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Originally Posted by
Mordanyes 
Ok, tip. Don't have your writing in that colour. I can't read it! I tried but it was like, 'woah I'm blinded!' So yeah, different colour might help.
Otherwise, what I did manage to read, it was pretty good! The last line you said she could see Hogwarts, well I don't think they could, could they? Don't they stop at Hogsmeade and take the carriages up or the boats? Well I don't know, just a querie!
Ok, that was a ramble... Keep on writing!
Sorry bout the color! I didn't set it my friend did and hit send before I could change it =(
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Originally Posted by
KatielovesHP That was really good, I would agree with Mordanyes about the colour but don't worry about the last line. Rose may have seen the tip of a turret for all we know. Keep writing, I loved it!!
Is there some Rose/Scorpius action occuring??? hmmm...can't wait!!
Katie xx (Oh and welcome to SS!)
Haha thanks! I always firget that they stop at Hogmead before taking the boats...Opps
~Thank you both for reading!