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Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom  You can fling whatever you like at him my lovely, he's an evil git. *wonders what to fling at him*  *agrees on the evil git thing* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Donkey! I thought lemon 'cos he's clearly bitter about something! He makes a lemon sweet. The donkey thing just popped into my head when i read it and i thought i should mention it. Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Well he's a colourful person, I couldn't have him in dull robes  Yep. Very colourful. Dull robes doesn't suit Teddy! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Watch out Smith, Kita's onto you! Yes i am! *takes out magnifying glass and searches for his footprint* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Wow, your maths teacher must be horrible! He is! Well, not horrible but he told me off for laughing too much in his lesson when i did much more laughing the year before and got a really good mark in my exam! Silly guy! Anyways. Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Proffessor Boot has underestimated Smith, he thinks that Smith wouldn't be able to perform a Trip Jinx at the age of 12. Ugh! He knew how to do the Trip Jinx! Still don't like him! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Is it? Hmmmm Yes it is. Actually, i don't even know! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Watch out Smith, she's coming to get you! Yep. I'm following him! He will pay! *takes out wand* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom I doubt that was the only trick that Teddy played on Smith. Teddy played more tricks on Smith?! Wow! Go Teddy! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom He was fairly horrible to her, let's put it that way. *gasps* How can he?! Is he not human or something? Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Well, Smith does seem to be very powerful, doesn't he?  Yes he does! Do you know something? Hm... Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom No Comment *gasps* You now something! Well of course - you made up the story! But still...what do you know? Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom We all hate him! *high-fives everyone who hates him* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom You know I love naming my Bad Guys! All my names are researched (apart from Amelia and Keith who were named by Lupinfangirlx and Paintbrush). Haha! Yeah, you do. Is this person named after a bully, enemy or horrible teacher? Hehe! I was watching a couple of shows of Omid Djalili on Youtube whilst i was having pasta! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Hermia knew her dad's name, but not who he was. He wasn't there for her because... I can't tell you. Poor Hermia indeed. Thankfully she's got Teddy and Amelia She's got a birth mark on her stomach because I have and I was running out of imagination  Ah! That's how she knew he was her dad! Aw! You've got a birthmark on your stomach? Wow! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom You can't be too enthusiastic! Pass me some coffee though, I've got lots of typing to do.  I'm glad you like the story, I like your comments *pours coffee in a flask and sends it via owl post* There you go. Thank you! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Well folks, I've written the next chapter out long hand but I'm not happy with the end. You may end up voting on what kind of end you want! Ooh! What do you mean you're not happy with the ending?! I'm sure it's perfectly fine! Well, more than fine, since it concerns your story! Ooh! We get to vote! Or do we? Hm... Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Well, I found a way to split the epicness that this part had turned into so that it's more manageable. Ok. *gets ready to read* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Cosmo could hear the grown-ups talking. Hermia had just called the man in the doorway daddy, but that couldn’t be right because his daddy was Hermia’s daddy. Maybe this was all a game and that was why his mummy and daddy were covered in ketchup, pretending to be asleep. He didn’t understand why Caitlin was crying if this was a game. Aw! Poor Cosmo! *hugs him* Aw! He thinks they're covered in ketchup! Aw! *sniffs; then starts crying* Poor family! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom He looked up at Remus. The man with the funny grey mask on was holding him high up in the air. Cosmo could tell that Remus didn’t like it, but Remus was a bad loser. He always sulked when anyone beat him at a game. Remus was kicking at the man and wriggling like a worm. Remus kicked the man again and again. The man muttered something and Remus kicked hard with both feet, hitting the man at the top of his legs. The man threw Remus to the floor and shouted some words that Cosmo had never heard before, bending over. He pulled his wand out and pointed it at Remus, who was lying on the floor where he had landed, looking very scared. Remus started to scream. Noo! What are you doing?! What's wrong with you?! Are you even human?! Stop treating Remus like that! Ah! That's so sad! Cosmo had to watch while Remus gets tortured! *cries even more* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Hermia was squeezing Caitlin’s hand and it hurt. Caitlin didn’t like the man in the doorway, she wasn’t sure why but his smile was all wrong. She hid behind Hermia; she didn’t want the man to look at her. She could hear Remus struggling against the big man who was holding him. Apart from Hagrid, he was the biggest man Caitlin had ever seen. There was a nasty thud and Hermia let go of her hand. Remus was lying on the floor, not moving and the big man was shouting at him. The big man twitched his wand and Remus started to scream. Caitlin looked away; she didn’t want to see Remus hurting. She saw a pretty pink light glowing in the fireplace and it gave her an idea. She grabbed Cosmo’s arm and pulled him back towards the fire. Everyone else was looking at Remus. Caitlin could see that her mummy’s eyes were open but she looked strange, as if she felt sick. Caitlin lifted up the seat of the bench in the inglenook and they climbed inside. Through the knot holes they could see Remus curled up on the floor. Aw! Poor Caitlin! That's so sad! She also had to watch while Remus got tortured! Well sort of. Wow! The pink light came! Is Amelia awake?! Wow! Hope she is! Hope she's ok! *crosses fingers and cries even more* OMG! What happened to Remus?! Why you evil gits! *takes out wand and stands in front of Remus* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Amelia could hear the sound of people talking. Her head throbbed painfully. She opened one eye experimentally. Her vision was blurred but she thought that she could see John Smith standing in her kitchen doorway.
