Hello Emily, This was sweet:
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“It’s okay, you’re male,” she chuckled. “You’re not bound to me, Freddie, we’re just friends. Go talk to them, they can’t seem to take their eyes off of you,” she added.
This was a nice thing to put in for us to see your character being real.
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Emily pulled her shoes off of her feet and tucked them into the couch crevice.
From this point on, I don't understand why everyone is fighting and they totaly just leave Alicia.
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Around twenty minutes later, Alicia came through the portrait hole, supported by Jamie.
Why didn't she go to the hospital wing, and was Dumbledor told of what happened? Somethings shouldn't be left for kids to fix. Draco and his goones did some serious hurting on Alicia.
At least the evening didn't end completely wrong. Jamie went back to comforting Alicia.
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Jamie calmed down enough to come back to the couch. Alicia snuggled up into his side while Emily started taking the pins out of her hair.
Snuggles is always a good thing when it's with the one you love.
I'll be watching for the next post. Great job!
