To begin with, I am never disappointed in your writing Kellybear, I think it is very good, lyrical, beautiful, and simple without the hackery of overtly verbose authors who feel the need to belabor a point ad nauseum* or others *cough*No I'm not talking about you Rick Riordan* who drop crate sized foreshadowing and then try to pass it off as intelligent literature because they cover it in the trappings of mythology.
That said, I realized after I wrote what I wrote that your strength lies in the intimate moments in the lives of the characters ... and not say, massive explosions like Michael Bay or me.
Please note, I've been off of late and I am chanelling Teddy so everything I say should be taken with a grain of salt and tequ ... uhm
moving on.
*takes out the scalpel* That said ...
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My dearest KellyBear 
“I’m so sorry, Hannah.” Luna took Hannah’s hand and caressed it, trying to comfort her.
“Wh-what happened to Leeza?” Seamus asked, trying to keep his voice steady though his stomach felt as though it were in his throat.
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“I’m so sorry, Hannah,” Seamus took a deep breath and plunged on, “I know how your feeling. I lost someone that night, too.”
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Both girls turned startled eyes on him and he suddenly felt shy.
*Seamus goes off the scale on the "Ottery-loves-Seamus-love-meter."*
He's so cute. You write him soooooooooooo cute, but where's Dean? Seriously, leave Hogwarts or something and tell us what Dean's doing. Is he pinning for his old friend? Is he fighting in the fight, is he ... oh gah
I need to reread DH it's already gone and forgotten
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Kelly The Cutest Care Bear “Me Aunt Amelia. She was…” His voice caught and he looked away, fighting back tears. Embarrassed by this show of emotion, Seamus jumped up and ran out of the Great Hall, Luna and Hannah staring after him.
OMG! *the love meter explodes*
OMG! I seriously love Seamus, but not bomb-ketches
Then you wonder why I don't review better. Neways, Seamus being a boy is seriously cute. It shows a very tender side to him, and I think it makes me love him more. As if indeed I didn't already. I'm inspired by you Kellybear to go write some Dean/Seamus adventures on my Marxist story.
Kankyou
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Kelly "Loves Otty too Much" Bear “It’s just, I’m all mixed up inside and I just need some time to think. I don’t want to hurt anyone.” Neville said.
Ginny nodded in understanding. “Well, we best get to class. See you at lunch then, Nev.”
I love how Ginny is such a nag. I mean seriously what's up with her being so meddlesome? I don't know ... grilling Neville like that seems a bit much, considering he is the leader of the revolution. I'd have her in chains and in the dungeons for insubordination ... of course I'd also have Colin doing suicide runs at midnight to the kitchen for a snack for me ... I get notoriously hungry around then
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Kelly"Is punny"Bear An: Bear with me guys, I promise more action (and romance) soon, but first the set-up.
Pun totally intended I'm sure.
Set up is nice ... I come from the school of
In medias Res Graduating class of 1936 :O
*=Ottery is not referring to himself.
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