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Connie · 07-04-2010, 04:28 PM

Hello Maxie. So good of you to give us a new chapter. I can't believe it is so scary!!!!

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Money loves to pull, into illusion, those that own it. It loves, too, to ruin the illusions that it can create.

It does the same thing to those who don't have it, but thinks they have to have it to be happy.

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In the dark of the night, Jenna’s milk-white gown trailed down to her feet as she apparated a little spot off from the Mansion and, an invisible shield drawn up not on purpose, but by instinct, neared the sprawling building, that shone like a point of darkness, in the distance.

This sounds ominous. She needs to get out of there.

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She paused, and glanced skywards. The moon was full, a point of brilliant, silver light. It cascaded down on her, filtered through her silver hair, and fell down her milk-white dress.

Beautiful! But she is in danger. It's a full moon!

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“Si,” she whispered. Si –you will understand one day, will you not? There was no other way, I was too fascinated. I do not want to practice this. I want to see his ways. I do not want to see how – for I already know that – I want to see why. Si – you will understand one day, will you not? You will not hate me, will you, Si? There is something either disastrous or vile, in me. It wanted to know why – and now it has other reasons. Reasons it can not escape, because they have nothing to do with the mind. I have fallen apart with what I initially sought, Si – the need to know why and I are barely friends, now. Other factors have come into play. I have no control over them, anymore. I can not be strong, in the face of what makes us strong.

Maxie, your writing is spectacular! Oh, I was so afraid she would loose the power her hate gave her. Now she is caught up in his 'appeal?' and has no power over what she sees happening.

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The cheek to not be alert, and to think – when on an errand for him – of a sister opposed to his very actions, would cost her. Jenna ought to have realized this, but the place her twin occupied in her mind and heart, made her overlook the little unsaid detail, perhaps even law.

Oh No! My heart is thumping out of my chest! There are things "stationed" here Jenna! She would realize this, if she hadn't been so deep in thought about her sister, and her own admittance that she's lost control over her own will. But, I guess this is what has drawn her here.

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It happened, very suddenly – to her right, a pair of scarlet-tinted, orange eyes gave a sudden glint. Less than half a second later, a scream had ripped out of her throat, and the wind seemed to carry it everywhere, let it magnify, echo and then plummet into a startling, hauntingly indifferent darkness.

Time to pass out.

Maxie, what a talent you have! Tremendous post! Best of luck with your many well deserved nominations! Much love to you., and I'll catch you later.
Oh and this:

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CONNIE! You are never, EVER an intruder. Iloveyou, and I don't think anyone gets tired of seeing you around. They all love you. <3

Thaank you Maxie, you are very kind and sweet. I love you too.

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Connie Puffskein Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Florida Posts: 1,415 Hogwarts RPG Name: Janet Lynn Gordon Fifth Year	Werecats are people too! Reader of Fan Fictions Hello Maxie. So good of you to give us a new chapter. I can't believe it is so scary!!!! Quote: Money loves to pull, into illusion, those that own it. It loves, too, to ruin the illusions that it can create. It does the same thing to those who don't have it, but thinks they have to have it to be happy. Quote: In the dark of the night, Jenna’s milk-white gown trailed down to her feet as she apparated a little spot off from the Mansion and, an invisible shield drawn up not on purpose, but by instinct, neared the sprawling building, that shone like a point of darkness, in the distance. This sounds ominous. She needs to get out of there. Quote: She paused, and glanced skywards. The moon was full, a point of brilliant, silver light. It cascaded down on her, filtered through her silver hair, and fell down her milk-white dress. Beautiful! But she is in danger. It's a full moon! Quote: “Si,” she whispered. Si –you will understand one day, will you not? There was no other way, I was too fascinated. I do not want to practice this. I want to see his ways. I do not want to see how – for I already know that – I want to see why. Si – you will understand one day, will you not? You will not hate me, will you, Si? There is something either disastrous or vile, in me. It wanted to know why – and now it has other reasons. Reasons it can not escape, because they have nothing to do with the mind. I have fallen apart with what I initially sought, Si – the need to know why and I are barely friends, now. Other factors have come into play. I have no control over them, anymore. I can not be strong, in the face of what makes us strong. Maxie, your writing is spectacular! Oh, I was so afraid she would loose the power her hate gave her. Now she is caught up in his 'appeal?' and has no power over what she sees happening. Quote: The cheek to not be alert, and to think – when on an errand for him – of a sister opposed to his very actions, would cost her. Jenna ought to have realized this, but the place her twin occupied in her mind and heart, made her overlook the little unsaid detail, perhaps even law. Oh No! My heart is thumping out of my chest! There are things "stationed" here Jenna! She would realize this, if she hadn't been so deep in thought about her sister, and her own admittance that she's lost control over her own will. But, I guess this is what has drawn her here. Quote: It happened, very suddenly – to her right, a pair of scarlet-tinted, orange eyes gave a sudden glint. Less than half a second later, a scream had ripped out of her throat, and the wind seemed to carry it everywhere, let it magnify, echo and then plummet into a startling, hauntingly indifferent darkness. Time to pass out. Maxie, what a talent you have! Tremendous post! Best of luck with your many well deserved nominations! Much love to you., and I'll catch you later. Oh and this: Quote: CONNIE! You are never, EVER an intruder. Iloveyou, and I don't think anyone gets tired of seeing you around. They all love you. <3 Thaank you Maxie, you are very kind and sweet. I love you too.