Wow Owen! I can't believe how great this is! Let me go back and pick up a few things I was most impressed with.
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"I think that I he doesn't notice you as you are then he's not worth it."
While I agree with her I can't believe she was so blunt. But, then again, that's the way she is. Good job there.
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"I doubt I have the time to wait that long, Rose," Lily said gloomily.
How cute is that! That is exactly the way young girls think!
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"I need to keep you busy.
And quiet, and out of the way?
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"Cei?" Rose turned nervously to face him, unsure about how this psychotic would interact with normal people in a crowded area. She found herself staring at his chest and had to take a small step back to look at his face properly. To her surprise and indignation, Cei smiled at the look of suppressed anger on her face and laughed, "My reputation precedes me it seems," he said with a bigger smile, as if laughing at an inner joke. The smile brightened his features and made Rose realise why Lily fancied him.
This I loved so much! I wonder how close Rose was to passing out. Cei, sounds like he's irresistible! And quite frankly, I love him already. I mean the character he is.
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"It's all lies, built around a fight that's forgotten it's cause," Cei winked at Hugo, who had turned to watch his cousins squabble and who suddenly went bright red. Cei continued, "fortified by my house treating me as an outcast, perhaps because of the solemn mask I wear.. I don't know. At any rate, I'm determined that the real me shall be known this year." Cei laughed at his own bravado, "apologies, I'm not usually so immodest. Just tired of being lonely, you know?"
This was brilliant! I loved it all Owen. I can't take the time to do anymore picking. I hope you can write more soon. I think you're a great talent! I'll be watching for more.