This is my first poem so please give me you honest opinions hope you like

Fear
i'm standing in front of him
frightened HELPLESS hopeless
my wand is thrown across the grass
he smiles his terrifying smile
the graveyard fog brushes against my leg
i look into voldemort's vivid eyes
i want to SCREAM but there's a lummp in my throat
his pale,snakelike faces turns to face me
i want to RUN but my legs are paralyzed
he SMILES his crooked smile
the lump in my throat grows larger
He raises his wand and opens his mouth
A FLASH of bright green light blinds me
the lump in my throat is gone
the FEAR is gone
i realize then
death is peaceful

have my second poem please tell me what you think
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Choked Back Tears

I watch Harry walk away with her,with Cho
I watch him hold hands with her,
kiss her
love her.
While i sit here
in a dark corner alone
choking back my tears.
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i know its a lot shorter than the last one but still its a poem that dscribes what i feel right now and is'nt that what writing is about? anyway give me your honest thoughts about it