Hello Emily. Umm I don't know what to say. Of course your writing was still great, but why did George get mad at Emily? George was being awful childish yelling and shouting the terrible things he did. It reminds me of two children who are best friends and they shout like that at one another, and go off mad, but shortly after, they are best friends as if nothing had eve been wrong. But this, this is bad because they are both adults, and to say those childish things and Emily was just as wrong for believing him and pushing him away.
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George, breathing heavily, realized what he had said. His eyes went round and then he took a few steps toward her. He tried to pull her into a hug but she held her hands out in front of her.
He did try to make up right away when he realized the xhild he had just been, but she pushed him away frobidding to let him say or try anymore.
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“Fine then! I’ll do it all by myself! I’ll raise our children without your help! I hate you too!” Emily yelled. “Just go!” She slapped him across the face. He was still in shock from her words.
Emily reacted just as badly as he did, only she didn't back down and try to be sorry for her words. Such a terrible mess! I hope George deosn't leave. And I hope Emily grabs him back and goes home with him. They can work out their problems athome like they're s'pose to. Of course they need to get Draco obliviated first though.
Very well written Emily. You certainly got your point across, I'm just not happy with what the point was about.
And of course I don't hate you. Just post quickly. Don't pick now to get over being bored.
