! tut tutt tutt...(bad egg point arrises again) but great chapter
I also loved how the flashback (which i always love partly due to my love of the Tonk/Remus ship and how well you write about then, but none the less) and how it showed us what we weren't shown in the book, how Sirius reacted..and Tonks best meal is cheese on Toast LOL < kk so this chapter had me laughing like a loon (often happens so people just seem to accept my crazy-ness now ) and it had me near tears.. oooh you amazing writer you
BUT i love this story the epilogue..
.....hhmmm and what prey tell have you planned for the FINAL part??? I CANNOT.. actually wait.!!!!. Great/Amazing/Brilliant/Unbeliveable/Fantastic chapter and for your story!! much hugs and smiles to help with the epilogue -Lolz-

P.S - I tottally need a after reading the second last chappy for this amazing story i'm going to miss signing in and finding a post on your thread but still love it so yay

How can you do this to us......... you have me crying once again
poor Remus
best chapter : )
I need a hug

PAMS please

Shell

I needed a hug too!! *shakes fist at Hannah again*

Sorry! I was going to put a tissue warning at the top but I thought that would be a spoiler! Thanks!

I thought you would have realised that by now!

Oh I've been chucking all sorts at him, I just edited those bits out

I LOVE Dr Who! It meets so many of my requirements in a TV show. I nicked the John Smith bit because that's who the Doctor pretends to be when his real identity would cause too many problems. That's all. And Smith is very powerful

Tut! Shame on you


I just felt really evil at certain points in the story!


Well he would.




You don't need to stalk Loki, he's a man mountain, he stands out like a sore thumb.

I'd leave the spoiler police alone if I were you, you see they ***The rest of this sentence has been removed by the spoiler police***

Well, get your tissues out Kita, I think you'll need them. Thanks for the chocs

It is y'know

*looks in the mirror* no, it wasn't me, it was that big bloke!

I love the flashbacks. I'd written this one before I wrote the one in the part before, with the bit about always catching her, so I just had to go for the whole bitter sweet bit.
And are you crazy? I'm stuffed then...

Well, Teddy ***The rest of this sentence has been removed by the spoiler police***

Awwww stop it, you're making me blush! I'm waiting for my new story to come up on the HS Vault board. It's called Tempestuous. Teddy and Harry do feature as it's about Hermia and ***The rest of this sentence has been removed by the spoiler police***

Sorry Shell you do know that when I post again it will be the end of the story?

Back again? for you too!

I know but i'm rying to not think about it : )

Aw! The last part! I'm already sad! Yay! An epilogue!

Oh yeah! Now i remember! Yay! You watch Doctor Who as well! *high-fives you*

Yeah, where were you, Smith? *stands next to Hermia with wand, glares and points wand at Smith*

*gasps* He's so mean! With that smirk! Is it just me or are Hermia's parents the "evil couple"?

He's really evil now! Has he got any good in him? Is his blood not blood but ice or something? I wouldn't be surprised if it was!

What?! What on earth does he know about good and bad?! Listen up: Hermia isn't going to go to the bad side! Yes! Go Teddy! Hope he's better! And Amelia!

Still might what? Best her mother? Is there something wrong with you? No! What you doing?! Leave Remus alone! Or you'll have me to deal with! *points wand at him*

What wrong with you?! Stop hurting Remus! Poor Remus! And the guy is just standing there laughing! Honestly! There's something seriously wrong with him!

Haha! Tonks is so funny! Aw! Poor Remus! Sirius is a joker!

Haha! Tonks is so funny! So is Kingsley! Cheese on toast! Ha!

Haha! Moody is so funny! I was laughing with him as well! It was just so funny!

Yeah! You tell them, Tonks!

Haha! That was hilarious! I was laughing as well! Ooh! A patronus with a message! I wonder what it is...

*gasps* Ok. I should not be surprised by it having read the book so many times but still. Aw! I feel so sorry for them! That's so sad! I think i'm going to cry!

How the mood suddenly changed, i don't know. But boy did it change fast. Poor Sirius! The grief he must be going through! I feel like crying, now!

Go Moody for taking action! Yay! They're going! No! Sirius, don't go! Aw! *starts crying*

Ooh! Remus has suspicions! Aw! Sirius is going to go! No! *cries even more*

Sirius! Hear Remus out! He was always stubborn wasn't he? Well, sort of. He's so determined!

Haha! I know that it is serious and everything but that part made me laugh! Mrs. Black's screech! I actually imagined it!

