Hey, I've been away a while and see that someone has posted an EEFFD at last. Good on you for trying.

With regard to feedback, I did find the story a bit jumpy and found that it bounced from theme to theme in awkward ways. The intent of the story was hard to follow and I guess you were aiming for farcical and over the top in your tone. I can see how that might work and be appealing to younger audiences, but it wasn't to my taste in reading. I'm more of a subtle sarcasm kind of guy.

Nonetheless, good on you for having a go. Perhaps we may see more EEFFD's in the future ? I could be enticed back to the thread to write more if we have a few more participants.

Regards

Durro