It's great Emily. You've fixed everything just fine. The story line is solid and you make me want to keep reading.
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“I couldn’t sleep,” she whispered. She moved away from the door, toward his bed. She saw the map on his bed. “Looking for anyone in particular?” she asked quietly.
Awe, he was watching for her wasn't he? Very sweet.
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“I know, Malfoy isn’t exactly a beautiful landscape. Is he?”
Cute line to lighten her anxiety. Great post Emily. I'll be watching for your next post.