Oh no! What's he doing now? Oh no! There's something really wrong about him!

Uh oh! I'm glad the guy has been stunned! But oh no! Oh no! You can't do this! Please don't tell mr it's what i think it is! Oh no! That'd be horrible! Poor Remus!

Woah! Go Hermia! You tell him! I want her words to poison him as well! *goes off to look for real poison in case it doesn't work*

Um...Bellona? Ooh! Where did you get that name from? I always low your name stories!

You go Hermia! Good on you! *comes back with poison in case* Wow! Green sparks! She must be really angry!

Um...What?! Her name? Her destiny? I think he needs to go to St. Mungo's. Ah man! Why does his eyes have to be like hers? Ugh!

Yeah! Go Hermia! Girl power! (sorry - i had a big bar of Snickers today, hehe)

Well you can't have her! *steps up in front of Hermia and points wand at Smith*

Exactly!

Excuses, excuses, excuses. I just wanted to say that! Good on Hermia for sticking with the Lupins!

I agree with this person! You won't! 1 sec... who is this person? Who's the one that's speaking?

OMG! Remus! Hope he's better! Of course he can win a duel with you! Anyone can win a duel with you! Ha!

Yay! Go Hermia! Exactly! He is deluded! How does he feel now?

No she isn't! And anyways, how do you know? You barely know her in the first place!

He just got told again! Haha! Oh wow! I love the name meanings! Very good! And it all links in!

Ooh! Intense! Smith: no she won't! She won't have to do anything that she doesn't want to! Please tell me she stupefied him!

Ooh! He got hit twice! How does he feel! I'm so glad Teddy hit him over the head! I hope he's out cold! Yes! He's tied up! And so's the Loki guy! Yes! I feel so happy now!

Aw! Poor Remus! *goes over towards Teddy and Remus and hugs Remus* Aw! The pale silver blue light! Come one Remus! You can make it! Come on! Haha! I know it's serious but the name made me laugh!

Haha! He came to save the day! And Harry is on the way! Yay! Harry's always there to save the day! Not that i'm complaining!

Yay! Teddy's taking Remus to St. Mungos! Hope they get there in time! Hope Remus gets better! *crosses fingers*

*tries to control self and act mature; fails miserably* Haha! That's so funny! Glad Fred and George's products are being put to good use! I feel so sorry for Hermia, though!

Too true! Too true!

Aw! Poor Cosmo and Caitlin! *hugs both of them* Hope they're ok!

Djalili! Hehe! I had to add that in!

Aw! Poor Cosmo and Caitlin! That's so sad! Yay! Harry came! Go Harry!

Aw! They clearly love Harry! Aw! "two bad men"

Ooh! Caitlin suspects him! Dun, dun, dun! But he's good! Or i think he is... Haha! Caitlin is so funny! That question was hilarious! I couldn't help laughing!

Aw! Harry ordering again! Go Harry! A problem? OMG! Is that true?! Wow! Yes! He's dead! Ok. I know i shouldn't be happy that someone died but still! We can make exceptions!

Aw! Hermia's feeling guilty! Hermia: don't feel guilty! It wasn't you! It was Smith!

No you're not, Hermia! You are not like your parents! They are selfish, mean and don't have any good in them! You are totally different! And anyone who agrees otherwise will have me to deal with!

Aw! Well done on Ashtad (Djalili - ) and Brighid for being comforting! Ooh! Teddy came back! Wonder what news he has? Hope Remus is better!

Yeah, how is he? Oh no! No, no, no! This can't be happening! It can't be what i think it is! I hope it isn't! Please tell me i'm wrong! *cries even more*

:faints: No! This can't be happening! Remus can't die! Oh no! It's a good thing i got out my tissues! *blows nose on tissues and cries harder*

Oh no! Right. That's it! Oh yeah. Loki's already dead. I'm glad he died! But poor Remus! How can you do that? That's just too sad! *cries harder than ever*

Aw! *cries even more and finishes tissues* Now look what you've done! But i don't blame you! That paragraph was just too sad! It was so heartbreaking! I thought my heart was breaking as well!

*sniffs* Work what out? Hm... Yay! I'm so glad Smith has been taken to Azkaban! He deserves worse but i'm not going to judge!

Oh! Now i get it! Well done Aurors! You've done a great job! Love the name of the pub! Hobgoblin! Ha!

Yeah he is! Hehe! Djalili! I always going to laugh at that!

Ah! That explains everything! Well done Harry! Very clever! I can't believe it, though!

