That was amazing! Every word is perfectly pitched, just wonderful.
I loved this bit
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firenjen
She looked up automatically. The sky was a deep, velvet purple, glittered with a thousand diamonds, each of which sparked to their own rhythm. And at that moment, she felt weightless. She had no troubles, or worries, or thoughts. Just those of the beautifulness of her surroundings. She could do anything tonight; she could fly and not fall, she could swim to the bottom of the lake and not drown, she could jump off of the highest turret of the castle, and land softly on her toes. It was a good night, she thought to herself.
but this was my favourite and I hate Malfoy!
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firenjen
Draco Malfoy reached out a white hand – made paler in the darkness. He put his arm around her waist, and curled her into him. She felt secure, locked against his chest. His other hand found the back of her head, and began to softly stoke her hair. She listened to the steady rhythm of his heart, his even breathing.
Keep up the good work! More please!