you write very well!!You should submit to the quibbler!! I used to write for my schools newspaper. You should try to do something like that. It def. gets your skills out there and gives you more constructive comments

I agree

Please read my poems, I'm on the 2nd poetry page, under
Magical World - HallowsEve's Poems :tongue:

thanks alot you guys!!

This makes perfect sense to me, it's about a dream I had last night, and one of my friends.

Dreams and Sanity

I saw you in this dream
We were friends then.
Your Paranoia was gone
You were normal again
After so long
"We're all on vacation"
He said to me
you weren't there.
What did he mean?
Escaping reality
in the form of a dream?
Escaping this hell
for something more
in-between

that was really good! Is your friend a guy or a girl?

My friend's a girl, her name's Lucy :upside:.

oh. I thought it was a guy.

You Rock Rebecca!!! that poem was about Lucy, i could tell. Her Paranoia was gone? She was...normal? really? hmm...

In the dream, lol!

anyway, here's another poem post thing.

Prisoner of Happiness

Inside this bubble
You cannot break
My state of mind
Where this world is fake
Living in the moment
No matter what life may be
A prisoner of happiness
Is all that I see
Your world becomes foggy
As I enter mine
This life disappears
As our realities entwine
I never thought of this freedom
As home before
But life is too painful
To care anymore

wow.......that was REALLY GOOD

Your poems are awesome! I really like the 1st one the best. Keep posting poems, please!

Hey! it's my friend Lucys Birthday today, so I'd like to say Happy Birthday if you ever read this. :hello:

anyway....... here's another poem post thing...

I must be insane
my life has been staged
My mind sabotaged
I cannot change
this fate
Planned
Every second
I can’t even steer
which way to go
In this speeding train
Lead me toward what
Was never mine
This feels so much
Like another mind
I must be insane

that was one of your best poems yet....well in my opoinion

-is green with envy-

omigeez your soooooo good! I couldn't write like that for my life!

will you ever seist (sp?) to amaze us with your awesome works???

yay!! thanks #1Chaser! and Hallowseve and Sarah (and I believe the word is cease).

YAY! found my poem book finally, I lost it a while ago, and was like writing everything 5 minutes before I posted. . . that was actually kinda fun. anyway, I wrote this almost a year ago. . .

I thought it was gone
This feeling inside
Thought it was over forever
I was starting to move on
Forget about things
When it all hit me again
Like a raging tornado
Tearing things up
And throwing things out
'till nothing remained but a longing
A terrible longing
To leave everything
I used to know behind
To leave this place in the past
to go find
What I came to love
And never return

- I don't particularly like this one, probably just cuz it's so old. Usually I write about stuff I've been through, but this one was inspired by a book I read.

Do you have a boyfriend.If you do, do u have any poemes about him

You are the best poet i have ever herd

BmxGuy, If I had a boyfriend and he read these, *caugh-Kodie-caugh* :shifty: I would want to know how how found them, because HE WASN'T SUPPOSED TO READ THEM!!!!!!!!!

HOW DID YOU FIND THEM?!?!?!?!?!??!??!?!??!?!??!?!?!??

I was just writing that I would post Saturday, cuz I need to stay up till 3 AM again to get inspiration (don't know how it works, it just does.) but then I remembered, I wrote a poem about it last December!

My head clears at night
Underneath the midnight moon
I'll be able to write
My thoughts down very soon
If all you see
Is a helpless girl by day
Stare through the darkness
and you will see
My deadly ink weapon
awaiting me

deadly ink weapon! :stab: muhahahaha! I love that line!

waz-up?
 

Sure you don't have a problem. . . Hey! I see you on that thing 2!!!!!!

You people reading this rock my sox, keep reading!!!!!!!!!!!!!

sarah you make it sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo obvios