 JayMay ♥ Big, yellow duckie <3
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The red swatch of cloth looked delicious. Over her palm, it trailed like a thing stitched of the heat of flame, the richness of the strawberry, and Andra ran light fingers over it with a sparkle in her eye, saturated as she was with the scent of fresh cloths that, stacked one over the other like neat piles of equally-thick books, lined the high walls of the shop.
That was such a pretty description! I really like how you captured the cloth - good to look at, even if not so in quality. Great work!
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Like expensive metal, she thought, gathering the cloth in her hands. They may not like it, may even hate it, but they can't deny its worth in the market.
Nice similie! Unique, Ilykit. <3
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“This?” Victoria asked loftily, and she held up one end of the fabric. “How pathetic.”
Hehehe... Poor saleswitch. But I have to say, Victoria is love. Scary love! We need a Victoria smiley! 
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[Stealthily, thought Victoria. Such a cat].
I honestly love her! I think she's one of the strongest characters you've written, up till now. You've done a good job with her, Maxo!
Love,
~~Jay~~
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