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AmbiguouslyMe · 01-23-2010, 02:35 AM

Thank you all. Really. I get all flustered thinking about you all reading this and actually liking it.

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Originally Posted by Pink Ninja

Oh dear me! Jeremie you so often reduce me to tears that it is pathetic. My heart just broke for Tibi! I want to squeeze him and never let go. It is beautifully written and very touching.

I love it

I totally cried last night after I posted it. I'd made that decision right when I created Tibi, but something about posting it made me feel like the worst person imaginable. Stole that poor boy's daddy from him.

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Originally Posted by aussiegirl

Oh gosh Jer.

That was...that was...really beautifully written.

I have tears in my eyes. Poor little Tibi, I just want to hug him.

Thank you. And don't you, though? I just want to make sure he has nothing but good things... but then I put him in these miserable situations.

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Originally Posted by redifer

I'm so mad at you right now! I'm crying!

It was wonderfully writen, but I'm still mad at you.

Yeah. I'm mad at me, too. I wrote the end of the chapter before I wrote the rest of it, and I just... didn't want to finish because then I'd have to post it and then ugh.

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Originally Posted by imaginarynumb3rs

I...didn't cry.

Instead, I felt the urge to punch Max in the face.

I mean, maybe Tibi and Susan needed some alone time, maybe that's why he chose to leave. But, he just abandoned them. First of all, he apparated, and I think that's a bit below the belt, seeing as Susan had no way to follow him. He didn't offer an explanation, which he owed them. He didn't say he was sorry. He didn't try to redo the protection spells. He didn't say ANYTHING. Plot device or not, Max is a coward.

I mean, how do they even know he's going to come back?

He could of at least promised them that.

I don't trust him.

Anyway, emotions aside, I thought this was very beautifully written (as always)! I especially loved the last four paragraphs. The way you used the "thump" word was as pretty as it was heart wrenching. And also, Tibi's response to being in Gryffindor.

That made me laugh.

I found two tiny typos, though, and I thought you might want to know about them:

Otherwise, I think it's perfect.

One - THANK YOU for the typo stuffs. That's what I get for 'editing' after midnight. >.<

As for Max... yeah. What a jerk move, right? Like, he could have at least offered to do.. I don't know.. something. Leaving a distraught woman alone with her two-year-old? Classy, man.

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Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom

Goodness me!

That was beautiful and tragic at the same time. It's Susan who I want to hug, poor woman.

Will we be seeing Max again? hmmm

Fabulous as ever

I'm learning a lot about Susan, actually, as I work on this. And how some of that affects her and Tibi now, which has been interesting.

As for Max... maybe from afar. For now. He may weasel his way into some Tibi rp stuff, actually, since in IC time, he's starting to get really curious about digging up stuff about his dad, and dad and Max went way back.

01-23-2010, 02:35 AM	#25 (permalink)
AmbiguouslyMe SA & DMLE Mooncalf Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Boston Posts: 6,674 Hogwarts RPG Name: Hazel Martin-Pryce First Year Diagon Alley Proprietor: Scout MacIntyre Daily Prophet Reporter x4	Granddaddy Ravenclaw \| \| Jermione Granger Thank you all. Really. I get all flustered thinking about you all reading this and actually liking it. Quote: Originally Posted by Pink Ninja Oh dear me! Jeremie you so often reduce me to tears that it is pathetic. My heart just broke for Tibi! I want to squeeze him and never let go. It is beautifully written and very touching. I love it I totally cried last night after I posted it. I'd made that decision right when I created Tibi, but something about posting it made me feel like the worst person imaginable. Stole that poor boy's daddy from him. Quote: Originally Posted by aussiegirl Oh gosh Jer. That was...that was...really beautifully written. I have tears in my eyes. Poor little Tibi, I just want to hug him. Thank you. And don't you, though? I just want to make sure he has nothing but good things... but then I put him in these miserable situations. Quote: Originally Posted by redifer I'm so mad at you right now! I'm crying! It was wonderfully writen, but I'm still mad at you. Yeah. I'm mad at me, too. I wrote the end of the chapter before I wrote the rest of it, and I just... didn't want to finish because then I'd have to post it and then ugh. Quote: Originally Posted by imaginarynumb3rs I...didn't cry. Instead, I felt the urge to punch Max in the face. I mean, maybe Tibi and Susan needed some alone time, maybe that's why he chose to leave. But, he just abandoned them. First of all, he apparated, and I think that's a bit below the belt, seeing as Susan had no way to follow him. He didn't offer an explanation, which he owed them. He didn't say he was sorry. He didn't try to redo the protection spells. He didn't say ANYTHING. Plot device or not, Max is a coward. I mean, how do they even know he's going to come back? He could of at least promised them that. I don't trust him. Anyway, emotions aside, I thought this was very beautifully written (as always)! I especially loved the last four paragraphs. The way you used the "thump" word was as pretty as it was heart wrenching. And also, Tibi's response to being in Gryffindor. That made me laugh. I found two tiny typos, though, and I thought you might want to know about them: Otherwise, I think it's perfect. One - THANK YOU for the typo stuffs. That's what I get for 'editing' after midnight. >.< As for Max... yeah. What a jerk move, right? Like, he could have at least offered to do.. I don't know.. something. Leaving a distraught woman alone with her two-year-old? Classy, man. Quote: Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Goodness me! That was beautiful and tragic at the same time. It's Susan who I want to hug, poor woman. Will we be seeing Max again? hmmm Fabulous as ever I'm learning a lot about Susan, actually, as I work on this. And how some of that affects her and Tibi now, which has been interesting. As for Max... maybe from afar. For now. He may weasel his way into some Tibi rp stuff, actually, since in IC time, he's starting to get really curious about digging up stuff about his dad, and dad and Max went way back. __________________ Has anyone ever sung you a lullaby? You can fly above the rain clouds Close your eyes Let the melody carry you Leave all your fears behind You can float across a rainbow sky to once upon a time