Thread: Jenn's Poems
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Old 08-18-2003, 02:04 AM   #18 (permalink)
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uh...Waiting was....slow. No offense, it was nice repatition and rythm, specially with that last "write".
It seemed dry, without much emotion. Try building up reasoning in the first couple stanzas, and then conclude cuz the last part was nice, but it didn't have a lot of affect cuz I didn't have much understanding of why it was that way.
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