*Teddy & Ottery walk in read the sign* O: I was actually looking for a candy shop but ...
T: *smacks Otty* Read it!
O: *rubs head where Teddy smacked him*

O: Nice picture but now onto the poem ...


I have to admit that's a nice title.


Okay, so let me start by saying ... you chose a very seirous topyic to write on and I think that's brilliant. Seriously. Poetry is about the more passionate, most powerful moments about ... well it can be about anything but you chose to write about something epic and ...all I can say is: Wow.

One, because that's a meaty subject and a lot of people might have been scared off by it, you're brave.

Two, because you write it so well. You're right there at the start. Harry's thinking about everything that's just happened and he's walking to certain death ... honestly I think you wrote it sooooooooooo well. The grammar could use some help but who am I to talk, right? Neways, grammar aside, the words you chose and how you presented them is just beautiful. Seriously.

You are as good a poet as you are a writer Xavier. And you already know I think you're a brilliant writer. *insert endless blushing on your part here*

What I highlighted that is brilliant by itself in the context of the whole poem. I mean, you point out all that sacrifice to save Harry because he's going to defeat Voldemort and what then? In the end, is it for nothing? Harry has to give himself up to save everyone else, too. The duality and the circularity of it in itself is poetic but ... wow, seriously, brilliant.

It's sad the way you show, very graphically and beautifully for all it's horror the school we all love so well. Harry hasn't seen it since his 6th year and to have it be all that way ... that's sad. You show it so well.

Here, well what can I say? You give us a glimpse into the DA. Harry's friends are fighting for him alongside him and you show it so well in these tiny fragments of scene, what poetry can't afford to do is waste loads of pages on a character or a scene and you say it so well in a few words. It's ... well it's wow.
Honestly, the most terrifying thing I would have thought would have been Mrs. Weasley taking on Bellatrix but that's just my opinion ...

And you didn't forget the heroes best mates and his greatest allies, but I have to criticize and please don't take it the wrong way, that they should have merited more than just a simple thought ... They've been with Harry all the time, surely he would have thought more about them at the end, no?

That is beautiful.

That was poignant ... very touching and sweetly sad. I like bittersweetness so this chord strikes the right note for me ...

Your poem reminds me of the last chapters so well. Brilliantly.

And of course, the price that must be paid ... for every life is bought with something ... as is every death. Brilliant. *fires the cannons for this poem* I think you should post this poem in the DA thread, it features the DA characters and it is quite beautiful. That's my own opinion.

To say I liked it is an understatement and I wish I could use it in one of my fics it's so brilliant. I look forward to reading more of your poems Xavier but, don't forget your fic, some of us like that too. You're a brilliant writer keep it up.