I must have hit my head really hard, she thought vaguely as she closed her eye. Maybe I need some sleep. She began to loose consciousness again.
There was a nasty thud, shouting and a child started to scream.
Amelia’s eyes snapped open. Yes!  She's awake! Hope she's ok! *tries to cross fingers and realise that they are already crossed* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Teddy could feel blood dripping out of his nose. Without opening his eyes he tried to assess the situation. He could smell blood and Amelia’s hair. His hands were tied to the chair behind him. He could hear Smith and Hermia talking, what sounded like someone struggling to get away and someone else laughing. His pulse began to race when he realised that somewhere close a child was crying. The sound of flesh hitting a stone floor forced Teddy to concentrate harder. Was that one of his children? He could no longer hear crying and wondered what had happened to the child. He didn’t risk opening his eyes to check. He gripped the poles that formed the back of the chair and pulled. As they came free of the seat, someone started to scream. Yes! Teddy forced the poles out of the seat! Yes! Go Teddy! Hope he manages to hex Smith (i'm still going to call him that) with something so good, he ends up in the Hospital Wing for eternity and beyond! *crosses toes for extra measure* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Remus watched Tonks as she danced around, her hips swaying in time to the music. He was just beginning to think that she was quite a good dancer when she became entangled with another girl and started to fall. He managed to catch her before she hit the floor.
“It’s the whisky.” She blushed furiously.
“Of course it is.”
“You’re such a gentleman Remus.” She smiled up at him softly “Most other men would have just let me fall.”
“I’ll never let you fall Dora.” The words had escaped his heart before he could hold them back. It was his turn to blush. She looked surprised but pleased.
“Another drink?” He tried to cover his embarrassment at dropping his guard.
“Let’s risk it.” Aw! Cute, cute, cute, cute, cute! That was just really, really cute! Especially Remus saying that he'll never let Tonks fall. I couldn't help crying even more. Haha! Tonks' last comment was so funny! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom The man who was holding Remus was squeezing his arms really tightly. Remus wriggled and kicked, trying to get away from the man, trying to make him let go. He could see his parents at the table. They looked very hurt. He could see Hermia, standing in front of Cosmo and Caitlin. Caitlin was crying but Cosmo didn’t look scared. Remus hoped that his brother would be able to get back to the fire and go for help. He kicked the man again, aiming towards his belly.
“I’m going to kill your mother.” The man snarled in his ear. :faints: OMG! OMG! OMG! What did he just say he's going to do? That silly, silly man! Right. That's it. *points wand at this person* Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Anger flashed through Remus and he kicked at the man with every bit of strength he had. Both his feet connected with the man’s groin and he threw Remus to the floor. He tried to move but he couldn’t, his ribs hurt too much. He tried to take a deep breath but he couldn’t and he started to panic. The man was swearing at him now. A satisfied smile flickered across Remus’ face; he’d managed to hurt the man. A warm, comforting presence spread around his chest and Remus felt protected. He looked down and saw something blue surrounding him. He looked up and saw the masked man draw his wand and then he felt fire burning in every fibre of his body. He screamed out as his eyes rolled back in his head. Ah! No! What do you think they're doing?! Stop torturing Remus, you evil gits! Wow! The blue orb! Hope he's ok! Quote:
Originally Posted by HannahLongbottom Let me know what you think of the multiple point of view thing. Some of you may notice that I have referenced a drabble in the flashback (yet again). The angular singer is Jarvis Cocker of Pulp and the song is She's A Lady.
Have you entered the Teddy Lupin Fanclub Competitions? No, I hear you say? Well why ever not?! OMG! Such a long comment! Haha! I think i took up most of Page 8! Wow! I don't mind the multiple view thing. It's your story, you can do whatever you like with it. I can try taking part in the competition but i'm no good at graphics or writing! OMG! I just realised. Is this story nearly over? Is this the penultimate part? *whimpers and cries even more* I'm sorry i'm too enthusiastic (again). This time i had too much chocolate! Hehe! Great post! Loved it! Can't wait for more!
Kita
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