Hello Chelsea, nice to see you posting often with your story.
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in which he so cheesily carved our names into.
But sweet of him.
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Was it such a shock too say I was happy?
I love happiness! Everyone needs to have happiness. It's sad Jess has been deprived of it.
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He was proud he was the reason I was so happy,
How cute is that!?
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Not for long.I will laugh as I see you in pain. You will never be with Draco Malfoy. You will die.
I hope she tells Dumbledore. Young people never think of going to the ones who can help for some reason. That didn't sound like an idle threat. She needs to watch out, and have people watching out for her. Maybe Hagrid will see the tree and tell Dumbledore.
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,"Evil....I like it."he commented.
Evil is never good in my opinion. But, I know it is a common thing for young people to say.
Chelsea you're doing a great job! And you have a great story. I have something else to say, but I have to look it up first. I will add it later as an edit.
Edit: "I TRIED TOO KEEP MY GRAMMATICAL ERRORS DOWN. REVEIW! AGAIN, THEY MAKE ME SMILE!"
You can get a Beta to help you with this. At the top of every page where you find the blue tool bar, (User CP,... Log Out) there is a pull down option that says 'SEARCH' Pull it down and type in, Snitchseeker Beta Readers thread, Here you will find rules to be a Beta, and then a list of volunteers who will be happy to be your Beta. They will help you correct your mistakes and you will be much happier with your story, knowing your mistakes have been corrected before your readers see them. I think they are all wonderful people and very helpful. Nothing to be ashamed of, as a matter of fact it is recommended that everyone has one who posts a FF. I have one and I wish I'd have found her at the beginning instead of 1/2 way through. Hope this helps you.