Exactly! I second that! *puts up hand in agreement*

The concern of something more? Is it? Hm.. Ashtad and Hermia! Cute!

Neither can i. That was so sad! I'm still crying (i think i've made my t-shirt get wet )

I blame myself as well! Although, i don't know why. Poor Remus! I can't believe i cried so much!

Yeah i do! It's ok! You're forgiven!

Wow! Long post! I'm so sorry i rambled on! I just had to! Great story! I'm really going to miss this! I'm going to miss coming on here and posting huge comments! *cries even more* I can't believe it's over! Well apart from the epilogue! Aw! Thanks for such a fabulous story! Great post! Great story, actually! You deserve an award! *gives HannahLongbottom an award for a fabulous story about Teddy; cheers and claps for you* Loved it! Loved all of it! Can't wait for the epilogue!

Kita
PS: I don't know if i said this before but: Yay! I love Doctor Who as well! *high-fives you for loving Doctor Who and Omid Djalili*

Aww It is coming though.


Right, I need coffee, I need chocolate and I need a comfy chair if I'm going to repond to Kita.

Now I'm sitting comfortably, I'll begin
Already sad? Oh dear...

I'm not sure I trust people who don't like Doctor Who. There's too much David Tennant goodness to be missed!

That really is a silly place to stand Kita. Hermia can handle herself.

They are a complete "evil couple", far worse than the Malfoys.

Well, he's very cold hearted.

Isn't she? Are you sure about that?

Yeah, leave Remus alone you big numpty!

The big guy is the one laughing. He's a Crabbe and Goyle type, he likes making others suffer.

Poor Remus indeed. I have a feeling that when the three of them are together, Remus gets the mickey taken out of him lots.

Cheese on Toast is an easy meal toget wrong y'know.

I love Mad-Eye! I had to put that bit in there.

Tonk is a feisty girl!


Well we know who it's from...

*passes Kita a tissue*

*passes Kita more tissues*

*passes Kita a wodge of tissues*

Of course Remus is suspicious, he's a clever man. *passes Kita the box of tissues*

I think you were right with stubborn. He's a stubborn man.

You laughed? I was going for funny and deep and meaningful. Perhaps I overdid the funny?

He's still torturing Remus. He's an evil nutter

*passes Kita chocolates by way of an appology*

Cyanide works fairly quickly, apparently.

I'm not going to reveal my sources! Thanks though, I do research the names.

Oh yeah, I think should could have cast an Unforgivable at that point.

He needs to go somewhere, that's for sure. Her eyes are like his because he's her Daddy, poor girl.

Shall I take the chocolates back then?

Now that is a really really silly place to stand, considering the lengths he's willing to go to get her...

She loves them.

Smith: “I’ll soon cure you of that foolish sentimentality.”

Hermia:“YOU WILL NOT!”

She actually wouldn't win a duel with him. He'd kill her rather than let her win.

Angry, probably.

She looks just like her mother and she's quite a feisty and a very foul temper

Thanks, I re-wrote that bit about eight times to make it work.

She means that she'll fight him.

Oh good! I am glad!

I know, I grin like a loon when I type it.

Umm, I think Hermia saved the day! Harry's just going to do the mopping up!

Oh dear...

I laughed when I had that idea.

We've had enough evil nutters for one chapeter

They're ok, Cosmo still thinks it's a game (Cosmo means order or decency and Caitlin has several reported meanings but the one I like is that it's a version of Hecate who is a goddess assciated with witchcraft. I thought you might be interested. Cosmo's middle name is Harry and Caitlin's middle name is Ginny.)



It's sad that they have to have a bath? Amelia's just trying to get them out of the kitchen where the evil nutters are. They do love Harry and he loves them.

She's got a right to be suspicious! And Ashtad is good.

Yeah, Harry's in charge. I worked out that he's almost 58 in this chapter, since Teddy is 40. Loki broke his neck when he fell. He did get what was coming to him though. He's a bad, bad, bad man.

No, it was Hermia's stunner that hit Loki. Smith destroyed the dresser.

You're right, she just feels guilty.

*Passes Kita another box of tissues and a huge box of chocs*

I'm really sorry!

I'm really really sorry!

*cries along with Kita*

Well, he's going to be there for a very long time.

The Hobgoblin is a real pub in Bath, I used to go there when I was at uni.

I keep hearing "belly dance!"

Harry's very clever, it's just next to Hermione everyone else looks like a dullard.

He's very sick indeed.

