Hello Sophie. My goodness! I can't believe how well your story is coming along! Well, I shouldn't be surprised, you are a very good writer. Loved this line.
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Talking to myself was something I had started to do. It made me feel slightly more sociable, as I keep to myself most of the time.
I wonder if she finds herself good company?
And here's another great line:
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"Dean... Don't you understand? Sure I forgive you because at the end of the day, what’s done is done.
Sophie, this next part is brilliant! I love how she noticed herself in the reflextion of the trophie case.
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I looked back at the other picture. I looked so happy in it. I seemed relaxed and at ease. I looked like I belonged as I celebrated with the rest of the team. Then I caught my reflection in the glass. I looked unhappy. Out of place. My face looked long and drawn. I looked tired but I wasn't, I felt perfectly awake. I hadn't been on my broom in such a long time. Maybe I had lost touch. I smiled to myself and headed back to the dorm, quickly grabbing my broom and heading for the Quidditch pitch.
It felt good to be back on my broom. I whizzed around the field twice at normal pace and once double speed and I kept going like that for a good while. I stopped to take in the view, up high you could see everything; the castle, the lake, the forest, Hagrid’s hut and the Whomping Willow whose leaves had changed from radiant greens to coppery oranges and reds. A cold wind felt comforting to me. I realised that I had been trapped inside for too long. It was like trying something for the first time. I had missed flying. At the sun began to set behind the mountains, I landed back on the ground. I had to get back for Neville and Luna coming around.
I loved it Sophie. You did great getting Ginny back on her broom, and in the air. I felt refreshed as I read along with her.
I don't like Dean trying to force his friendship on Ginny. This doesn't look good.
Great post Sophie!
OK, now so I don't double post I'll get on with the next post, right here on this one.
Sophie this is another tremendous post! Loved this part. It was so beautiful.
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It was a blustery day outside and the leaves had turned the most brilliant shade of orange. The coppery tones matched the colour of my hair as the fallen leaves danced around my face in the wind.
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Eroll died. Oh no.
Poor Eroll. he did have a long life of service to the family didn't he. He deserves this rest now.
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Then there was three familiar loud knocks at the door.
Don't answer it Ginny! It's that Dean! And he's doing a paridy of Dr. Jeckell, and Mr Hyde!
My goodness! What is wrong with Dean?!?!?! I always somewhat liked him in
the books.
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I spat in his face and kicked him in the stomach winding him and causing him to roll over onto his side and freeing me from his strong grasp.
He deserves to be kicked someplace else. But, Ginny did good to kick hard and I hope she gets away!
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The door of the dorm opened. I gasped scared at everything that was happening. "Gin." His soft velvet voice said.
Oh, good! I hope it's Harry, but even if it's Neville it's help.
Great posts Sophie. I'm so sorry, I didn't get to comment before you left. I hope you have a great time. I'll miss you.
And I'll be wathing for you to get back, and post another chapter.