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Old 06-02-2007, 07:28 PM   #134 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by The Otter Tree

That was a cool description, I especially love love the part I highlighted. Don't ask me why, but that sounded so cool seriously. Yup yup.
Glad you do my Otter Man....

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Originally Posted by YodaOts, the new treat for all Klingons...

You know it's a sign of true creativity when you make up your own stuff. Yup yup. I do it all the time, I mean not just creating original characters, or making up stories, but I mean inventing creatures and things, I think that's neat and brilliant and sadly not lots of readers know that takes a lot of effort. So yay for Wargltof ... sounds like something the Klingons would call each other
*grinslikemadcowandattacksOtty*


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Originally Posted by Hehehe, he's afraid...
Dood, Cendie's tough.
I like that in us girls Dont worry! She doesn't attack often!

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Originally Posted by Professor Otter
Actually Lari, that should have been written like this:



I don't know if I mentioned it before but every time a new person speaks you need to start a new paragraph so that the readers don't get confused. If I did, Sorry don't mean to be all repetitive. You know I wuv you Lari Hatari.
Okay! That makes sense! Thankies for the tip Otty! I wonder if my English teacher will get annoyied if I do that in my stories she doesn't like to waste space *pointstocontrolfreak*

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Originally Posted by XD Otty, Rane's #1 fan...:P
Did I mention I'm totally in love ♥ with Rane? Even his name sounds cool *insert drooly Otty here*


hehehehhehe....yay....

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Originally Posted by aw! My confused Otter!

*Ahem* Aside from the fact that Sam is hot ... *cough* the part I bolded should have been a separate paragraph because now you're talking about Sam and not Rane, so it's a bit confusing, but ... I totally loved the descriptions Lari. Yay, the boy's are so cute. I hope you write loads more about them, I'm so like Rane ... leave all the studying until the last minute ZOMG! But I always ace my exams maybe?
ehheheheheh I think I'll give Rane a ship...

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Originally Posted by Rane+Sam=Flashback *writes*

Just a suggestion Lari, but I think you should maybe do a flashback or something to show us how Sam and Rane became friends, I think it would be cute. Maybe do it as a separate story ... I'd like to know the story ... please?
I think I will! That would be cool since I've already done one for Cendie and Ari...

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Originally Posted by aw poor Otter's confused again!

^^ Now what I did here Lari Lunari, is I split up your paragraphs (red for Sam & pink for Ari), you should compare it to the original just to see how mine is easier to read. You can tell when someone new is speaking or if it's Sam or Arora more easily because every time the voice changes you start a new paragraph. Yes I know I'm like a boring old English teacher but we do this in all the languages for a reason. To make it easier to read. That said, I loved the way Sam was all excited when he saw Ari can you say love? <--Otty shipper!!!!!!!11111
You know...when I read that keeping your points in mind...I got confused! I have some editing to do! Aw! I need a English teacher! You are my Prof Otter! hehehhe! I loved writing that bit...

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Originally Posted by Snape? EEK!

I loved how you described that oh and no one wants detention with Professor Snape
hehehehe I think I would spear the chicken if I got detention.... Okay so it's not that bad! Snape = me ....

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Originally Posted by No Otty! You no slow!

Okay so this whole paragraph confused me. It seemed like Sam's thoughts were in light blue, and again, everyone is speaking in the same paragraph so it gets confusing as to who says what ... Sorry loves, but ... especially that "...with a boy?" comment sorry sweetie, I don't get what's going on here? Maybe I'm just slow ...
ehehehheheh I really need to edit my posts now lol I think I'll do an edit on that bit and tell you when you can read it...hopefully it won't be confusing! another post that got me going...No wonder he's confused!

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Originally Posted by A/S? *love*

Now that was just ... bloody cute ... *sniffles* I knew I should ship A/S. They're cute Lari ...
hee hee....I'm so going to enjoy writing the next few posts!

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Originally Posted by Comedy? Me? :D

That was just funny. Seriously. Lol. Too cool! You should put more funny stuff in your story ... please, funny is good. Give us more funny.
hehehehe I'll try It usually comes with inspiration! *thinks*....*waits*

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Originally Posted by Otter Man!

Suspenseful But I'm done with the first page Yay!!!!!!!11111111 Just don't let it be something super ... uhm, not dangerous Don't PAMS until I catch up Lari and remember Lari ... I am your father ... *whoosh*
Yay! First chapter edits! At least when I'm done it will be all grammar perfect thanks to my Otter Man! I think you might enjoy that post Me father? Oh and I've indexed my first post so you can go straight to the first four Chapters without having to look through the posts

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Those posts are great! Just great! 100%-ly...awesome.
Mindy! You always ready my updates... I ♥ you! *madattackingglomps*...
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