Thank you for that marvelous intro Xavier ... and now for my critique of your latest poem, per your request ... I usually try to catch up first but since you asked so nicely

So you know I'm all

I have to admit I had to reread this a couple of times and as the critic feel free to correct me if I missed something or if I interpreted something wrong but ... my take on this poem goes a little like this:

*To the tune of The Beatles Can't buy me love ♥*

At first I thought, the DA having occurred in book 5 this poem took place in book 6, right? But that's where you're wrong ... on further reading of course we see Luna's abduction and that happens after book 6 going into book 7. I also note that the author ships N/L like I do ... just sayin' Neways. They've decided to come out of the dark ... nice use of the dark/light motif



Now this I don't remember so ... I take it this either happens while Neville is at school fighting with his NEW D.A. openly (don't remember if that's canon but then again I take canon and fire it so who cares, really? ) Poor Neville. Evil obviously is triumphing ...

I don't know why, but those lines I highlighted just clicked a note ... they're so sad and true ... and not just to Neville but ... it's funny he's grinning, he's used to it I guess ... yet he still goes on ... *glomps Neville*

Using an old metaphor ... winter means death ... nice.

*cough*IstillshipN/L*cough* Is this love or mere coincidence? I think it's cute ...



A couple of things here ... we start with silence and our heroes hearts deep because they feel, become black because they're facing evil and cold because they feel loss and absence ... I like how you capture all that in three simple words.

Then there's the use of color ... he sees black, the Death Eaters and then when she's gone he's surrounde by white ... nothing. There's nothing there were his Luna :luna: was ... black representing evil and white absence ... nice touch.

Here we have two scenes which you start the same and meld well together ... They seemlessly melt into one another (dunno if you did that on purpose) while at first reading it confuses the story flow once you get the jist of the tale you can appreciate the repetition *a tool of poetry* and how you go from one scene to another ... *please hold your applause*

The imagery of fading light or darkness or blindness (Neville in the snow) does not escape me. Goes well with the title Dim Light Nice touch. *fires the cannons*

The imagery of darkness or blindness again, present here in Luna's abduction scene (?????). Nice touch.

And you end it on a hopeful note, which we all know who have read book 7 that it does end well ... well mostly, for our intrepid heroes. Unless you liked Snape cuz then you're ...

I have to admit it was very dark, sorry light imagery you know ... but the point is. Yes, I did indeed like it. Not as much as your epic but still good stuffs. Your epic was ... well epic so it's kinda hard to top. Still, a brilliant poem Xavier ... give us more. Lemme read some more of your stuff. What poets do you read, what poetry do you like just out of curiousity?

My favorite poem is Jabberwocky ... what can I say ...

my mome rath just grabe out so I gotta go ... I'll be back Xavier keep up the beautiful poetry ... I love your imagery and PAMS on your fic, no?