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Jessica 
I found this an awesomethhhh start.
Thanks, sweetie! Quote:
That's so mean! *pokesez them all* The part most remarkable is that this is all true and comes straight from RL.
Exactly! That is what I enjoyed most, about this essay. =] Quote:
Another good bit since it not only carries the essay forward in a nice way but it also tells how swimming was more than just a sport for the girl and how she actually put her dreams and labour into it.
Yes. Her hard work is definitely praise-worthy. Quote:
That was gorgeously worded. 'Crystal dreams that we fashion.' It's true. We raise dreams but they're so delicate and it takes so little to crush them especially since we humans are so quick to give up.
Thank you bunches, sweetie. I'm happy to know that enjoyed the essay this much. You're right, too -- we are too quick, to give up. That's human nature, and it's so fickle and fragile. Quote:
And that was a very fitting end to a very fitting essay! It just summed up everything that the essay said - where there's a will, there's a way. I love the reference to candela which is the unit of light.
GREATTTTTTT work chicka!!
Thank you for the lovely review.
*huggles you*