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Connie · 05-13-2010, 06:19 AM

Owen, I've read this three times, cause I like to form a thought about how to solve each thing going on. Everytime I think I have something figured out I come up with several reasons why it can't be. And although it would be good to know what Bill and Ogranak was sent to spy on in Mexico, I'm with Harry, I think it would be good to know why Krull is researching the anciant battle that took place on Hogwarts grounds. Surely if he knows about the battle and the outcome, then he knows it's all about the sword he's doing rersearch on. Just what about it, I'm sure is what Harry is wanting to know.

I can't say this is my favorite part of the chapter, but I laughed at the mental picture it made in my head.

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Both girls giggled at that before abruptly stopping when the portrait opened to rudely reveal the outlines of Albus, Cei and Hugo; arms linked they were yelling Chudley Canon chants and laughing whenever one of them made a mistake or a new version of the chant.

And as it should be, Rose quickly puts things in order, causing all the merriment of the three new friends to stop, with only an angry scowl, and not even a single word.

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Harry was in a bad mood as he left for work that morning. He had been annoyed by Ron's reaction to Neville's letter - Ron believed the boy Lily fancied was a good choice on the grounds that he had knocked out 'undesirable number one' rather than see the danger of going out with a mindless thug - Mr Weasley had questioned him until the early hours about the newspaper communications and Ginny was demanding he did more to find their eldest son: a subject that always caused tension between them.

Loved it so much. Poor Harry. But then this was the silver lining:

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A wry smile played across his face as he noticed the cloudless sky in his office window.

At least he must have gotten the maintanance crew's unhappiness dealt with. That at least is one good thing to feel good about.
Loved your chapter Owen, and I think you worry too much about the length of the story. I won't mind whatever length you end up with. All I care about is if it's a good story, and it is. Actually, it's great!
I'll be watching out for your next chapter. (I hope it won't be ages before we get to read it.)

05-13-2010, 06:19 AM	#24 (permalink)
Connie Puffskein Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Florida Posts: 1,415 Hogwarts RPG Name: Janet Lynn Gordon Fifth Year	Werecats are people too! Reader of Fan Fictions Owen, I've read this three times, cause I like to form a thought about how to solve each thing going on. Everytime I think I have something figured out I come up with several reasons why it can't be. And although it would be good to know what Bill and Ogranak was sent to spy on in Mexico, I'm with Harry, I think it would be good to know why Krull is researching the anciant battle that took place on Hogwarts grounds. Surely if he knows about the battle and the outcome, then he knows it's all about the sword he's doing rersearch on. Just what about it, I'm sure is what Harry is wanting to know. I can't say this is my favorite part of the chapter, but I laughed at the mental picture it made in my head. Quote: Both girls giggled at that before abruptly stopping when the portrait opened to rudely reveal the outlines of Albus, Cei and Hugo; arms linked they were yelling Chudley Canon chants and laughing whenever one of them made a mistake or a new version of the chant. And as it should be, Rose quickly puts things in order, causing all the merriment of the three new friends to stop, with only an angry scowl, and not even a single word. Quote: Harry was in a bad mood as he left for work that morning. He had been annoyed by Ron's reaction to Neville's letter - Ron believed the boy Lily fancied was a good choice on the grounds that he had knocked out 'undesirable number one' rather than see the danger of going out with a mindless thug - Mr Weasley had questioned him until the early hours about the newspaper communications and Ginny was demanding he did more to find their eldest son: a subject that always caused tension between them. Loved it so much. Poor Harry. But then this was the silver lining: Quote: A wry smile played across his face as he noticed the cloudless sky in his office window. At least he must have gotten the maintanance crew's unhappiness dealt with. That at least is one good thing to feel good about. Loved your chapter Owen, and I think you worry too much about the length of the story. I won't mind whatever length you end up with. All I care about is if it's a good story, and it is. Actually, it's great! I'll be watching out for your next chapter. (I hope it won't be ages before we get to read it.)