You are going to like my new fan fic!

Awww, do you want that now?

Thanks for my award! I've really enjoyed writing this story and I love your comments, they're so funny!

*gives you coffee and a big box of chocolate* I'm so sorry about my long message!

Yay!

Yeah, sorry about that.

Exactly! Us Doctor Who fans have to stick together!

Well Smith is a lunatic. I don't trust him!

Yeah they are! The Malfoys are nothing compared to them. Well not nothing, we have to give them some credit!

Yes he is!

I'm sure! Wait, what do you mean? Are you trying to get me confused again?

Exactly! Leave Remus alone! Haha! "Numpty" That's so funny! I love your use of words!

Oh! Right, come lets make him suffer! Oh i forgot, he's dead! Haha! In your face!

Aw! And when the Marauders were together. When they were in school. Poor Moony!

Haha! I guess it is.

Well i'm glad you put that bit in there! I was crying when he died! He was so good!

Yeah she is! And Remus is such a softie! Guess it was a match made in heaven!

Yep. Poor Severus! He loved Lily so much! I feel so sorry for him at times! But he'll still be the greasy haired, hooked nosed Potions teacher that everyone hates.

*accepts tissues* Thank you!

*accepts more tissues* Thank you again!

*looks at the wodge of tissues but accepts it nevertheless* Thanks for the tissues! Wow, i've got a lot!

Yeah he is! *accepts the box*

Yeah i was! Especially when it comes to Harry, i think!

I didn't mean to! You didn't overdo the funny! It's just me! I was laughing so much at the part where Tonks and Remus fell.

Haha! "Evil nutter" I think i will always laugh at that!

Ooh! Chocolate! *accepts chcolate, offers you some* You're forgiven - although i don't know what you have to be sorry for! *wonders*

Isit?! *goes off to find some cyanide*

Ah man! Ah well! You're welcome!

Yeah. True, true!

Yeah, exactly! Poor girl! He needs to go somewhere that's very, very far from Hermia!

No! I need something to sustain me! *offers you some chocolate*

I don't care, he's going to do something very silly. Why does he want her anyways?

Yes she does! Haha! She doesn't love Smith! (i think)

Exactly! You won't! It's good to be sentimental!

I like to think she can win. Ah well! He's just too good!

Haha! Yeah, probably!

She looks like Morgana? (sp?) Ah man! Ah well! That's gentics. Nothing you can do about it.

Well, you should be proud of yourself! It does work!

Ooh! Yay!

I'm happy that you're glad! (if that makes sense)

Hehe! I will always laugh whenever i hear Djalili! And if i ever see any of his shows on Youtube, i will always remember Bright Lights!

Ah well! Harry's saving the day days are over! *rubs off a tear remembering the good old days* When i read you comment, i actually imagined Harry with a mop cleaning up something that looks like blood.

Oh, i'm sorry! *gives you another bar of chocolate*

Isit? Good idea, though!

Yes, exactly. *puts up hand in agreement* Haha! "Evil nutters"

Wow! I told you i loved the stories behind the names you choose! I am interested! Aw! Teddy named them after Harry and Ginny! That's so sweet! I think it kind of suits them!

Glad you're happy!

Ok. I agree. It sounds sort of silly.

Yeah he is. Who can't be if they've got a surname of Djalili?

Wow! 58! And Teddy's 40! Wow! Yeah! He got what he deserved!

Aw! Hermia killed him? It's ok, though! It shows that she has a better aim than Smith!

Yeah! At least i'm right!

*accepts box of tissues and chocs* Thank you!

It's ok! You're forgiven!

It's ok! You're forgiven!

*gives you tissues*

True say.

Isit? Wow! Lucky you!

Haha! So do i! His belly dancing is so funny!

Guess you're right.

Yep. Very!

Aw! Has it got some Hermia/Ashtad? You're not going to tell me are you?

Thank you! I try to make it funny! Sort of. Thanks so much for a fabulous story! Can't wait for the epilogue and the new fanfic!
Kita

You're more than welcome

Sorry, I just had to celebrate!

2100 + views for this fic!

*faints and fans herself with the notes for the epliouge*

Can I have a glass of something lovely please?

A glass of................... strawberry lemonade?

Oooooooohhhhhhh!!!!! Lovely!

that does sound lovely AND WELL DONE
the epilogue notes ...hmmmm *leans over shoulder to try and read*
teeheee can't wait

I was editing the epilouge when your email popped up! I'm just having a bit of a play with a few ideas.